Bruce-San Is In Love
how to write a tanka28 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good morning Alvin
I apologize for being so tardy in providing a review for this piece. Your creative writing skills shine beautifully as you blend humor, strong imagery and instruction in basic tanka in a delightful conversational presentation. It was a fun read.
I hope you will write a sequel that will evolve the Tanka 101 instruction to a Tanka 302 instruction level.
Ray
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Good morning Alvin
I apologize for being so tardy in providing a review for this piece. Your creative writing skills shine beautifully as you blend humor, strong imagery and instruction in basic tanka in a delightful conversational presentation. It was a fun read.
I hope you will write a sequel that will evolve the Tanka 101 instruction to a Tanka 302 instruction level.
Ray
Comment Written 16-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Imperial Court Tanka starts October 15. See you there! (you've taken the tanka course, right?)
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Apparently, I haven't.
R
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OH, well, I'll do a couple of private tutorial sessions with you.
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I thought "tanka" was a prerequisite for Imperial Court Tanka.
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Thank you
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I'll resolve that, Alvin.
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How so? If I may be so nosy...
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
A belated review here. I read this earlier but did not get around to commenting on it. This is a most entertaining way to teach about how to write tanka; it is both funny and informative. The bit of good news that stood out for me is that personification is allowed in tanka! Best regards, Jeanie
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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A belated review here. I read this earlier but did not get around to commenting on it. This is a most entertaining way to teach about how to write tanka; it is both funny and informative. The bit of good news that stood out for me is that personification is allowed in tanka! Best regards, Jeanie
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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I thought you would be happy about that. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from EXMAN. nffc
Very clever Alv.
You should get a job in marketing. That way you wouldn't have to worry about writing poems to buy your oysters.
I have to say I quite like Bruce-san's style.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Very clever Alv.
You should get a job in marketing. That way you wouldn't have to worry about writing poems to buy your oysters.
I have to say I quite like Bruce-san's style.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I knew you would! Thanks for a great review; I actually used to do marketing for a theatre company!
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Ayone who gives you that much grief has got to be a class act.
Comment from Janilou
I really enjoyed this, Al. You are a master teacher. Too bad some pupils are un-teachable! :-) I thought you brought this short non-fiction essay to life. I could picture standing there looking over your shoulder. Something that's easier to do with fiction than the re-telling of reality, and hence the six stars! Forgive me if this is choppy, I'm in a hurry this morning, as I have a lot to get done before I leave for a 32 hour stretch of work! I look forward to reading more of your poetry very soon.
Jan
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I really enjoyed this, Al. You are a master teacher. Too bad some pupils are un-teachable! :-) I thought you brought this short non-fiction essay to life. I could picture standing there looking over your shoulder. Something that's easier to do with fiction than the re-telling of reality, and hence the six stars! Forgive me if this is choppy, I'm in a hurry this morning, as I have a lot to get done before I leave for a 32 hour stretch of work! I look forward to reading more of your poetry very soon.
Jan
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Oh, it's so good to see you. For some reason, I have been thinking of you lately. Thanks for the exceptional review. I am jazzed.
Comment from JeffreyStone
This piece is subtle, humerous and informativie--hard to achieve in an eessay. It shows your diversity, keen ear for the right words and your knowledge of the poetic forms. Well done. JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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This piece is subtle, humerous and informativie--hard to achieve in an eessay. It shows your diversity, keen ear for the right words and your knowledge of the poetic forms. Well done. JeffreyStone
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the exceptional review; I am so appreciative.
Comment from Matoshka
I enjoyed this very much. The simple way you explain Haiku and the Tanka. I had no idea, so I have been writing them so very wrong. This was so informative to me and I hope to others. Blessings and thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2011
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I enjoyed this very much. The simple way you explain Haiku and the Tanka. I had no idea, so I have been writing them so very wrong. This was so informative to me and I hope to others. Blessings and thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2011
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am most appreciative. Out of curiosity, are you thinking of taking my Shorter Poetic Forms class in October? It's an excellent introduction to haiku and tanka.
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First, you are very welcome, and yes, I am. I am looking forward to one of your classes and one of Brookes. I will talk with you later. Blessings
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Alvin,
You did a superb job of explaining the fundamentals of tanka in an interesting and easy to remember, understandable way. You made tanka sound so easy... though I know it's not entirely so. Using dialogue made this lesson fun and enjoyable. I now, suddenly, have a much clearer idea of what it's all about (or so it seems!) :-)
Thank you for composing this excellent bit of masterful writing. Warm regards, Purr ^-^
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Hi Alvin,
You did a superb job of explaining the fundamentals of tanka in an interesting and easy to remember, understandable way. You made tanka sound so easy... though I know it's not entirely so. Using dialogue made this lesson fun and enjoyable. I now, suddenly, have a much clearer idea of what it's all about (or so it seems!) :-)
Thank you for composing this excellent bit of masterful writing. Warm regards, Purr ^-^
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for an exceptional review. I am extremely grateful.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Al,
What a clever way to introduce a tanka poem to one who is obviously poetry challenged! As always you wrote this well while at the same time teaching to everyone who reads this story. It is laced with humor which, to me, is a wonderful and effective way to teach. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Hi Al,
What a clever way to introduce a tanka poem to one who is obviously poetry challenged! As always you wrote this well while at the same time teaching to everyone who reads this story. It is laced with humor which, to me, is a wonderful and effective way to teach. Well done, chey
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from BarnCat
I really enjoyed this "lesson" Alvin and am so looking forward to class starting. Loved the Remnd me never to call you Alv. By th way -- Blau Oyster on Sammish Island in Washington has excellent oysters! Now that I'm back in Wyoming, I miss the fresh seafood. I think there may be a tanka in there . . . D
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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I really enjoyed this "lesson" Alvin and am so looking forward to class starting. Loved the Remnd me never to call you Alv. By th way -- Blau Oyster on Sammish Island in Washington has excellent oysters! Now that I'm back in Wyoming, I miss the fresh seafood. I think there may be a tanka in there . . . D
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Yes, I think there is. Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from ravenriter
Loved the dry humor contained in this! Loved the long-suffering air of the main character. Most amusing.
Only a couple suggestions: in my opinion the third sentence would work better if hyphenated (None of this Americanized put-as-many-flavors-as-you-can-in-a-dish" for me), as you are speaking of one single entity.
Further on you write, "Not when you think of Champagne, er, bubbles, what do you think of?" Did you mean, "Now when you think of Champagne, er, bubbles ..."?
I enjoyed the read, thanks!
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Loved the dry humor contained in this! Loved the long-suffering air of the main character. Most amusing.
Only a couple suggestions: in my opinion the third sentence would work better if hyphenated (None of this Americanized put-as-many-flavors-as-you-can-in-a-dish" for me), as you are speaking of one single entity.
Further on you write, "Not when you think of Champagne, er, bubbles, what do you think of?" Did you mean, "Now when you think of Champagne, er, bubbles ..."?
I enjoyed the read, thanks!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for those catches. You're a good copy editor. I incorporated both suggestions.
