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A haiki about this generation
3 total reviews
Comment from
Maureen's Pen
Very deep thoughts on this one. I liked the way it connected the dreams to be and their own awareness of awakening. Interesting way the words connected within me...I Could reflect on this and get a lot of deeper introspective thoughts.
I loved it for that reason.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
Thank you very much Maureen, you're too kind.
Comment from
sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, ironicmoose, but your syllable count is wrong, the first line should have 5, the second one 7 and the third one 5. yours is in a 7 5 7
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
Yes! I chose to invert the rules (perhaps unwisely). Thanks for the review
Comment from
Dawn of Tomorrow
I like the sound of that awaiting awakening line. I think I would remove the commas from here they are not needed. Outside of that a most enjoyable little poem.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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