Steve's Story-Poems
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Comment from juliaSjames
You're on a roll, Steve.
This is yet another fantastic piece of word play that uses Latin phrases to spice up the fun. I tried, but it was impossible to pick a fovourite line!
Keep them coming. Laughter is good medicine.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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You're on a roll, Steve.
This is yet another fantastic piece of word play that uses Latin phrases to spice up the fun. I tried, but it was impossible to pick a fovourite line!
Keep them coming. Laughter is good medicine.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Thank you so much for the Latin lessons. I never knew it could be this fun. The poem is hilarious and had me amused from the start. This is a most original and creative write. The structure is nice and the rhymes are great. I found it witty and entertaining to read. Michelle
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much for the Latin lessons. I never knew it could be this fun. The poem is hilarious and had me amused from the start. This is a most original and creative write. The structure is nice and the rhymes are great. I found it witty and entertaining to read. Michelle
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Michelle.
Much more fun than real Latin lessons, I can assure you!
Steve
Comment from RavensWord
Ok you've reached my limit here. I decided to read your dictionary first then the poem, that way I got enjoy the alliteration and antithesis. (Still had to go back and review.) I stand in awe at your skill in being able to mix poetic pros utilizing second languages. The former is difficult enough without adding the burden of the later.
Many kudos.
PS-Your poetic license is excused.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Ok you've reached my limit here. I decided to read your dictionary first then the poem, that way I got enjoy the alliteration and antithesis. (Still had to go back and review.) I stand in awe at your skill in being able to mix poetic pros utilizing second languages. The former is difficult enough without adding the burden of the later.
Many kudos.
PS-Your poetic license is excused.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much for the kind review and the six stars. It was a bit of a stretch getting some of these phrases to fit in with rhythm and rhyme, not to mention making a story of sorts...
I need a rest now.
Steve
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You are very welcome and indeed you deserve a rest.
Comment from KiwiGal
Once again, my rating only goes up to 5 stars, but you know what you're worth with this one!
I started laughing as soon as I read the Explanation line.
My hat goes off to you; not only half of it is in another language, but it RHYMES ... AND it makes sense AND IT'S VERY FUNNY!!
And now I'll going to find the French. As you know, it is my first second language, so j'ai hate la lire ...
I've been so busy this last week. Won't be free of it all until Wednesday, but I always make time to read your contributions.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Once again, my rating only goes up to 5 stars, but you know what you're worth with this one!
I started laughing as soon as I read the Explanation line.
My hat goes off to you; not only half of it is in another language, but it RHYMES ... AND it makes sense AND IT'S VERY FUNNY!!
And now I'll going to find the French. As you know, it is my first second language, so j'ai hate la lire ...
I've been so busy this last week. Won't be free of it all until Wednesday, but I always make time to read your contributions.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thanks again. Is the wedding all done, or is that what's keeping you busy till Wenesday?
Bad news from home this week - my Mum has cancer - not good - my passport's not even current so have to get onto that ASAP and check out air-fares...
Steve
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Wedding on Saturday. I was with the donkey - big panier baskets on him with petals in to throw over the happy couple on exiting the church. Then I gave children rides on him (he was borrowed from a friend).
Sunday big luncheon here for over 200 - buffet. Running round emptying ashtrays and collecting plates, glasses etc. General dogsbody. Very successful though. Still got 6 people here until Wednesday. Must be on hand. Then alone for a month before they come down around Bastille Day for a week or two. All over in August - I leave for new pastures .. literally - a rural property over the other side of France near Bordeaux.
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
Clever! Were you a Latin teacher as well ;P I think I liked the French one better, probably because the flow was smoother, but then, I always find Latin rather 'jerky' (sorry for the puns).
The last thing we wanted coitus interruptus.
* word left out: The last thing we wanted *was* coitus interruptus.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Clever! Were you a Latin teacher as well ;P I think I liked the French one better, probably because the flow was smoother, but then, I always find Latin rather 'jerky' (sorry for the puns).
The last thing we wanted coitus interruptus.
* word left out: The last thing we wanted *was* coitus interruptus.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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No, never had a chance to teach Latin - wouldn't have minded...
I know this one doesn't flow as well - you're right, the phrases just don't fit as nicely into the required rhythm and I lost it altogether at the end.
I left out the 'was' deliberately, trying to get it to flow a little better...
Steve
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In that case, put a comma after 'wanted' and that'll fix it :}
Comment from JimmytheStone
That was incredibly creative use of verse.
As entertaining as it is amusing and confusing.
I want to thank you for taking the time to put something so complicated together.
Outstanding use of talent!
Jimmy
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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That was incredibly creative use of verse.
As entertaining as it is amusing and confusing.
I want to thank you for taking the time to put something so complicated together.
Outstanding use of talent!
Jimmy
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Jimmy.
knew those years of Latin would come in useful for something sometime!
Steve
Comment from barkingdog
Top notch poem, show-off. First French and now Latin. What next. Martian maybe, kiwi(steveh)?
This is almost an X-rated poem. It's really fun and funny. As usual you have taken something to its heights.
Your author notes were essential. Thank you.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Top notch poem, show-off. First French and now Latin. What next. Martian maybe, kiwi(steveh)?
This is almost an X-rated poem. It's really fun and funny. As usual you have taken something to its heights.
Your author notes were essential. Thank you.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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How about Swahili? Actually a logical next step would be italian, Spanish or German, but I'd only be guessing my way through those! Anyway, the devil keeps taking over once I start writing and makes it naughtier than I intended!
Steve
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The naughty was nice not nasty. That I likey much. :) barking dog
Comment from the blue pixel
The title had me laughing before I'd even read a word of this Steve. So here is your second poem on languages. Could you have chosen a more difficult one? lol You are forgiven a fwe minor metres hiccups. Who cares about them when this is so clever. You have used them all and then some. If I knew how to say this one is too cool for school in Latin, I would, but I don't, so I won't. xx Pix
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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The title had me laughing before I'd even read a word of this Steve. So here is your second poem on languages. Could you have chosen a more difficult one? lol You are forgiven a fwe minor metres hiccups. Who cares about them when this is so clever. You have used them all and then some. If I knew how to say this one is too cool for school in Latin, I would, but I don't, so I won't. xx Pix
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Lost the plot with the meter in the last couple of verses - tried to fix it up a little but just confused myself and just wanted to get the bloody thing posted!
Thank goodness I don't know any more languages...
Steve
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I really wouldn't be worried about it Steve. It was a mammotyh effort, it really was. Congratulations. Perfect metre using all those Latin expressions would almost certainly be perfectly impossible. xx Pix
Comment from jackpeg
Another very clever play on Foreign terms to go along side "Pardon My French." Glad you gave readers a heads-up on that magnificent piece. Not just poetic, these two, but scholarly.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Another very clever play on Foreign terms to go along side "Pardon My French." Glad you gave readers a heads-up on that magnificent piece. Not just poetic, these two, but scholarly.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thanks!
I'm not too sure about scholarly either - can you just imagine a true latin scholar grimacing as he reads 'in my loco parentis'...
Steve
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If he grimmaced, it was with laughter.
Comment from manicblue
Ha! How clever of you! That was delightful. I saw too late the translations at the end but (oh my ::blushing:: ) I got the idea! This was a very well conceiled X-rated tryst. But absolutely wonderful. ::blushing again:: Enjoyable to read too! :)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Ha! How clever of you! That was delightful. I saw too late the translations at the end but (oh my ::blushing:: ) I got the idea! This was a very well conceiled X-rated tryst. But absolutely wonderful. ::blushing again:: Enjoyable to read too! :)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you - the devil took over and made me put in the naughty bits, but I tried tokeep it at least somewhere near the boundaries...
Welcome to FanStory BTW.
Steve
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Thanks for the welcome Steve, I love it here! Ah, the devil made you do it. :D
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Truly - I start off with the most saintly of intentions...
Steve
