Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Part 2 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from The Stranger
Hi Barbara, its a pleasure to read your work as always, you have a great talent for writing, as ever your writing never ceases to impress me with your attention to detail
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Hi Barbara, its a pleasure to read your work as always, you have a great talent for writing, as ever your writing never ceases to impress me with your attention to detail
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from jadapenn
Oh, dear. Anna has gone into a good hiding place. I don't blame her. Was that her on Troy's phone. He should take a closer look. I like the way you've developed Paul. Naughty man that he is wanting to steal another scone. lol.
Well done. luv jada
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Oh, dear. Anna has gone into a good hiding place. I don't blame her. Was that her on Troy's phone. He should take a closer look. I like the way you've developed Paul. Naughty man that he is wanting to steal another scone. lol.
Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Another great chapter my friend. I hope the sketch will help them locate her before its too late (its always good to have a sketch artist in the family). I can't wait for the next chapter.
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Another great chapter my friend. I hope the sketch will help them locate her before its too late (its always good to have a sketch artist in the family). I can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an exceptional chapter, even though it's a bridge one. You do a really good job of defining your characters and having them interact. For example:
"Only one cookie, dear," called a female voice from another room. This is excellent. Betty has eyes in the back of her head.
I found nothing to criticize.
Dave
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Barbara,
This is an exceptional chapter, even though it's a bridge one. You do a really good job of defining your characters and having them interact. For example:
"Only one cookie, dear," called a female voice from another room. This is excellent. Betty has eyes in the back of her head.
I found nothing to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank your for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from dbmccarter
Interesting addition to the story. I think the best thing you did was have Anna disappear. This moves it to the next event nicely. Great art work.
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Interesting addition to the story. I think the best thing you did was have Anna disappear. This moves it to the next event nicely. Great art work.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from fairy77
Very interesting the stories improving.The detail you put into character sketch is amazing.It's such a good message and truly frightening that the children are present.Great plot and dialogue.beth.
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Very interesting the stories improving.The detail you put into character sketch is amazing.It's such a good message and truly frightening that the children are present.Great plot and dialogue.beth.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from patwannabe
barbara this part isn't what you'd call exciting, but we have to get in some low key stuff every now and then, don't we. Sketchers are amazing people.
You did a great job putting this together. Would you happen to have some more of those cookies? pat
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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barbara this part isn't what you'd call exciting, but we have to get in some low key stuff every now and then, don't we. Sketchers are amazing people.
You did a great job putting this together. Would you happen to have some more of those cookies? pat
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, we need boring posts to put the story together.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Barbara:
Another fine chapter. The picture you selected to go
with this is just perfect as those who are abused have
hollow eyes that seem to see nothing and their personage
just seems to shrink within themselves.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Barbara:
Another fine chapter. The picture you selected to go
with this is just perfect as those who are abused have
hollow eyes that seem to see nothing and their personage
just seems to shrink within themselves.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from quashdog
You manage to give a good description of the relationships between Troy, his mom and dad while at the same time moving the drama along. I hope they find that woman soon.
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You manage to give a good description of the relationships between Troy, his mom and dad while at the same time moving the drama along. I hope they find that woman soon.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
I am really trying to figure out where she could have gone. I am sure if I am patient, I will find out, ha ha. Seems very mysterious, though, since she has no friends and no money. Great chapter.
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I am really trying to figure out where she could have gone. I am sure if I am patient, I will find out, ha ha. Seems very mysterious, though, since she has no friends and no money. Great chapter.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
