Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Part 2 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from eliz100
This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. You are doing a good job keeping the suspense going. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. You are doing a good job keeping the suspense going. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
A lawyer with his own private investigator and an aunt who's a scketch artist. What a great family to have looking out for you, LoL. Or Looking for you. Excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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A lawyer with his own private investigator and an aunt who's a scketch artist. What a great family to have looking out for you, LoL. Or Looking for you. Excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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I agree. I am sure I can fit some other special people, also. (LOL) Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I'm glad Troy and Paul have a plan to find Anna. If she is not in a homeless shelter and has no money where could she go to be safe? No doubt she if very scared and I feel sorry for her. I just can't imagine what women do when they finally have the courage to leave an abusive husband. You write each one of these chapters with skill and make them interesting, leaving me wanting more. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Hi Barbara,
I'm glad Troy and Paul have a plan to find Anna. If she is not in a homeless shelter and has no money where could she go to be safe? No doubt she if very scared and I feel sorry for her. I just can't imagine what women do when they finally have the courage to leave an abusive husband. You write each one of these chapters with skill and make them interesting, leaving me wanting more. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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I appreciate your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from onceinabluemoon
Another fine installment. Your dialogue is natural sounding, and the story also rings true. A very nice attribute, which is often hard to come by. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Another fine installment. Your dialogue is natural sounding, and the story also rings true. A very nice attribute, which is often hard to come by. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
This story is so true to many women are held captive to men who abuse them. I can relate to this as I have seen someone I love very much abused. The description of your photo is very reveling. You revel strong images that draw on emotions.Two little area's need to be checked "pretenting to tap his Mother gave him hurt". And extra steaks on hand no question mark needed. Just minor
mistakes overlooked and I would be proud to recommend this emotional story. Rita
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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This story is so true to many women are held captive to men who abuse them. I can relate to this as I have seen someone I love very much abused. The description of your photo is very reveling. You revel strong images that draw on emotions.Two little area's need to be checked "pretenting to tap his Mother gave him hurt". And extra steaks on hand no question mark needed. Just minor
mistakes overlooked and I would be proud to recommend this emotional story. Rita
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check those areas out.
Comment from Collie-Bug
I like this chapter, good work. Couple things:
Anna's parents HAVE no idea where she's hiding.
The part that says "only one cookie" called a female voice...doesn't make sense...usually you say that when you don't know who the voice is but it's his mother so you should say that it is his mother.
I would rework the part after the *** too much telling and not enough showing.
Good work overall!! Keep at it :)
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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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I like this chapter, good work. Couple things:
Anna's parents HAVE no idea where she's hiding.
The part that says "only one cookie" called a female voice...doesn't make sense...usually you say that when you don't know who the voice is but it's his mother so you should say that it is his mother.
I would rework the part after the *** too much telling and not enough showing.
Good work overall!! Keep at it :)
V
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
Thank you for your review.
Comment from boomachicka
Interesting story. It is hard to review a chapter when it I have not read it from the start, but this was easy to get into. I cannot wait to read more. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Interesting story. It is hard to review a chapter when it I have not read it from the start, but this was easy to get into. I cannot wait to read more. Nicely done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jclark
I enjoy the character interaction and that there are "breaks" within the story making it easy to connect with each person and their role.
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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I enjoy the character interaction and that there are "breaks" within the story making it easy to connect with each person and their role.
Judy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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I try to hit natural breaks within the chapters. The chapters are too long to post. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Terror2s
I didn't notice any errors. I liked all your statistics at the end of the story. It helped hammar home the importance of your topic. Very nice writing style. Terror
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I didn't notice any errors. I liked all your statistics at the end of the story. It helped hammar home the importance of your topic. Very nice writing style. Terror
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from axelbeariter
You have written s great setup chapter precluding what I surmise will be the search for Anna. Well done, but I couldn't stop craving thbose cookies. After all my cholesterol is only around 160.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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You have written s great setup chapter precluding what I surmise will be the search for Anna. Well done, but I couldn't stop craving thbose cookies. After all my cholesterol is only around 160.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2011
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I have had some request for the cookies and a few for the steak. I appreciate your kind review.
