Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Part 2 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
Clearly in spite of the tragic beginnings, Troy was blessed with a loving and supportive family. He really turned out to be one of the lucky few. Which makes his character even more sympathetic. As a reader you really care.
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Clearly in spite of the tragic beginnings, Troy was blessed with a loving and supportive family. He really turned out to be one of the lucky few. Which makes his character even more sympathetic. As a reader you really care.
Comment Written 17-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you for sticking with my novel. I am honored.
Comment from rzubey
Nice introduction to Margaret, but you should have made it more clear that Margaret is a relative. I thought Margaret was just a friend of Betty's. Otherwise the chapter moved along nicely. I'm still curious about what motivates Troy, but I'm glad he's going after Anna all the same.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Nice introduction to Margaret, but you should have made it more clear that Margaret is a relative. I thought Margaret was just a friend of Betty's. Otherwise the chapter moved along nicely. I'm still curious about what motivates Troy, but I'm glad he's going after Anna all the same.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Betty entered with a plate full of homemade [what kind?] cookies.
"After all these years[,] you haven't figured out Mom's extra traits either, have you?"
Roberta
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Betty entered with a plate full of homemade [what kind?] cookies.
"After all these years[,] you haven't figured out Mom's extra traits either, have you?"
Roberta
Comment Written 16-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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thank you.
Comment from Queenise
Another wonderful installement that I have just finished reading. It makes you think and makes you want to do something to help. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Another wonderful installement that I have just finished reading. It makes you think and makes you want to do something to help. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your support. I appreciate it.
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Happy to oblige. Queenise
Comment from MS Writer
The continuing story of Anna is riveting. I enjoy the way you write, the descriptions, characters, and dialogue. I also appreciate the notes that you provide. The statistics are appalling.
Hope you are feeling better.
Michele
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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The continuing story of Anna is riveting. I enjoy the way you write, the descriptions, characters, and dialogue. I also appreciate the notes that you provide. The statistics are appalling.
Hope you are feeling better.
Michele
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Readywriter52
Troy's family seems very nice. The home has a friendly warm feeling around it. They don't know where went. They seem determined to help her. Maybe they should let her go. She might be safer if no one knows where she is.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Troy's family seems very nice. The home has a friendly warm feeling around it. They don't know where went. They seem determined to help her. Maybe they should let her go. She might be safer if no one knows where she is.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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That's a very good thought. We must keep Anna safe. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Wow! Where is Anna is she safe? These are the questions that I ask myself when reading this chapter. I like this a lot its a good read. Keep it coming. LOL
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Wow! Where is Anna is she safe? These are the questions that I ask myself when reading this chapter. I like this a lot its a good read. Keep it coming. LOL
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
This is a relatively short chapter in your book but it makes for interesting reading. There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - a sip of ice tea .... I suggest - a sip of iced-tea .... (you repeat 'ice tea' further on as well ...)
* You have - his dad ... I suggest - his Dad ....
* You have - happy you could come on such short notice.
The term is usually ... at such short notice ...
* You have - I'm sure you won't mind visiting with these two while I finish in the kitchen .... I suggest - I'm sure you won't mind chatting to these two while I finish ....
I certainly look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ...... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Hullo Barbara ....
This is a relatively short chapter in your book but it makes for interesting reading. There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - a sip of ice tea .... I suggest - a sip of iced-tea .... (you repeat 'ice tea' further on as well ...)
* You have - his dad ... I suggest - his Dad ....
* You have - happy you could come on such short notice.
The term is usually ... at such short notice ...
* You have - I'm sure you won't mind visiting with these two while I finish in the kitchen .... I suggest - I'm sure you won't mind chatting to these two while I finish ....
I certainly look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ...... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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You have - his dad ... I suggest - his Dad .... his dad is correct because of the his.
The other areas I will take care of. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
I hope the husband doesn't have as many brains as these guys. I think the story is growing nicely and thanks for adding new characters a little at a time.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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I hope the husband doesn't have as many brains as these guys. I think the story is growing nicely and thanks for adding new characters a little at a time.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bulbul
The casual atmosphere of family having a light drink and eating homemade cookies against the idea of a young mother, who is a victim of abuse gone missing, and the characters who bring out the warm ties through the tone of light banter are all factors that hold the reader's interest from start to finish. The language is simple and flowing and an easy read.So, plot, mood of the scene, convincing characters and short lines of dialogue are all there for the reader to ask for more. Interesting work.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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The casual atmosphere of family having a light drink and eating homemade cookies against the idea of a young mother, who is a victim of abuse gone missing, and the characters who bring out the warm ties through the tone of light banter are all factors that hold the reader's interest from start to finish. The language is simple and flowing and an easy read.So, plot, mood of the scene, convincing characters and short lines of dialogue are all there for the reader to ask for more. Interesting work.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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It was a pleasure, barbara. bulbul
