Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from MS Writer
Happy to see that Anna's parents have given in and are willing to help. Anxious to read more about this wonderful man and this poor abused woman. Well written with great characters and dialogue. Love reading your work. Take care of yourself...don't get too tired.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Happy to see that Anna's parents have given in and are willing to help. Anxious to read more about this wonderful man and this poor abused woman. Well written with great characters and dialogue. Love reading your work. Take care of yourself...don't get too tired.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I do hope Troy can find Anna before her abusive husband does. No telling what he will do if he finds her first, but I fear for Anna's life. I'm glad
Anna's father cares for her even though he doesn't want anyone to know that...I feel sorry for her mom. Another excellent chapter in this fine story. I was glad for your notes and happy that you are happy. Well done....blessings, chdey
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Hi Barbara,
I do hope Troy can find Anna before her abusive husband does. No telling what he will do if he finds her first, but I fear for Anna's life. I'm glad
Anna's father cares for her even though he doesn't want anyone to know that...I feel sorry for her mom. Another excellent chapter in this fine story. I was glad for your notes and happy that you are happy. Well done....blessings, chdey
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from adewpearl
You can certainly see why she has a hard time getting close to people and trusting them when she went from parents who rejected her to a husband who beat her. Excellent use of dialogue and good character development. I like how you show the dad is not one-dimensional - the old fart really does have a soft side :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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You can certainly see why she has a hard time getting close to people and trusting them when she went from parents who rejected her to a husband who beat her. Excellent use of dialogue and good character development. I like how you show the dad is not one-dimensional - the old fart really does have a soft side :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
"Not the best food, but I'll fill you."
[I'll SHOULD BE it'll]
THE CHAPTER TAKES YOU FORWARD. WAS VERY GLAD THE DAD WAS NOT AS HARD NOSED AS IMPLICATED AT FIRST. GOOD JOB AND STAY HAPPY!!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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"Not the best food, but I'll fill you."
[I'll SHOULD BE it'll]
THE CHAPTER TAKES YOU FORWARD. WAS VERY GLAD THE DAD WAS NOT AS HARD NOSED AS IMPLICATED AT FIRST. GOOD JOB AND STAY HAPPY!!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for catching that. I hate making those dumb mistakes.
Comment from Connie P
I didn't think Anna would run to her family. Troy is very dedicated and she's lucky to have met someone like him. I'm still worried about Bobby, if Anna's in a shelter she's not totally safe.
A computer crash ... yikes, it happened to me a few months ago, what a nightmare. Glad everything is going well.
Notes:
*hifalutin' *(highfalutin)
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"The misses*(missus) was worried about Anna.
*"Not the best food, but I'll fill you." *(It'll fill you??)
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I didn't think Anna would run to her family. Troy is very dedicated and she's lucky to have met someone like him. I'm still worried about Bobby, if Anna's in a shelter she's not totally safe.
A computer crash ... yikes, it happened to me a few months ago, what a nightmare. Glad everything is going well.
Notes:
*hifalutin' *(highfalutin)
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"The misses*(missus) was worried about Anna.
*"Not the best food, but I'll fill you." *(It'll fill you??)
Connie
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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hifalutin is spelled correctly according to my Webster's dictionary. I just rechecked. I will correct missus, and I've already corrected the it'll. Thank you.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Very well written. It kept my attention well. As I have not read other chapters I gave it an even higher ranking.When you can jump into the middle of a story and still enjoy the plot and understand all that is happening that is a great thing indeed. Descriptive imagery I liked it the most.Characters were real, and had power to last through the chapter. Well done.
Maureen
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Very well written. It kept my attention well. As I have not read other chapters I gave it an even higher ranking.When you can jump into the middle of a story and still enjoy the plot and understand all that is happening that is a great thing indeed. Descriptive imagery I liked it the most.Characters were real, and had power to last through the chapter. Well done.
Maureen
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dbmccarter
Your sure know how to hold the reader's attention. A look into her Mom and Dad moves the story along. The art work is great and will look forward to more.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Your sure know how to hold the reader's attention. A look into her Mom and Dad moves the story along. The art work is great and will look forward to more.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jgirlie152
This story is well written and interesting. I haven't read your other chapters, but will try, as I would like to know what Troy's problem is. Child or wife abuse is the bottom of the barrel, the worst crime (actually, sin) to be inflicted on someone. Will be looking forward to more.
Joan
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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This story is well written and interesting. I haven't read your other chapters, but will try, as I would like to know what Troy's problem is. Child or wife abuse is the bottom of the barrel, the worst crime (actually, sin) to be inflicted on someone. Will be looking forward to more.
Joan
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb,
I really like how you put in your chapter how concerned Anna's mom and ( finally her dad) are
Plus you have a great way to keep your chapters short, but so interesting.
Gert
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Hello Barb,
I really like how you put in your chapter how concerned Anna's mom and ( finally her dad) are
Plus you have a great way to keep your chapters short, but so interesting.
Gert
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I appreciate both.
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You are so welcome
Love
Gert
Comment from c_lucas
It is good to know that the parents still care about Anna and their grandson. I like the way you built the characters of the parents. Rugged by caring. You've earned the sixer.
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It is good to know that the parents still care about Anna and their grandson. I like the way you built the characters of the parents. Rugged by caring. You've earned the sixer.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
