Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Part 1, Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
I think you did a good job with Anna's parents, especially her father. You could've made him a complete hard ass, but his relenting after he thinks about things and his wife talks to him is more realistic. Grandchildren can change everything. And the diner's food gave Troy heartburn. I've been there, done that.
I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize in the text, but there is an unclear sentence in your author notes:
"I hope my post is works."
Sounds like you're having a good time. Are you off for the summer?
Dave
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Barbara,
I think you did a good job with Anna's parents, especially her father. You could've made him a complete hard ass, but his relenting after he thinks about things and his wife talks to him is more realistic. Grandchildren can change everything. And the diner's food gave Troy heartburn. I've been there, done that.
I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize in the text, but there is an unclear sentence in your author notes:
"I hope my post is works."
Sounds like you're having a good time. Are you off for the summer?
Dave
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Yes, I am off for the summer. I already have numerous doctor's appointments set up and I training to go to. I missed all the trainings last summer, so I am playing catch up. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Sounds like you are terribly busy-be sure and take care of yourself! Well written chapter. It is so frightening that she cannot be found-hopefully she is running and not in imminent danger. As alwats, thanks for addressing this issue!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Sounds like you are terribly busy-be sure and take care of yourself! Well written chapter. It is so frightening that she cannot be found-hopefully she is running and not in imminent danger. As alwats, thanks for addressing this issue!!! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dmjones
Good chapter Barbara. It's good to know that Anna's parents care. I didn't spot any spag and I thought it was well written. Warm regards, Donna
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Good chapter Barbara. It's good to know that Anna's parents care. I didn't spot any spag and I thought it was well written. Warm regards, Donna
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from lola29
Well, it's easy to discern why Anna went into hiding. I can't imagine a family disowning their own child, but some people, I guess, take the easy route. It seems her only friend is Troy, and he's not a bad friend to have.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Well, it's easy to discern why Anna went into hiding. I can't imagine a family disowning their own child, but some people, I guess, take the easy route. It seems her only friend is Troy, and he's not a bad friend to have.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I think Troy will be a very good friend to have. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
I was glad to see another chapter posted. It's another good one. Glad to hear you are staying busy with family and that you are happy. God bless you.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I was glad to see another chapter posted. It's another good one. Glad to hear you are staying busy with family and that you are happy. God bless you.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Yep, that old fart did care, but pretended it was only his wife. Mrs. White was right in saying that Louise already paid for her sins. The suspense hurts as I want to know where Anna is, but I'm enjoying very bit of the action anyway. An excellent story with believable characters in the parents. I wish you all the best. Michelle
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Yep, that old fart did care, but pretended it was only his wife. Mrs. White was right in saying that Louise already paid for her sins. The suspense hurts as I want to know where Anna is, but I'm enjoying very bit of the action anyway. An excellent story with believable characters in the parents. I wish you all the best. Michelle
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, I'm glad you're okay (What's HS?) This is interesting, and you've shown us the typical response of a hurt father and loving mother. You've also shown us that Troy has problems with his stomach. The rest, I hope my imagination of the place he's visiting is similar to yours.Look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Hi, Barbara, I'm glad you're okay (What's HS?) This is interesting, and you've shown us the typical response of a hurt father and loving mother. You've also shown us that Troy has problems with his stomach. The rest, I hope my imagination of the place he's visiting is similar to yours.Look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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HS is high school, I was just to tired to type it out. Thank you for your kind review.
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I should have guessed.But I thought your son is still a little boy! No, don't reply if you;re tired. Sorry ... :)
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My oldest will be 33 in July. I have 4 grandchildren. I was 40 when I had Steven. I'm an old lady or at least I feel like one right now.
Comment from axelbeariter
The door shut in his face./What a bastard. A misoganist of a different kind, I suspect.----In Author Notes: I am completely wore out, but happy./You are worn out, not wore out. You've written another meaningful saga in your quest for Anna's justice.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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The door shut in his face./What a bastard. A misoganist of a different kind, I suspect.----In Author Notes: I am completely wore out, but happy./You are worn out, not wore out. You've written another meaningful saga in your quest for Anna's justice.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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I will fix my author's notes. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent chapter. You brought out the character of her parents very well. You always do such a good job and I'll be ready for the next edition.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Excellent chapter. You brought out the character of her parents very well. You always do such a good job and I'll be ready for the next edition.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from ksherwoodrn
Nicely written story with great characters. Enjoyed reading it and I haven't read any before it. Easy to understand what is happening....kathleen
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Nicely written story with great characters. Enjoyed reading it and I haven't read any before it. Easy to understand what is happening....kathleen
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
