Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Helen Tan
Usually it's the mother who finds it most difficult to cut off all ties with a child no matter what that child did to hurt them. I wonder what happened between Anna and her parents - her relationship with Bobby and moving away from them? But it's good she still has some family support and concern even though it's grudgingly. Hope Troy locates Anna before Bobby does.
It's the one the gas station attendant directed me too.
directed me TO.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Usually it's the mother who finds it most difficult to cut off all ties with a child no matter what that child did to hurt them. I wonder what happened between Anna and her parents - her relationship with Bobby and moving away from them? But it's good she still has some family support and concern even though it's grudgingly. Hope Troy locates Anna before Bobby does.
It's the one the gas station attendant directed me too.
directed me TO.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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I will correct that too. Thank you for the review and support.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
A well-written chapter about a pressing problem in today's society. Your characters were believable and brought the story to life. I didn't see any errors that need correcting.
good job - sherry
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A well-written chapter about a pressing problem in today's society. Your characters were believable and brought the story to life. I didn't see any errors that need correcting.
good job - sherry
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed this chapter of your story Barbara, it had a lot of emotion and feeling. It was cleverly written and very well thought out.
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I enjoyed this chapter of your story Barbara, it had a lot of emotion and feeling. It was cleverly written and very well thought out.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Barbara, you are Superwoman! This is a well-written post. I only have one question: did Troy shake his head or nod it? I'm a compulsive wordsmith, so this grated. I'd dearly love to read more right now, but please take some time to rest and regroup. Summer's not as long as it used to be. Congrats to your son! :) Nancy
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Barbara, you are Superwoman! This is a well-written post. I only have one question: did Troy shake his head or nod it? I'm a compulsive wordsmith, so this grated. I'd dearly love to read more right now, but please take some time to rest and regroup. Summer's not as long as it used to be. Congrats to your son! :) Nancy
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and I will recheck that area.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter of what troy is doing to find anna, the concern of her mother was touching and i'm glad you redeemed the father as a caring man. i'm glad you're so happy, congratulations to your son's graduation.
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this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this chapter of what troy is doing to find anna, the concern of her mother was touching and i'm glad you redeemed the father as a caring man. i'm glad you're so happy, congratulations to your son's graduation.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with imagery and needs no change. A wonderful story line and the story line the imagery and the structure of it all blend together. A great story. Thanks for sharing. Mary
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A good write with imagery and needs no change. A wonderful story line and the story line the imagery and the structure of it all blend together. A great story. Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
Absolutely splendidly written.
You have us all in anticipation now.
Troy is really trying hard. Wow! Anna's father is a real old fart. Hiding away his real feelings.
I look forward to your next part.
Well done girl!!
I hope you are better as well. God bless.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Absolutely splendidly written.
You have us all in anticipation now.
Troy is really trying hard. Wow! Anna's father is a real old fart. Hiding away his real feelings.
I look forward to your next part.
Well done girl!!
I hope you are better as well. God bless.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from The Stranger
I also spend time helping out hte womens domestic violence unit near where I live, your story will do important work in highlighting the daily problems faced by these refuge's
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I also spend time helping out hte womens domestic violence unit near where I live, your story will do important work in highlighting the daily problems faced by these refuge's
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Barbara:
Another excellent chapter. Sometimes when parents,
especially fathers, put their kids out, it is hard
for them to admit they still care as they feel like
they lose face when they do so.
Congratulations on your son graduating from high school.
That is a really big step. My daughter and son-in-law
are also preparing to shut down their classrooms for
the year. My daughter's school is closing due to the
economy so she is also waiting to learn where she will
be teaching next year.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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Barbara:
Another excellent chapter. Sometimes when parents,
especially fathers, put their kids out, it is hard
for them to admit they still care as they feel like
they lose face when they do so.
Congratulations on your son graduating from high school.
That is a really big step. My daughter and son-in-law
are also preparing to shut down their classrooms for
the year. My daughter's school is closing due to the
economy so she is also waiting to learn where she will
be teaching next year.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 06-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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I will pray for your daughter. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheery blossom
Reads like the beginning of a good story.Well written, understandable, peeks the curiosity as to what happens next. However I do think using the expression "old fart" more than once is a mistake. Once is fine, but use other words to describe his cussedness if need be . It will be interesting to see what happens next. Cheery
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Reads like the beginning of a good story.Well written, understandable, peeks the curiosity as to what happens next. However I do think using the expression "old fart" more than once is a mistake. Once is fine, but use other words to describe his cussedness if need be . It will be interesting to see what happens next. Cheery
Comment Written 05-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2011
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I will recheck that area. Thank you for the kind review.
