Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Mike,

Phew, this is a long read but then you needed to tell the story without breaking it up. I can't begin to imagine how a parent must feel when they had an unruly child. You wrote this well and I didn't find anything to change....well done, chey

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011

Crushed, yet I relished the challange. My stepson just graduated and I went to that and Katie had a little party for him, she is doing well currently. Mom is not as the boy wants to go into the Navy after summers over. What totally had me flustered and adgitated was how the authorities got in there and added to the whole sorted tale. I nicked named that phenomina as Dad's revenge for me not picking up his mantle that ruined his career. I really appreciate the review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike

Comment from SquarePeg

Average

Seven thousand words is a chunk. The read definitely dragged.
I noticed several spelling errors - use Spell Check.
I noticed several grammar errors - use Spell Check.
Many sentences, the last for example, ramble and lack coherence. I'm not sure what a patty wagon is, and or what an 'It' is.
You obviously enjoy words. Seventy chapters?

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011

It's a biography, and my life is only half over. I do understand you comments and spell checked it several times. Very often grammar is a matter of personal preference and without examples, it is hard to gauge your comments. The reason there are so many chapters is, I have to adapt things for use here. Thank you for taking the time to review this, Mike.

Oh, a paddy wagon used to be the ice cream truck looking vehicle that they transport arrested people in, now it is a secure van.

Comment from whispersofthesoul

Excellent

hiya, i really enjoyed reading this, i often struggle reading long pieces, but this kept my attention from beginnig to end. it also left me wanting to read more.
welldone kelly x

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011

There is a Life Vest Madnitory! Part two. With FanStory, I have to split my chapters in half and to be honest, the next is the more adventureous of the two, that should be up for review as well. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from Cheryl Daphine

Excellent

Wow what a story. Modern life in all it's glory. Some people can not even imagine such troubles while other's know of no other life style. I wish you my best as I see this is non-fiction. Very well told and written.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011

I loved this review and the humor of it was that my father worked juvenile services for 25 years and ruined his career speaking out about his agency. Upon his deathbed, he wanted me to pick up that mantle and I declined citing family, having to work as hard as I do and money. Well that SOB wished it on me. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran

Excellent

A good write with imagery and needs no change I like your style of writing . I enjoyed reading your scrip, and the descriptive made mm want to read more. Mary

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2011

This should be a chapter in the book and it continues on with the next one, which is related and even more intense. I appreciate this review and the compliments and thank you for both. Mike