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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Deorre Leonard
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Wow! I love it. Now Anna and Micheal are missing. Her good for nothing husband is searching for her. Will Troy and his dad find her first? Will Anna and Troy fall in love. Waiting for the next chapter. Nicely said.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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Comment from JEMMAC
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Read the preamble, but slightly confused as it didn't mention Paul. It became clear very quickly that he was Tony's father..but then I was surprised that Paul didn't tell Bobby who he was. Lots going on in these scenes, and
interesting. I already want to know what happens next even
though its the first time I have read any of this work.
Its a good read so sorry if I have got any of this wrong.

Best wishes J.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


reply by the author on 23-May-2011
    Paul won't tell Bobby who he is because he's a lawyer, not information he wants Bobby to know about, yet. I am not sure why you gave me 4 stars. Usually when I receive 4 stars, I know what to fix. I have not idea what to fix to get 5 stars. Thank you for the review.
reply by JEMMAC on 23-May-2011
    I had assumed (wrongly) that not telling bobby was an omission which needed fixing.My mistake. I am a relative newbee. Can I rectify the rating.
reply by the author on 23-May-2011
    Not a problem. I understand. Thank you for rectifying the rating.
Comment from moyramouse
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I think that Ellen Collier has helped her escape as she had just come into the room with an offer of help in your last chapter. Now Paul has confirmation of Bobby's aggressive nature but he and Troy need to find out where Anna has gone. Right at the end you say 'he laid the book on the table' - because you haven't referred to the book before in this post, I would put the indefinite article 'a' in place of 'the'. I will look forward eagerly to your next installment.
I'm glad you are feeling a little better, having your son home for a week will be great medicine. Love and prayers, xxmouse

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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Comment from N.K. Wagner
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Barbara, so glad your son home and safe. It's good to hear that you're beginning to heal. The amount of energy that takes is phenomenal, so be sure to eat well, stay hydrated, and get plenty of rest.

I can't find anything you've forgotten in this post. Mother and son have fled underground. Bobby furious, Troy and Paul are concerned but cautious. Looking good. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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    Thank you for your kind review, support, and friendship.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Keep it up, I'm enjoying the ride.
As usual your writing is direct and clear.
Paul's reply to Bobby 'I'm guessing she's not here' doesn't seem to follow logically.

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


reply by the author on 23-May-2011
    I will recheck that area. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn 12
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Thank you for sharing this..Domestic violence is absolutely horrible..I have known many women and even a male under these conditions..

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi barbara,

The fact that Bobby is wandering around threatening to harm his wife and all sorts of other violent mayhem tells me there is something seriously wrong with the legal process in the US under these conditions. In the UK, his Bail conditions would have included a clause that he could not approach her and doing so would result in an immediate issue of an arrest warrant.

I look forward to seeing the outcome.

Patrick

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


reply by the author on 23-May-2011
    The judge probably told him to stay away, but that rarely stops these guys. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
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Wow!! Excellent write!!
The story has a twist in the tale now.
I love your dialogue as well.
Thank you for all the info in your authors notes it is interesting.
We pray for you to heal totally.
Well done girl!

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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Comment from Arkine
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Well, I missed the end of the last book, and it seems I'm a few chapters behind on this one, but this chapter is certainly interesting.

I've dealt with domestic violence, it sucks. Hopefully I'll be able to get though this book.

Anyhow, great chapter! :)

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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barbara:

I didn't find anything to correct in this post so your mind must have been on automatic pilot, I guess! I can't imagine how ecstatic you must be to have your son home from Afghanistan. Did you see the video phones from ACN on the Celebrity Apprentice this year? They would be great for the two of you. Check out my website at http://janiceholland.acnrep.com and give them a look. Many military families love them.

Thanks for sharing another great chapter
love,
jan

 Comment Written 23-May-2011


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    Thank you for your review.