Graveyard Kisses
A Dark Club Poem50 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
A very dark and dreary " dark club" poem. the stanza structure and free verse are very inspiring. I wish you well in the contest...Don
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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A very dark and dreary " dark club" poem. the stanza structure and free verse are very inspiring. I wish you well in the contest...Don
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you o vry much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from Gungalo
Twenty-five years have passed and yet, the pain is still vibrant.
A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you.
Touching the soil that bathes you in the warmth you deserve,
I take one last breath before I grant you Graveyard Kisses.
Wow, Dark Lord, graveyard kisses!!! How macabre can it get? Love this, the pic is awesome and the layout with red font (for blood) and black background (for darkest night) really play up this write in a presentation fitting for a Dark Club entry.
Wonderful use of unrhymed quatrains for this tale of evil's delight!!!!
This write will now be entered into the 8th round of the Dark Club Challenge!!! Good luck, Dark Lord!!! Thank you!!!
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Twenty-five years have passed and yet, the pain is still vibrant.
A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you.
Touching the soil that bathes you in the warmth you deserve,
I take one last breath before I grant you Graveyard Kisses.
Wow, Dark Lord, graveyard kisses!!! How macabre can it get? Love this, the pic is awesome and the layout with red font (for blood) and black background (for darkest night) really play up this write in a presentation fitting for a Dark Club entry.
Wonderful use of unrhymed quatrains for this tale of evil's delight!!!!
This write will now be entered into the 8th round of the Dark Club Challenge!!! Good luck, Dark Lord!!! Thank you!!!
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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As always, thank you for your kind words and support of my writing...dark lord
Comment from Piggies Grandma
Very Dark... I enjoyed it though and thought it was really well written, and sad. Your poem flows along well and tells a good story. The poor guy must have loved her so much...
The picture you chose is brilliant.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Very Dark... I enjoyed it though and thought it was really well written, and sad. Your poem flows along well and tells a good story. The poor guy must have loved her so much...
The picture you chose is brilliant.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from chita
You have good imagery and a good flow with your poem and rhyme well-you are descriptive and write with emotion about wanting to kiss and hug this woman one last time--and I like where you write(A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you) but you grant her a graveyard kiss--a thought provoking write-great job.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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You have good imagery and a good flow with your poem and rhyme well-you are descriptive and write with emotion about wanting to kiss and hug this woman one last time--and I like where you write(A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you) but you grant her a graveyard kiss--a thought provoking write-great job.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from angel123
I find great beauty in this dark poem. It is very well written and I wish I had a 6 rating to rate you. You must have loved Shakespeare growing up to focus on the tragedies of life. Light always shines through darkest. Therefore, I know you will never be lost. Great artwork choice! And I really enjoyed reading your poem. God bless you!
Angel123
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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I find great beauty in this dark poem. It is very well written and I wish I had a 6 rating to rate you. You must have loved Shakespeare growing up to focus on the tragedies of life. Light always shines through darkest. Therefore, I know you will never be lost. Great artwork choice! And I really enjoyed reading your poem. God bless you!
Angel123
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from JW
A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you. Touching the soil that bathes you in the warmth you deserve, I take one last breath before I grant you Graveyard Kisses.
What fantastic use of description and imagery. Your poem is well written - a very enjoyable dark read.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you. Touching the soil that bathes you in the warmth you deserve, I take one last breath before I grant you Graveyard Kisses.
What fantastic use of description and imagery. Your poem is well written - a very enjoyable dark read.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from lola29
I think you may have just won the Dark Club poetry contest. Your poem is so hauntingly sad, and scary-good. The poor sould will never recover.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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I think you may have just won the Dark Club poetry contest. Your poem is so hauntingly sad, and scary-good. The poor sould will never recover.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from Kevin C
An excellent write that sets such a great mood and tone. Truly dark and easy reading. It captures the reader throughout. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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An excellent write that sets such a great mood and tone. Truly dark and easy reading. It captures the reader throughout. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--Nice, haunting picture image.
--"Panic overwhelms the soul, but not the heart."
How is this possible? For the heart is an entry way to the soul.
--Good, dark gruesome imagery of the cemetery throughout the piece.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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--Nice, haunting picture image.
--"Panic overwhelms the soul, but not the heart."
How is this possible? For the heart is an entry way to the soul.
--Good, dark gruesome imagery of the cemetery throughout the piece.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind words...dark lord
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Another suitably dark offering that tells
a sad tale of loss and enduring love.
Good, strong imagery and flow together with dramatic presentation add to the mood.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Another suitably dark offering that tells
a sad tale of loss and enduring love.
Good, strong imagery and flow together with dramatic presentation add to the mood.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the continued support of my writing, I do appreciate it...dark lord
