Graveyard Kisses
A Dark Club Poem50 total reviews
Comment from Keri353
Great picture. One could almost imagine anything with it.
Very dark and yet a very interesting read. The words flowed nicely and nothing tripped over. I like it a lot. Thanks for sharing. Keri
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Great picture. One could almost imagine anything with it.
Very dark and yet a very interesting read. The words flowed nicely and nothing tripped over. I like it a lot. Thanks for sharing. Keri
Comment Written 19-May-2011
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Dklrdmcches,
This is a very descriptive piece of horror poetry. I particularly liked the middle two lines of the final verse:
A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you.
Touching the soil that bathes you in the warmth you deserve,
Very well written.
Ray
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Hello Dklrdmcches,
This is a very descriptive piece of horror poetry. I particularly liked the middle two lines of the final verse:
A slithering reptile coils around my leg as I fall before you.
Touching the soil that bathes you in the warmth you deserve,
Very well written.
Ray
Comment Written 18-May-2011
Comment from kymjo
I absolutly love your poem. It captures death and darkness at it's creepiest. I think it is perfect the way it is. I hope to see more of your writing in the near future.
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I absolutly love your poem. It captures death and darkness at it's creepiest. I think it is perfect the way it is. I hope to see more of your writing in the near future.
Comment Written 18-May-2011
Comment from onceinabluemoon
Ooooh, creepy poem! You've captured that sort of spine-tingling feeling, menacing, all underneath the veil of a lover's lament. Very nice.
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Ooooh, creepy poem! You've captured that sort of spine-tingling feeling, menacing, all underneath the veil of a lover's lament. Very nice.
Comment Written 18-May-2011
Comment from barkingdog
This is really spooky and should do well in the Dark Club competition.
I would have liked for you to have continued your, 'My love. . .'refrains into the third and fourth stanzas.
I love 'endure this clique that they call life' and I emphasize 'they' which pulls him apart as a dark being.
Your alliterations add to the read i.e.
-tortured tombstones
-wolves watch
-clique/call
-give you Graveyard Kisses
You have many words that are associated with scary: snapping, panic, tortured, Hell, Howling, muddy grounds, moved on, pain,slithering, reptile coils, last breath.
Great dark feel, ominous.
-give you Graveyard Kisses
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This is really spooky and should do well in the Dark Club competition.
I would have liked for you to have continued your, 'My love. . .'refrains into the third and fourth stanzas.
I love 'endure this clique that they call life' and I emphasize 'they' which pulls him apart as a dark being.
Your alliterations add to the read i.e.
-tortured tombstones
-wolves watch
-clique/call
-give you Graveyard Kisses
You have many words that are associated with scary: snapping, panic, tortured, Hell, Howling, muddy grounds, moved on, pain,slithering, reptile coils, last breath.
Great dark feel, ominous.
-give you Graveyard Kisses
Comment Written 18-May-2011
Comment from WilliamDeen
Great work with wonderful imagery (shimmering moonlight, lover yearning for a touch, muddy grounds of those who have moved on) Good stuff. Dark as they come and a very good read.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Great work with wonderful imagery (shimmering moonlight, lover yearning for a touch, muddy grounds of those who have moved on) Good stuff. Dark as they come and a very good read.
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from missy98writer
Dklrd,
your art work is awesome. I enjoyed this poem immensely. Superbly written poem with marvelous imagery and definitely thought provoking. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. I enjoyed your many metaphors such as test of time, heard in the distance, endure this clique, pain is still vibrant and I take one last breath. I enjoyed the question in the second verse" I wonder what kind of Hell really exists." Your dark poem gave the reader much food for thought. Keep on rocking out the dark poetry.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Dklrd,
your art work is awesome. I enjoyed this poem immensely. Superbly written poem with marvelous imagery and definitely thought provoking. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. I enjoyed your many metaphors such as test of time, heard in the distance, endure this clique, pain is still vibrant and I take one last breath. I enjoyed the question in the second verse" I wonder what kind of Hell really exists." Your dark poem gave the reader much food for thought. Keep on rocking out the dark poetry.
Melissa.
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from MS Writer
Most fitting entry for the Dark Club! Excellent! Well crafted and the last stanza was incredible dark with "I grant you Graveyard Kisses"...words, words, words, that say it all. Great read and good luck.
Michele
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Most fitting entry for the Dark Club! Excellent! Well crafted and the last stanza was incredible dark with "I grant you Graveyard Kisses"...words, words, words, that say it all. Great read and good luck.
Michele
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from Irish Rose
Powerful dark and mysterious. Great write that makes for a great read. The reader can almost feel what it's like to make the walk for their very own graveyard kiss. Keep up the great work.
Rose
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Powerful dark and mysterious. Great write that makes for a great read. The reader can almost feel what it's like to make the walk for their very own graveyard kiss. Keep up the great work.
Rose
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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WOW! Thank you so very much for the kind review, I do appreciate you stopping by and reviewing this write...dark lord
Comment from Aglovale
Suitably dark and atmospheric, with some great imagery and poetic flourishes. Cool image and colours too, thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Suitably dark and atmospheric, with some great imagery and poetic flourishes. Cool image and colours too, thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 18-May-2011
reply by the author on 18-May-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
