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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from NaughtieScribe
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Sometimes good people don't ignore the problem, but will step up and genuinely help. Unfortunately many more don't want to get involved. This novel bring the right amount of light to a not so hidden societal secret.

 Comment Written 17-May-2012


reply by the author on 20-May-2012
    Too many people refuse to get involved.
Comment from rzubey
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I'm so glad that the nurse stood up to Bobby.I'm just curious what made Bobby the way he is. I'm also glad that Ellen Collier spoke up at the end, too. I'm very curious to see what help she can offer. Good work. Still can find no fault with your story.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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I believe I mentioned in an earlier chapter that conditions of his release would be that he stay away from Anna and Michael. I'm sure the hospital would know that's part of the procedure and would demand to see his release papers before letting him in to see Anna. Also, the police probably ordered that he's not to see either one of them. With him violating those release orders, he should be arrested and thrown back in jail without bail. The nurse would call the police.

Also, because Anna is in the hospital, Child Protective services has been notified and would have given strict orders that the father is not to see, or take, Michael. It is required by state law that hospital staff report child abuse, but the police would have already done so since they're involved.

Roberta

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
    Thank you
Comment from Queenise
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Barbara,this is a great book. I hope you have plans to put it on the market. Such wonderful suspense,tension and drama. You have a way with these scenes that make me want to read more and more. Queenise

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2011


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
    I do hae plans. Once I finish posting it on FS and getting the kinks out of it. I will look for a publisher.
reply by Queenise on 15-Jul-2011
    That's a good idea. Others have been published so go for it. Queenise
Comment from Fluffyhead
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Yay I found the beginning. Not too short perfect start and it says what needs to be said. My brother acts just like this,and refuses to get help.It is very heartbreaking to watch.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
    I appreciate you review. I am glad you are going back to find other posts. I am sorry there isn't any money attached to them.
Comment from Kokopelli
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Good for you. I'm sure it's hard to write this, but good for you in putting it together and putting it out there. More need to hear about abused people. It's not just about women being abused. I knew a couple - he was the abused. Dangerously so.

And, this past January a next door neighbor, decided he couldn't live any more. He shot his wife in the chest, while she was sleeping and then shot himself. Very Very sad.

This happens far too often.

Until
DAvid

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
    Yes, it does. I usually put stats in my author's notes, but my PC crashed and I'm on a laptop, until things get fixed. I'm not as comfortable on the laptop. Thank youf or the kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
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hi barb, now that was really scary for anna. thank God the nurse was there. what an evil man to even attack his wife on a hospital bed. i have no crit for this short chapter. hope you are well.

 Comment Written 19-May-2011


reply by the author on 19-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Des Beirne
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Great end to chapter two. I really am enjoying(wrong word but you know what I mean) this read.
Looking forward to chapter three
Des

 Comment Written 19-May-2011


reply by the author on 19-May-2011

    Thank you for the kind review. I understand. I have had the same problem with the enjoying when I have reviews some posts.
Comment from Chris Tee
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Wow !! They should not allow thugs like this into any public place.
I looks as if Anna will be Ok
Again you kept my eyes glued to the screen with this lovey part.
Well done and God bless

 Comment Written 19-May-2011


reply by the author on 19-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Herb
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I thought this was reasonably well written and easy to follow.
One suggestion - I think Bobby is over done a bit you don't need to state the obvious so often.

 Comment Written 19-May-2011


reply by the author on 19-May-2011
    I will take you suggestion into consideration, but I actually know someone who Bobby is patterned after. Thank you for your kind review.