Comment from InterestingRon

Excellent

Hi Bev
Your writing skills have been evident in all the previous chapters - but now there's a real feel that the author is focused and in total control of the project.
You lead us in from the last chapter, Mia has her incident right up front, a mix of description and dialogue display the tensions within the group. And then a cliffhanger ending that leaves us wanting to know what happens next.
Excellent write, Bev.
Ron xox

 Comment Written 15-May-2011

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reply by the author on 15-May-2011

I'm really honored by your great review, Ron. It's really interesting to me that you sensed what I felt as I was writing this chapter. I'm starting to get into it. How cool is that!!! I value your opinion very highly, my friend, for the great writer that you are. XXX Bev

Comment from quashdog

Excellent

You built up good tension and left the story hanging on a what's going to happen next note which is a good vehicle for getting the reader to keep turning those pages. Well done job.

 Comment Written 15-May-2011

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reply by the author on 15-May-2011

Thanks, quashdog. I so appreciate your generous review and words of support! Warm regards...Bev

Comment from MS Writer

Excellent

Great story with a lot of suspense. The characters are authentic and not cardboard cutouts. Dialogue is fresh and interesting. You do keep the reader glued to their seats. Looking forward to the next chapter. I did find a few SPAGs which you may want to look at:

mouth to to tell her
?mouth to tell her

looked like to be some
?looked like some

 Comment Written 15-May-2011

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reply by the author on 15-May-2011

Thanks so much MS Writer. I appreciate the sharp eye and will check out the areas in question pronto! Thanks so much for your words of support and generous review. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Oh girl, this story is moving in an up tempo fast pace!!! I enjoyed reading this chapter and see where they now have much to be concerned over. This malevolent spirit is very brave and probably won't stop with its attempts. Sigh, you write this so very well. I'm hooked for sure!!!

 Comment Written 15-May-2011

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reply by the author on 15-May-2011

Hi, Gungalo. I'm so happy you liked the chapter! I'm enjoyig writing the book, so it makes me smile to think others are having fun too. You are always so generous and positive; and I, really truly, honor you for that. Hugs, Bev

reply by Gungalo on 15-May-2011

But girl, it's your writing that brings that out in me!!!! This is a great story!!!

reply by the author on 15-May-2011

Thanks, Gungie. You rock!!! XXX Bev

reply by Gungalo on 15-May-2011

My pleasure always, girl!!!

Comment from The Stranger

Excellent

well this is a thrilling tale of intrigue and supernatural shenanigans, with the latest technology, the intrepid team aim to face the poltergeist

 Comment Written 15-May-2011

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reply by the author on 15-May-2011

Hi, TS. Thanks for your great review and your support! Much appreciated. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Once again you captured my attention
I love your story line and how is moves.
there is no cull moments.
Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 15-May-2011

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reply by the author on 15-May-2011

Hi, misscookie. Your great review has me smiling! Thanks so much for taking time out to read the chapter and send along your thoughts. You are so sweet. Warm regards, Bev