Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "First Blood"Case Studies of Hauntings
66 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
hey writingfundimension, finally a chapter I haven't read, I have been keeping a close eye. this is an excellent write and the ghost attacked mia, making her aware of his power. did you mean GPS coordinates instead of GPA?
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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hey writingfundimension, finally a chapter I haven't read, I have been keeping a close eye. this is an excellent write and the ghost attacked mia, making her aware of his power. did you mean GPS coordinates instead of GPA?
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Hi, Sweet. Thank you so much for keeping track of my chapters. That's awfully nice of you. And I really appreciate this great review as well. :) Bev
Comment from Jackreese
Wow, this had a lot going on. You pulled me in right to the very end and kept my interested. The spirit shoving her was explained well and her reaction afterward seemed real. Once again ill be reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Wow, this had a lot going on. You pulled me in right to the very end and kept my interested. The spirit shoving her was explained well and her reaction afterward seemed real. Once again ill be reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Hi, Jackreese. Thank you for taking time to read my chapter and send along such a supportive review. I appreciate it. :) Bev
Comment from livelylinda
Writingfundimension: it has been a joy to continue reading your ghost story. I've watched shows on TV where ghosts have scratched and hit people so it is very believable in your story. Looking forward to the next section. Linda
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Writingfundimension: it has been a joy to continue reading your ghost story. I've watched shows on TV where ghosts have scratched and hit people so it is very believable in your story. Looking forward to the next section. Linda
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Hi, livelylinda. I appreciate your remark about the ghost's actions. It's not a common situation, certainly, but then the more common actions of spirits wouldn't make a very dramatic story LoL. I really appreciate your support. :) Bev
Comment from Ric Myworld
Kinda sounds like Mike has just let his alligator mouth overload his hummingbird butt, in saying that he will kick the phantom's derriere. LOL. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Kinda sounds like Mike has just let his alligator mouth overload his hummingbird butt, in saying that he will kick the phantom's derriere. LOL. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Hi, Ric. Thanks a bunch for this awesome review! Glad to know you along for the ride. :) Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Well, I figured I'd squeeze in a review this morning before heading out to the airport. A couple of friends of mine are coming in from the US. :)
Another stellar chapter, Bev. So, this entity is able to inflict physical harm. Whoa!
I'm really loving Mike. :)
Bravo. Gotta rush! One can never tell how the traffic will be on the 401, and I don't want to be late.
See ya soon!
Love Av
xx
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Well, I figured I'd squeeze in a review this morning before heading out to the airport. A couple of friends of mine are coming in from the US. :)
Another stellar chapter, Bev. So, this entity is able to inflict physical harm. Whoa!
I'm really loving Mike. :)
Bravo. Gotta rush! One can never tell how the traffic will be on the 401, and I don't want to be late.
See ya soon!
Love Av
xx
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014
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Hi, Sweet Lady. Thank you for taking time out to send along this very generous review. I like Mike a lot, too, and I'm going to be revealing some neat aspects of his personality as we go along.
Had a blast yesterday. You are just as wonderful and gracious in person as you are on this site. Much Love, Bev
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I fell in love with both of you too! It's brilliant to know you are both part of my life.
Looking forward to tomorrow.
Av
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So sweet, you are! Love ya, Bev
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
You have another fabulous book! This is exciting with great characters and dialogue. The invisible force knocking Mia to the ground was well described, and confirms paranormal activity within the house. You show this so well, and continue to build the tension. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hi, Bev.
You have another fabulous book! This is exciting with great characters and dialogue. The invisible force knocking Mia to the ground was well described, and confirms paranormal activity within the house. You show this so well, and continue to build the tension. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hello, dear friend. Thanks so much for this AWESOME review. I'm so glad you're liking the story. I'm having a blast editing and re-posting. Just one more day!!! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Cian Mateo
I'm a believer, and enjoy your posts very much. They're well written, with a natural flow that holds my attention from start to finish.
I noticed a couple of things, you might want to look at.
"...of transporting you such a distance." Mike('s) features were set with determination.
Did you mean?
He faces to where Luke (sat) beside him.
Great description and realistic dialog.
Thank you for sharing.
Cian
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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I'm a believer, and enjoy your posts very much. They're well written, with a natural flow that holds my attention from start to finish.
I noticed a couple of things, you might want to look at.
"...of transporting you such a distance." Mike('s) features were set with determination.
Did you mean?
He faces to where Luke (sat) beside him.
Great description and realistic dialog.
Thank you for sharing.
Cian
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hi, Cian. Thank you for pointing out those areas. Corrections made! I really appreciate this very generous and encouraging review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Sankey
Hi there. Came here from a promo. Good chapter here thanks. Never read your stuff before. Only one little spag for ya.
Mike('s) features were set with determination. WIll go back to the start as I believe that is the best way with a new story. Hope you can check my Autobiography I have a whole lot of revised chapters. There are incentives on some of them still if you get there quick.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hi there. Came here from a promo. Good chapter here thanks. Never read your stuff before. Only one little spag for ya.
Mike('s) features were set with determination. WIll go back to the start as I believe that is the best way with a new story. Hope you can check my Autobiography I have a whole lot of revised chapters. There are incentives on some of them still if you get there quick.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hi, Sankey. Thank you for reading my chapter and for your suggestions. You're the second person to catch the error LoL. I will do my best to check out your profile, though I am going to be traveling for the next week.
Warm regards, Bev
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Ok well there are "carrots" as I call rewards on some for the next day or so I am a bit disappointed I have not had a better response someone said they saw one of mine come up as a Re post or whatever ha! See you around.
Comment from judiverse
This is really great and keeps you wanting to read. The members of the team are all interesting. They have quite a scare when Mia gets a punch in the abdomen. She believes the late Charles Bellingham was responsible. The caretaker and his cottage are spooky enough. It'll surely be spine-tingling when they get inside the house. Jenkins is in bad physical condition and can't be counted on for help. Mia was pretty stubborn about going to the hospital, but finally she's convinced to be checked out. Emma seems kind of a take-charge person, as she's found the bed and breakfast where they can stay. Mike comes across as the physical force. judi
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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This is really great and keeps you wanting to read. The members of the team are all interesting. They have quite a scare when Mia gets a punch in the abdomen. She believes the late Charles Bellingham was responsible. The caretaker and his cottage are spooky enough. It'll surely be spine-tingling when they get inside the house. Jenkins is in bad physical condition and can't be counted on for help. Mia was pretty stubborn about going to the hospital, but finally she's convinced to be checked out. Emma seems kind of a take-charge person, as she's found the bed and breakfast where they can stay. Mike comes across as the physical force. judi
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Judi. I really appreciate your generosity and support. Glad you liking the story. Lots of upcoming excitement. I'm having a great time editing and re-posting this story.
:) Bev
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You're so welcome. The story is flowing very smoothly so far. judi
Comment from Bryana
I'm sorry to say I haven't read all chapters.
This one was excellent, rather scary, after
several people being touched and pushed I don't
thin I would've remained in that place.
I've always wonder if the paranormal really
exists. You, being an excellent writer have
have me convinced it really does!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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I'm sorry to say I haven't read all chapters.
This one was excellent, rather scary, after
several people being touched and pushed I don't
thin I would've remained in that place.
I've always wonder if the paranormal really
exists. You, being an excellent writer have
have me convinced it really does!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hi, Bryana. Thank you for this very gracious review, my friend. It's very kind of you to take time to read the chapter, and how cool that I may have made you a believer. XX Bev
