Hocus Pocus
A Flip-Flop Sonnet29 total reviews
Comment from Paradox Tremors
I don't know which I got the bigger smile from--the write or your author's notes. A great, funny write that put a smile on my face before retiring to bed. Enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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I don't know which I got the bigger smile from--the write or your author's notes. A great, funny write that put a smile on my face before retiring to bed. Enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 17-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you - I can picture you going to bed with a big grin on your face!
Steve
Comment from jehanned
Hehe, this is fun! And to make sense of all those words in rhyming fashion! You seem to be set on committing harry-carry! Good show, the imagery was cool and it all made sense.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Hehe, this is fun! And to make sense of all those words in rhyming fashion! You seem to be set on committing harry-carry! Good show, the imagery was cool and it all made sense.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you - I'm sure they have these in other languages too - I have been trying to think of French ones, the only other language I'm familiar with...
Comment from Espresso momma
This is a fun silly sonnet to read. It puts a smile on the readers face and we need that once in a while. You had fun writing this I can tell.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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This is a fun silly sonnet to read. It puts a smile on the readers face and we need that once in a while. You had fun writing this I can tell.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you - yes it was fun. Glad you got a smile out of it.
Comment from mermaids
This is definately a humerous and silly poem. I like your author notes on these words. You have given me food for thought here. This is an enjoyable poem to read and I love the last line" do not choose the willy-nilly when you wed."
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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This is definately a humerous and silly poem. I like your author notes on these words. You have given me food for thought here. This is an enjoyable poem to read and I love the last line" do not choose the willy-nilly when you wed."
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Do not choose nilly-willy either!
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
Love all your flip-flop words :-)
It is great that you managed to use so many while also maintaining iambic pentameter and the sonnet's required rhyme scheme.
I like the alliteration of tittle-tattle tales and willy-nilly when you wed.
I have long been a huge fan of fun old-fashioned words and sayings, so I am smiling all over the place at your well-constructed and most clever use of these words in a sonnet.
Brooke
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Love all your flip-flop words :-)
It is great that you managed to use so many while also maintaining iambic pentameter and the sonnet's required rhyme scheme.
I like the alliteration of tittle-tattle tales and willy-nilly when you wed.
I have long been a huge fan of fun old-fashioned words and sayings, so I am smiling all over the place at your well-constructed and most clever use of these words in a sonnet.
Brooke
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thanks, Brooke. Strangely enough, the ones I first had in my mind were dilly-dally and shilly-shally and neither found a place in the final poem!
Glad you got a smile out of it.
Comment from Dutchie
Who says a poem has to be serious? Not me.
I just learned a lot of new words!!! No I'm not joking this poem was very funny I loved it and the flow and rhyme were awesome good. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Who says a poem has to be serious? Not me.
I just learned a lot of new words!!! No I'm not joking this poem was very funny I loved it and the flow and rhyme were awesome good. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 17-May-2011
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Thank you - all genuine 'find 'em in a dictionary' words.
Steve
Comment from barkingdog
Charming, amusing and ends with good advice. Excellent, clever piece.
Those old fashioned flip-flops are cleverly worked in so as not to miss a beat in your iambic pentameter.
The rhyme is flawless.
The one alliteration that is my favorite is your tongue twister in the second stanza:
Such tittle-tattle tales they think are sweet.
I would definitely recommend this to others(esp.. Shakespeare) as entertaining, a collection of old fashioned phrases and old fashioned common sense.
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Charming, amusing and ends with good advice. Excellent, clever piece.
Those old fashioned flip-flops are cleverly worked in so as not to miss a beat in your iambic pentameter.
The rhyme is flawless.
The one alliteration that is my favorite is your tongue twister in the second stanza:
Such tittle-tattle tales they think are sweet.
I would definitely recommend this to others(esp.. Shakespeare) as entertaining, a collection of old fashioned phrases and old fashioned common sense.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your detailed review - I am glad you enjoyed my bit of fun which I wrote to highlight one of the strange quirks of our language. Mostly though, it was just to get a giggle...
Steve
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Well , I'm still giggling. It was a great idea. Too, bad you took all the good ones---so no contest. LOL You are the tops though with Hocus Pocus. May I bookcase it?
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Of course - no need to ask!
Steve
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Very well done. You are right I think you used about all of them. Wonderful structure,flow and rhyme. Humorous story,hidden with-in your poem. Very well written.
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Very well done. You are right I think you used about all of them. Wonderful structure,flow and rhyme. Humorous story,hidden with-in your poem. Very well written.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you - actually I had a much longer list of these 'flip-flop' words, but some of them were a bit obscure so I only chose the most recognizable ones.
Comment from c_lucas
When the muse is on vacation, the poet will play. This is very well written in its own preverse way. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a fun read.
reply by the author on 15-May-2011
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When the muse is on vacation, the poet will play. This is very well written in its own preverse way. It has a smooth flow of words, making for a fun read.
Comment Written 15-May-2011
reply by the author on 15-May-2011
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Thanks for the review - yes it was a little bit of silliness.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from LKM2009
Okay that is different but much fun to read. Some of the words I didn't recognize but will search, that should be fun. Anyway fun poem and very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 15-May-2011
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Okay that is different but much fun to read. Some of the words I didn't recognize but will search, that should be fun. Anyway fun poem and very enjoyable.
Comment Written 15-May-2011
reply by the author on 15-May-2011
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Thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed my bit of fun - yes all the words are genuine (except 'shed de bike' which is my own piece of madness) so you'll find them in a good dictionary.
