The Mother Nature
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Comment from damodarboruah
The poetry demonstrates the true nature of human being how selflessly destroys the helpless nature!
Blessing so much with God gifts yet why human do not know to respect the green environment!
Why?Who will take care?
Mothe Nature captures all about the responsibilityof the human being.
All the best.
The poetry demonstrates the true nature of human being how selflessly destroys the helpless nature!
Blessing so much with God gifts yet why human do not know to respect the green environment!
Why?Who will take care?
Mothe Nature captures all about the responsibilityof the human being.
All the best.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2014
Comment from JeJo
hello Poet,
this explains the cycle of nature with humankind's actions. We treat something bad that is giving us riches - for, after all, 'it is human nature' - I like the sarcastic tone.
However, this contest requires a syllable count of 5/7/5, in three lines.
You have the three lines, but the syllable count is 8/14/7
It is possible you mistook the instruction for a count of 5/7/5 WORDS instead of syllables. No problem. If it is revised, please let me know and I'd be more than happy to take another look :)
I'd also suggest omitting the comma in the last line.
Interesting commentary - just needs some tweaking on the technical side :)
All the best, Jen
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
hello Poet,
this explains the cycle of nature with humankind's actions. We treat something bad that is giving us riches - for, after all, 'it is human nature' - I like the sarcastic tone.
However, this contest requires a syllable count of 5/7/5, in three lines.
You have the three lines, but the syllable count is 8/14/7
It is possible you mistook the instruction for a count of 5/7/5 WORDS instead of syllables. No problem. If it is revised, please let me know and I'd be more than happy to take another look :)
I'd also suggest omitting the comma in the last line.
Interesting commentary - just needs some tweaking on the technical side :)
All the best, Jen
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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yes, I am confused with the 5/7/5 syllable count, please explain
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Ok, I'll go line by line and show you the syllables this has:
Na/ture/ feeds/ hu/man/ with/ rich/es
Hu/man/ de/stroys/ na/ture/ by po/llut/ing/ her/ nast/i/ly
For,/ it/ is/ hu/man/ na/ture
The backslashes indicate each syllable. And right now, the lines have 8/14/7 syllables, respectively. This needs to be cut down to a 5/7/5 count.
For example, you could say:
Earth gives man riches
Man destroys earth through misuse
It's human nature
-- This way would still keep your original meaning, though worded slightly different and in the syllables count. Does that make sense?
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Hi, Thanks for the clarification.
Comment from CurtinaMarie
Whoa, now that's a very strong truth! This read cuts right to the cutting edge. I hope that this read will extend way beyond this website. Great Job!
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
Whoa, now that's a very strong truth! This read cuts right to the cutting edge. I hope that this read will extend way beyond this website. Great Job!
Comment Written 13-May-2011
reply by the author on 14-May-2011
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thanks a lot :)