Comment from l.raven

Excellent

I think the title says it all.But that goes for both parties.Not just one.It has been about greed with all in Washington.Bush was an ass and so is this one.

 Comment Written 12-May-2011

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

I see a lot in common between the critters. Both are capable of spreading lots of dung! Thanks for reading and your kind comments.

Comment from MS Writer

Excellent

Well written and a great satire on the sameness of political parties. Great entry for the 5 7 5 contest. Best wishes with this satirical entry.

 Comment Written 12-May-2011

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks for reading and your kind feedback.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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I'm having trouble with motor control I'll correct it.

 Comment Written 12-May-2011

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks for reading Charlie - did you mean a four? Okay if you did, just curious. Regards, Bill

reply by c_lucas on 12-May-2011

You're welcome, Bill. Updated to five. Sorry. Charlie

reply by the author on 12-May-2011

I gave you a "1" once. My excuse was fat fingers. Thanks Charlie.

reply by c_lucas on 12-May-2011

I have a heritary bone disease when is slowly crippling me up. I was told at 19 I would be in a wheel chair at 25. My 25th birthday is catching up with me.

Comment from highlander104

Excellent

Thanks for the laugh, Bill. A big message in a little poem. It's not that there is no change, but that it's obvious.

Good luck in the contest.

Jean K.

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks Jean - first for reading and then for all of your support. Regards, Bill

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hello bhogg...
This is an intelligent and clever write. I like the use of pachyderm. LOL. This should serve you well in the 5-7-5 contest.
Warmly, Rebecca

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks Rebecca! I thought elephant was way to plebian! Warm regards, Bill

Comment from InHisownwrite

Exceptional

What a great piece!
Few words that take us to a thousand thoughts...
Very creatively thought out...
You certainly make me think..
You took on this challenge very creatively!
Bryan

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks Bryan - to get a six on Thursday is really special. Always warm regards, Bill

reply by InHisownwrite on 12-May-2011

Well deserved my friend.. Bryan

Comment from judy corcoran

Exceptional

lol
very funny

such a clever write, what more can i say?
you have hit it on the head - would a donkey by any other name smell as sweet?

thanks for the laugh
love judy

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks Judy - we get so few sixes, that I'm always humbled to get one, especially so late in the week! Regards, Bill

Comment from Nican

Excellent

Good little poem. Few words with a much larger meaning. Referring to symbolism to make thee point that nothing ever really changes in politics and perhaps life. I think it is clever and fun.

 Comment Written 12-May-2011

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks for reading and your kind words. Both are appreciated! Regards, Bill

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good 5/7/5 order, Bill - I love how you use the old-time elephant/donkey symbols for the Republican and Democratic parties to make your satiric point
the satori line is just brilliant - yes, sometimes one wonders how much difference there is between the two when both manage to muck things up. Brooke

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Sometimes Brooke, I see a great similarity. Both parties are capable of defacating all over the place! Regards, Bill

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Bill,
I wish I had a six. I love your political satire. But the democrats are singing the same old tune. It's all talk. Your poem is very well written. Your senryu is in perfect form and syllable count. I like satori line. You make effective use of the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor in your writing. You poem is a real contender entry in the contest. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Melissa!

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reply by the author on 12-May-2011

Thanks Melissa - I hope the reviewing "gods" are in tune with you. Warm regards, Bill