Crafted Within
It is in all of us.27 total reviews
Comment from MS Writer
Created from the moment a child is born,
The God of the Underworld lives within the womb of all.
Very powerful lines and frightening too. Very well crafted and well paced. I really like your poems as I seem to be heading in that direction with my poetry. Not sure how or why. Great read.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Created from the moment a child is born,
The God of the Underworld lives within the womb of all.
Very powerful lines and frightening too. Very well crafted and well paced. I really like your poems as I seem to be heading in that direction with my poetry. Not sure how or why. Great read.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from Giselav
Excellent job of conveying a powerful message and painting the tone with each word of fear, and evil and doom. Yes there is alot of bad in the world. Thank God there is also good to battle its force. Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Excellent job of conveying a powerful message and painting the tone with each word of fear, and evil and doom. Yes there is alot of bad in the world. Thank God there is also good to battle its force. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you...dark lord
Comment from LunarSecret
Indeed dark, and I would think too much so for many. I actually liked it, don't totally agree with its message but you told it well.
I think that mythical beings hold both elements of good and evil, if not the fantasy authors would have little to write about!
'The God of the Underworld lives within the womb of all.' - Strong imagery here, but are you saying that woman inherently holds evil? Interesting as some cultures do believe that 'sin' can be passed from the woman.
I will look out for more of your work, I can imagine it will be interesting:)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Indeed dark, and I would think too much so for many. I actually liked it, don't totally agree with its message but you told it well.
I think that mythical beings hold both elements of good and evil, if not the fantasy authors would have little to write about!
'The God of the Underworld lives within the womb of all.' - Strong imagery here, but are you saying that woman inherently holds evil? Interesting as some cultures do believe that 'sin' can be passed from the woman.
I will look out for more of your work, I can imagine it will be interesting:)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from honeytree
The art work is great and the words can be true in some
situations within our world.I just hope love leaps over evil
ways always.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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The art work is great and the words can be true in some
situations within our world.I just hope love leaps over evil
ways always.
Honey tree
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from themanicdude
I loved the haunting element behind your words, it sent a shiver down my spine.
Your poem flowed smoothly, grammar and spelling was flawless, and your background and font colours added to the intesity of your poem. Very interesting image too.
Lee
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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I loved the haunting element behind your words, it sent a shiver down my spine.
Your poem flowed smoothly, grammar and spelling was flawless, and your background and font colours added to the intesity of your poem. Very interesting image too.
Lee
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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WOW! Thank you so very much for the six star rating. I appreciate that you think this highly of my work...dark lord
Comment from pigwit
As usual, you have some interesting ideas floating through this poem (sadly most of the true). -- Pigwit
Favorite lines.
Loving those who fall by the wayside, He welcomes them into his fold.
Entering a new dimension, the world awaits His next move.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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As usual, you have some interesting ideas floating through this poem (sadly most of the true). -- Pigwit
Favorite lines.
Loving those who fall by the wayside, He welcomes them into his fold.
Entering a new dimension, the world awaits His next move.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you once again for stopping by and reviewing my work...dark lord
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Dark Lord, your Devil is a busy-body. lol. I loved this piece of the darkside where the dark one rejoices every time someone falls by the wayside. He instigates this fall. You have some jolly good ideas flowing through this poem from the birth to the grave. Quite creepy.
Well done, it was a pleasure to read. luv jada
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Hi Dark Lord, your Devil is a busy-body. lol. I loved this piece of the darkside where the dark one rejoices every time someone falls by the wayside. He instigates this fall. You have some jolly good ideas flowing through this poem from the birth to the grave. Quite creepy.
Well done, it was a pleasure to read. luv jada
Comment Written 27-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review, I am pleased you enjoyed this work of mine...dark lord
Comment from DonandVicki
A very dark and moving poem that make the skin crawl. I love it because there is so much truth in your work. The Dark Side is everywhere. Nice read and I would like to read some more...Don
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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A very dark and moving poem that make the skin crawl. I love it because there is so much truth in your work. The Dark Side is everywhere. Nice read and I would like to read some more...Don
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for stopping by and reviewing this piece...dark lord
Comment from Kevin C
Very interesting thoughtful write. I find your poem captivating to the reader from start to finish. It generates a mood to the reader in a dark write. Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Very interesting thoughtful write. I find your poem captivating to the reader from start to finish. It generates a mood to the reader in a dark write. Very nicely written.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from Rose Hearth
I like the opposing viewpoint offered. The standard belief is that all children are born into innocence. I like your stance that the Dark One is also there at the time.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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I like the opposing viewpoint offered. The standard belief is that all children are born into innocence. I like your stance that the Dark One is also there at the time.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
