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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Leaving"Reflective Autobiographical Poetry
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Comment from dogontherocks
You paint a vivid picture of a mother leaving her child causing unbelievable pain, and your piece has the rhythmic, qualities associated with a poem. The structure makes sense and it flowed well. Good job MacNizzle.
reply by the author on 31-May-2011
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You paint a vivid picture of a mother leaving her child causing unbelievable pain, and your piece has the rhythmic, qualities associated with a poem. The structure makes sense and it flowed well. Good job MacNizzle.
Comment Written 30-May-2011
reply by the author on 31-May-2011
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Thanks, Dog! :)
Comment from poetbear
Powerful doesn't say it but poignant does.
You utilized every poetic and literary technique to fashion an original and important piece for readers and poets alike.
It makes a deeper sense and must be read.
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Powerful doesn't say it but poignant does.
You utilized every poetic and literary technique to fashion an original and important piece for readers and poets alike.
It makes a deeper sense and must be read.
Comment Written 27-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thanks again, Poetbear M:)
Comment from Diny
very creative yes- and I hope they have been kind to you here I truly enjoy this creative approach to the poetic form- Write on and Welcome- Di
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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very creative yes- and I hope they have been kind to you here I truly enjoy this creative approach to the poetic form- Write on and Welcome- Di
Comment Written 27-May-2011
reply by the author on 28-May-2011
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Thanks again! M:)
Comment from jehanned
Ah, powerful speech about a child's view of being affected forever by adults. Sad, and yet matter-of-fact. The words are bold, and flow well in the imagery.
reply by the author on 27-May-2011
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Ah, powerful speech about a child's view of being affected forever by adults. Sad, and yet matter-of-fact. The words are bold, and flow well in the imagery.
Comment Written 26-May-2011
reply by the author on 27-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind words, jehanned. M:)
Comment from djuan
Yes, free verse is most definitely poetry. If anyone ever needed proof they need look no further than this wonderful write.
I think your images and perspective are spot on for emphasizing the tone and emotions that the poem evokes. I also enjoyed your use of repetition in the second stanza. It sounds great when read out loud.
This is very solid contest entry. Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Yes, free verse is most definitely poetry. If anyone ever needed proof they need look no further than this wonderful write.
I think your images and perspective are spot on for emphasizing the tone and emotions that the poem evokes. I also enjoyed your use of repetition in the second stanza. It sounds great when read out loud.
This is very solid contest entry. Good luck!
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thank you, djuan!
Comment from more2write
Wow, the honesty of this poem blew me away. My heart is aching right now. What a sad story but brilliant work. I hope to read more of your writing in the future.
Happy writing, more2write
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Wow, the honesty of this poem blew me away. My heart is aching right now. What a sad story but brilliant work. I hope to read more of your writing in the future.
Happy writing, more2write
Comment Written 23-May-2011
reply by the author on 24-May-2011
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Thanks, and welcome M:)
Comment from Keronica
Wow! This is an incredibly deep piece of poetry. I especially enjoyed your choice of a title. Excellent! This is a very sad story. I liked the way you suck the reader in and do not let them know what's going on until the very end. Best of luck to you!
~Keronica
reply by the author on 21-May-2011
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Wow! This is an incredibly deep piece of poetry. I especially enjoyed your choice of a title. Excellent! This is a very sad story. I liked the way you suck the reader in and do not let them know what's going on until the very end. Best of luck to you!
~Keronica
Comment Written 20-May-2011
reply by the author on 21-May-2011
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Thank you M:)
Comment from Aletheia
This poem is so well written and highly emotive. Fantastic imagery with "thrown down thrown down" and I love the way that we see the scene through the child's eyes. So sad. Your story brought tears to my eyes. Congratulations on your nomination. You deserve it!
reply by the author on 20-May-2011
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This poem is so well written and highly emotive. Fantastic imagery with "thrown down thrown down" and I love the way that we see the scene through the child's eyes. So sad. Your story brought tears to my eyes. Congratulations on your nomination. You deserve it!
Comment Written 19-May-2011
reply by the author on 20-May-2011
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thank you for your kind words, begonia... M:)
Comment from Herb
This is lovely and sad. My favorite conflicting emotions. Maybe melancholy would be a better way to describe it. I like the rhythm like a 'dance'.
It's good to be back.
xxx
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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This is lovely and sad. My favorite conflicting emotions. Maybe melancholy would be a better way to describe it. I like the rhythm like a 'dance'.
It's good to be back.
xxx
Comment Written 10-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you again :)
Comment from Veekz
This is an exceptionally sad tale yet told so lightly and innocently through a child's eyes as the mother dances out of their life. If it's biographical, I am sorry for how confusing that must have been for you as a child. No edits needed that I could spot, this is quite a powerful piece.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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This is an exceptionally sad tale yet told so lightly and innocently through a child's eyes as the mother dances out of their life. If it's biographical, I am sorry for how confusing that must have been for you as a child. No edits needed that I could spot, this is quite a powerful piece.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2011
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Thanks again, girl:)
