Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Part two chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Nanashirley
As always you have written a story with deep feeling and understanding. I think you have a way with dealing with the troubles of the world and people.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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As always you have written a story with deep feeling and understanding. I think you have a way with dealing with the troubles of the world and people.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Troy is getting involved in Anna's life. She refused to hire a lawyer because she can't afford one. She seems to understand that she needs to get away from Bobby. He might kill her next time. Just as bad, Michael might follow his father's example and abuse his wife the same way.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Troy is getting involved in Anna's life. She refused to hire a lawyer because she can't afford one. She seems to understand that she needs to get away from Bobby. He might kill her next time. Just as bad, Michael might follow his father's example and abuse his wife the same way.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is a nice story. Anna, a young mother and a victim of a domestic violence meets Roy, a stranger, who is very sympathetic to her case. Roy visits her at the Hospital
and they had short conversations. Roy suggested that Anna consult a lawyer. He says that with things as they are, her husband could kill her, but Anna countered she had no capability of paying a lawyer. She also said, her husband could also have visitation for his son, Michael, who is at the same time in the hospital. Roy was bent on helping her
as he felt she needed somebody to take care of her.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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This is a nice story. Anna, a young mother and a victim of a domestic violence meets Roy, a stranger, who is very sympathetic to her case. Roy visits her at the Hospital
and they had short conversations. Roy suggested that Anna consult a lawyer. He says that with things as they are, her husband could kill her, but Anna countered she had no capability of paying a lawyer. She also said, her husband could also have visitation for his son, Michael, who is at the same time in the hospital. Roy was bent on helping her
as he felt she needed somebody to take care of her.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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Welcome. Dom
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Sorry I'm beind on reviewing. Chapter eight is very well written. I'm gald Anna accepted Troy's help. She needs to stay away from Bobby. I bet he'll kill her after he's released from prison. It looks your developing trust between Troy and Anna. I look forward to reading more. You doing an excellent job with this story because this happens in real life. I'm praying for you. My Limpadema has moved to my upper legs and butt area. I've been fighting an infection call Cellulitus.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Barbara,
Sorry I'm beind on reviewing. Chapter eight is very well written. I'm gald Anna accepted Troy's help. She needs to stay away from Bobby. I bet he'll kill her after he's released from prison. It looks your developing trust between Troy and Anna. I look forward to reading more. You doing an excellent job with this story because this happens in real life. I'm praying for you. My Limpadema has moved to my upper legs and butt area. I've been fighting an infection call Cellulitus.
Melissa.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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My prayers are with you. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. I feel like I am waiting for the other shoe to drop, when her husband gets out of jail.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. I feel like I am waiting for the other shoe to drop, when her husband gets out of jail.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. The other shoe does drop.
Comment from otter2000
Good to catch up with this story again. You portray the situation very well ... but. I felt the dialogue was a bit - I don't know - static. There could have been much more feeling in the words. Perhaps contrived is a better word to use. I can't believe it would be as luke-warm as this. Having said that, I liked the chapter - the characters are believable, and story moves on a bit further. Barbara, I feel a bit cheeky saying this to number 2 but I always speak my mind. Glyn
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Good to catch up with this story again. You portray the situation very well ... but. I felt the dialogue was a bit - I don't know - static. There could have been much more feeling in the words. Perhaps contrived is a better word to use. I can't believe it would be as luke-warm as this. Having said that, I liked the chapter - the characters are believable, and story moves on a bit further. Barbara, I feel a bit cheeky saying this to number 2 but I always speak my mind. Glyn
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your honest review. I appreciate it.
Comment from bookishfabler
Most women would be very angry at Troy for interfereing. And many would deny the charges on their abusive spouse. I'm glad you made her stronger than that.
He noticed her eyes glance toward him.
She turned away (-from him.) "Please go away."
"Why?" When she didn't answer, he continued, "I have information that might help."
"You called the police, didn't you?" She still faced away (-from him.)(Or her head still turned away)
( I see too many 'hims')
As Troy stood beside Michael's crib,a nurse came up to him and asked, "Are you a family member?"
(It could be my computer, but it looks like you need a space between crib, a nurse)
Hope this is helpful. Hope you had a nice Easter
hugs book
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Most women would be very angry at Troy for interfereing. And many would deny the charges on their abusive spouse. I'm glad you made her stronger than that.
He noticed her eyes glance toward him.
She turned away (-from him.) "Please go away."
"Why?" When she didn't answer, he continued, "I have information that might help."
"You called the police, didn't you?" She still faced away (-from him.)(Or her head still turned away)
( I see too many 'hims')
As Troy stood beside Michael's crib,a nurse came up to him and asked, "Are you a family member?"
(It could be my computer, but it looks like you need a space between crib, a nurse)
Hope this is helpful. Hope you had a nice Easter
hugs book
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and eagle eye.
Comment from Tellis
I'm glad he's smart enough not to push her too fast after the way she's been treated by a guy. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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I'm glad he's smart enough not to push her too fast after the way she's been treated by a guy. I enjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from LunarSecret
I have given five stars for the mechanics of the chapter.
Without going into detail I have experience of dealing domestic abuse cases and found Anna lackluster in her attitude.
Those who suffer abuse alone and believe it is 'their fault' can be like this, but with a small baby they gain strength.
It was a smooth read, just didn't seem realistic enough for me.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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I have given five stars for the mechanics of the chapter.
Without going into detail I have experience of dealing domestic abuse cases and found Anna lackluster in her attitude.
Those who suffer abuse alone and believe it is 'their fault' can be like this, but with a small baby they gain strength.
It was a smooth read, just didn't seem realistic enough for me.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I think if you followed this chapter from the beginning to the end you find Anna does blame herself, especially in the next post.
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My review said I felt she blamed herself - a sad fact in abuse - how the abuser holds power. So sad.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
Your story is very interesting. It is expressive and descriptive which makes for a great read. You really bring your characters to life and left this reader wanting to read more. Excellent read, God bless you!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Your story is very interesting. It is expressive and descriptive which makes for a great read. You really bring your characters to life and left this reader wanting to read more. Excellent read, God bless you!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
