Midnight Murderers
To those who have stolen my life.31 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Instead of discussing your poem, I would like to know how your move went and if you feeling any better. You know I don't do gore very well.
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Instead of discussing your poem, I would like to know how your move went and if you feeling any better. You know I don't do gore very well.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from MS Writer
Wow what a powerful poem. I love the "gnashing curs". Excellent rhyme and great quick pace. I really enjoyed this "Dark Side" poetry. Great job.
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Wow what a powerful poem. I love the "gnashing curs". Excellent rhyme and great quick pace. I really enjoyed this "Dark Side" poetry. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from sugardog
Wow...so dark and scary!! And I understand what you are feeling. You have expressed your nightmares well here. Smart word choices-"curs" and "cretins"-wow...you really packed a punch with this one, Suse!!!! The repeated line is very effective. Nice work and i hope you are okay, my dear friend. Dana
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Wow...so dark and scary!! And I understand what you are feeling. You have expressed your nightmares well here. Smart word choices-"curs" and "cretins"-wow...you really packed a punch with this one, Suse!!!! The repeated line is very effective. Nice work and i hope you are okay, my dear friend. Dana
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from missy98writer
Susan,
your dark poem is wonderfully written with very dark imagery. Your art work is perfect. . Your poem has solid rhyming. You've effectively used the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor. Your third stanza was my favorite; "With horrid, hateful hurt they stir These cretin's coming from Madness, mayhem, gnashing curs Of evils darkened slum..." An excellent dark poem, my friend.
Melissa.
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Susan,
your dark poem is wonderfully written with very dark imagery. Your art work is perfect. . Your poem has solid rhyming. You've effectively used the poetic devices alliteration and metaphor. Your third stanza was my favorite; "With horrid, hateful hurt they stir These cretin's coming from Madness, mayhem, gnashing curs Of evils darkened slum..." An excellent dark poem, my friend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with good imagery and flows. Hi Susan picture is a bit gory. I hope it does not match your mood LOL. Any WAY A GOOD WRITE YOUR SCRIPT IS WELL WRITTEN THANKS FOR SHARING. Take care my friend.
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A good write with good imagery and flows. Hi Susan picture is a bit gory. I hope it does not match your mood LOL. Any WAY A GOOD WRITE YOUR SCRIPT IS WELL WRITTEN THANKS FOR SHARING. Take care my friend.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from Carrie Smith
Really dark, Suse and I know exactly where you are coming from! Great imagery, great rhyme, great alliteration. Your use of curs - perfect! xoxoSusan
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Really dark, Suse and I know exactly where you are coming from! Great imagery, great rhyme, great alliteration. Your use of curs - perfect! xoxoSusan
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from Patrick Jordan
Those demons from the past are hard to shake. Your write really reflects the horrors of abusers. Dark as a slum. Thank God the we have the ability to change and move on. But it takes years. This is a fine poem!
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Those demons from the past are hard to shake. Your write really reflects the horrors of abusers. Dark as a slum. Thank God the we have the ability to change and move on. But it takes years. This is a fine poem!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from c_lucas
I guess you have genre jumped. This caught me by surprise. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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I guess you have genre jumped. This caught me by surprise. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from Espresso momma
This is very well metered and rhymed stanzas. An imaginative person unlike myself can only do poetry like this. Thanks for sharing.
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This is very well metered and rhymed stanzas. An imaginative person unlike myself can only do poetry like this. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, my goodness, Susan..
where did this come from!!
What a grissly, scary read.
And here's me feeling so annoyed over a cracked car-screen. We were driving out through the villages today and two young boys of about ten threw stones at passing cars... one cracked our windscreen... only about 5 inches long, but since it is an actual crack, it means a new screen which costs well over £500 from insurance, and the excess of £75 which we have to pay. We caught the boys, and one started crying... (in a play-ground) and Colin spoke to his Mum, who gave us a name and phone-number for us to let her know the cost, but who knows if it is genuine!! So sickening.. plus it could have caused an accident. KIds!!
Margaret
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Oh, my goodness, Susan..
where did this come from!!
What a grissly, scary read.
And here's me feeling so annoyed over a cracked car-screen. We were driving out through the villages today and two young boys of about ten threw stones at passing cars... one cracked our windscreen... only about 5 inches long, but since it is an actual crack, it means a new screen which costs well over £500 from insurance, and the excess of £75 which we have to pay. We caught the boys, and one started crying... (in a play-ground) and Colin spoke to his Mum, who gave us a name and phone-number for us to let her know the cost, but who knows if it is genuine!! So sickening.. plus it could have caused an accident. KIds!!
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
