Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Part One chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from WilliamDeen
Good Writing. Enjoying the story . The reading was interesting from beginning to end. I really like the character of Troy. Looking forward to what happens next.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Good Writing. Enjoying the story . The reading was interesting from beginning to end. I really like the character of Troy. Looking forward to what happens next.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from acvguard11
great job..i see why this piece is recognized and an all time best...and i love the picture you choose to accompany this piece...wonderfully written and hope to see more soon...good luck
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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great job..i see why this piece is recognized and an all time best...and i love the picture you choose to accompany this piece...wonderfully written and hope to see more soon...good luck
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Fireshadow
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Barbara, this is another well written narrative with detailed descriptions and excellent dialogue. It's a pity Anna was beaten up so bad she needed an ambulance to take her away. I'm glad you've brought up the Stockholm Syndrome and the issue of low self esteem in your notes - both key elements in tolerating and sustaining an abusive relationship.
Found it real cute your hubby wants everyone to know he doesn't abuse you ! :-)
Thanks for sharing this excellent write, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Barbara, this is another well written narrative with detailed descriptions and excellent dialogue. It's a pity Anna was beaten up so bad she needed an ambulance to take her away. I'm glad you've brought up the Stockholm Syndrome and the issue of low self esteem in your notes - both key elements in tolerating and sustaining an abusive relationship.
Found it real cute your hubby wants everyone to know he doesn't abuse you ! :-)
Thanks for sharing this excellent write, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dale95
What a good story that needs to be read by all. Even our kids in grade school need to know that, standing up for our own selves is the most important lesson we can ever learn. Fear is the enemy.
Sounds like you've got a good hubby. Write On. -Dale
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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What a good story that needs to be read by all. Even our kids in grade school need to know that, standing up for our own selves is the most important lesson we can ever learn. Fear is the enemy.
Sounds like you've got a good hubby. Write On. -Dale
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and wisdom.
Comment from taravan
AHHHHH! You so can't leave it here. I need to know what happened. How badly is she hurt? Does Bobby get bail. Will she leave him? Is she mad at Troy for calling the police. I need more.
Yes it is good it is very good. I was too involved to see any missed words or grammatical errors. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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AHHHHH! You so can't leave it here. I need to know what happened. How badly is she hurt? Does Bobby get bail. Will she leave him? Is she mad at Troy for calling the police. I need more.
Yes it is good it is very good. I was too involved to see any missed words or grammatical errors. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. Many of your questions will be answered in my next post.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
This is an interesting chapter in your book and Troy's Dad gave him very sound advice when he told him to keep his distance so that Bobby could not try and implicate him in the present situation.
I have given you 5 stars, knowing that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* You have - sat on the back porch staring at a squirrel, he named Rocky, run up and down a tree. I suggest - sat on the back porch staring at a squirrel which he had named Rocky, as it ran up and down a tree.
* You have - I better make some ice tea ... I suggest -
I had better make some iced-tea ...
* You have - Paul stroked at worn baseball sitting on in a display on his desk. I suggest - Paul stroked a warn baseball that was (proudly) displayed on his desk.
* You have - After he drank a cold glass of tea ...
I suggest - After he drank a glass of cold tea ...
Now, I look forward to what the next chapter will bring.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Hullo Barbara ....
This is an interesting chapter in your book and Troy's Dad gave him very sound advice when he told him to keep his distance so that Bobby could not try and implicate him in the present situation.
I have given you 5 stars, knowing that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* You have - sat on the back porch staring at a squirrel, he named Rocky, run up and down a tree. I suggest - sat on the back porch staring at a squirrel which he had named Rocky, as it ran up and down a tree.
* You have - I better make some ice tea ... I suggest -
I had better make some iced-tea ...
* You have - Paul stroked at worn baseball sitting on in a display on his desk. I suggest - Paul stroked a warn baseball that was (proudly) displayed on his desk.
* You have - After he drank a cold glass of tea ...
I suggest - After he drank a glass of cold tea ...
Now, I look forward to what the next chapter will bring.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and eagle eye.
Comment from Nanashirley
He must see the way you write with the feeling for your characters that most of your readers fell you have been there big time. I saw no need for editing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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He must see the way you write with the feeling for your characters that most of your readers fell you have been there big time. I saw no need for editing.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from carolenaleigh
I think you need to explain Stockholm syndrome within the story. Good flow of dialogue that sounds natural. I think I'll go back and read more of your book.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I think you need to explain Stockholm syndrome within the story. Good flow of dialogue that sounds natural. I think I'll go back and read more of your book.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I added a definition in the author's notes. I will go into more detail in the next post. Anna will do so explaining herself.
Comment from Lostworld21
Continue to love your work! I feel terrible for women who are unable to get out of the relationships they so desperately need to leave. An abusive nature comes from massive complexes, wish men found a better way of dealing with their maladies. Will be back to read more!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Continue to love your work! I feel terrible for women who are unable to get out of the relationships they so desperately need to leave. An abusive nature comes from massive complexes, wish men found a better way of dealing with their maladies. Will be back to read more!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb,
I like how Alex's father told Alex to not get involved with Anna and her very abusive husband.
I can't believe he said Anna was a good friend( I believe he is very much in love with her)
Yes your hubby made a very wise suggestion
( he is a very kind man)
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Hi Barb,
I like how Alex's father told Alex to not get involved with Anna and her very abusive husband.
I can't believe he said Anna was a good friend( I believe he is very much in love with her)
Yes your hubby made a very wise suggestion
( he is a very kind man)
Gert
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I agree Troy's feelings for Anna are stronger than friendship. I don't think he know's it yet. I appreciate your kind review.
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Hi Barb you are so welcome
Gert
