Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Part One chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from lisasolorio1
So far so good. Very descriptive again and how I can relate to an abusive husband and the fight to break yourself and your kids away from the abuse. Very hard indeed. Good and uplifting story if all goes right. ;)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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So far so good. Very descriptive again and how I can relate to an abusive husband and the fight to break yourself and your kids away from the abuse. Very hard indeed. Good and uplifting story if all goes right. ;)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Troy has decided that Anna won't go back to her husband. He has enlisted his father's help. His father brought up a good point. What is she decides to go back to her husband? Women like Anna stay with their husbands out of fear. They don't think they can make it on their own.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Troy has decided that Anna won't go back to her husband. He has enlisted his father's help. His father brought up a good point. What is she decides to go back to her husband? Women like Anna stay with their husbands out of fear. They don't think they can make it on their own.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
I can understand why your husband would ask you to add
that little note as you write about the subject extremely
well. He probably began worrying that people thought you
were writing from first-hand experience.
thanks for sharing another great chapter.
love,
jan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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barbara:
I can understand why your husband would ask you to add
that little note as you write about the subject extremely
well. He probably began worrying that people thought you
were writing from first-hand experience.
thanks for sharing another great chapter.
love,
jan
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and husband appreciates your understanding.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent story. You characters are strong and the dialogue is very good. I am curious about what is going to happen with the husband and if Anna will leave him. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Excellent story. You characters are strong and the dialogue is very good. I am curious about what is going to happen with the husband and if Anna will leave him. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Cogitator
The work gets better and better. Although I haven't responded before, I have been reading your work. I only award five stars to the work I read. This is deserving...John
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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The work gets better and better. Although I haven't responded before, I have been reading your work. I only award five stars to the work I read. This is deserving...John
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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My pleasure...John
Comment from dcervantes
Well written. Good structure and flow. Stories such as this bring to light and to the public what so many women face in the dark. It's possible more women in this situation will read a story of fiction, as opposed to something more technical, be able to relate then hopefully find the will to seek help. Your well written story may serve this very purpose.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Well written. Good structure and flow. Stories such as this bring to light and to the public what so many women face in the dark. It's possible more women in this situation will read a story of fiction, as opposed to something more technical, be able to relate then hopefully find the will to seek help. Your well written story may serve this very purpose.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Brendastar
The plot is interesting and it's very well written. The dialogue flows easily. There is just one sentence you might want to correct: Paul stroked (at) a worn baseball sitting (on) in a display on his desk..."
I'm pleased to know this is NOT autobiographical!!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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The plot is interesting and it's very well written. The dialogue flows easily. There is just one sentence you might want to correct: Paul stroked (at) a worn baseball sitting (on) in a display on his desk..."
I'm pleased to know this is NOT autobiographical!!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I will make the correction.
Comment from Connie P
I'm very glad Troy decided to get involved and call 911, he may have saved her life. Now the question is, will she go back to Bobby or have the courage to strike out on her own. Stockholm Syndrome is very real. Also, will Troy take his father's advice and stay out of the picture until she makes her decision. If Bobby gets a chance he will likely kill her.
Intense chapter!!!
Notes:
*If you're asking, do I like her? Yes, I do.*(wondering if the question mark is needed here.)
Paul stroked at*(a?) worn baseball sitting on in*?) a display on his desk (Take a look at this sentence, it needs some restructuring)
Connie
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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I'm very glad Troy decided to get involved and call 911, he may have saved her life. Now the question is, will she go back to Bobby or have the courage to strike out on her own. Stockholm Syndrome is very real. Also, will Troy take his father's advice and stay out of the picture until she makes her decision. If Bobby gets a chance he will likely kill her.
Intense chapter!!!
Notes:
*If you're asking, do I like her? Yes, I do.*(wondering if the question mark is needed here.)
Paul stroked at*(a?) worn baseball sitting on in*?) a display on his desk (Take a look at this sentence, it needs some restructuring)
Connie
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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I will make the corrections. I appreciate your reveiw and support.
Comment from koneart
So, do you know the legal ins-and-outs then? Cuz, this would be good information for a reader. Well written and I didn't see any errors, which, if it were me, would be a miracle! Very well done. kone
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So, do you know the legal ins-and-outs then? Cuz, this would be good information for a reader. Well written and I didn't see any errors, which, if it were me, would be a miracle! Very well done. kone
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. The flow was great and now we are getting a glimpse into Troy,s life.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. The flow was great and now we are getting a glimpse into Troy,s life.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
