Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Part One chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from bookishfabler
It is unfortuete that as outsiders we can't imagine someone taking back an abusive spouse, but the reality it, they almost always do, and almost always forgive, and almost always don't even press charges. Many even wind up dead.
Troy parked the car in the circle (circular) driveway and glanced at the huge house
hugs Book
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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It is unfortuete that as outsiders we can't imagine someone taking back an abusive spouse, but the reality it, they almost always do, and almost always forgive, and almost always don't even press charges. Many even wind up dead.
Troy parked the car in the circle (circular) driveway and glanced at the huge house
hugs Book
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and eagle eye.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is another interesting chapter and here you have enlarged the plot and the characters. Troy's parents sound interesting and it's almost as if there's another story hiding behind them. Very well done
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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This is another interesting chapter and here you have enlarged the plot and the characters. Troy's parents sound interesting and it's almost as if there's another story hiding behind them. Very well done
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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There just might be. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Writeaway...
A new chapter, yay. Your wrting is always showing improvment Barbara, you captivated my interest from beginning to end and I cannot suggest anything for impromvent, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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A new chapter, yay. Your wrting is always showing improvment Barbara, you captivated my interest from beginning to end and I cannot suggest anything for impromvent, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from UPdreamer
Such a deep concept addressing such a prominent issue. I adore your use of thought v. dialogue. Excellent prose, a couple of grammar issues, but nothing major. Can't bring myself to bring you down to 4 stars because of it.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Such a deep concept addressing such a prominent issue. I adore your use of thought v. dialogue. Excellent prose, a couple of grammar issues, but nothing major. Can't bring myself to bring you down to 4 stars because of it.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I am going to fix those areas, this weekend. I was too busy this week to.
Comment from Moonlith
Another well written chapter. I enjoy reading each one. I like how you add new characters and how you give us bits and pieces about their lives. Troy's mother seems so real, just like any mother that loves her son. In each chapter I learn a little more about Troy. I like the character of Troy's father but feel some undercurrent between them that might be revealed in the next chapter. The comments that Troy makes to himself gives the reader insights into his feelings and past and present life. Nice job once more. Thanks for sharing. I will continue on to read more chapters.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Another well written chapter. I enjoy reading each one. I like how you add new characters and how you give us bits and pieces about their lives. Troy's mother seems so real, just like any mother that loves her son. In each chapter I learn a little more about Troy. I like the character of Troy's father but feel some undercurrent between them that might be revealed in the next chapter. The comments that Troy makes to himself gives the reader insights into his feelings and past and present life. Nice job once more. Thanks for sharing. I will continue on to read more chapters.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and you are right. Troy has issues of his own.
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You are welcome.
Comment from dylan49
Great story, I enjoy'd reading it. In all hounesty I'm more into poems and don't get into many storys. But i very muxh enjoyed this one.
GREAT READ
Dylan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Great story, I enjoy'd reading it. In all hounesty I'm more into poems and don't get into many storys. But i very muxh enjoyed this one.
GREAT READ
Dylan
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. Poems are shorter to read.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, this is an excellent chapter. One of my daughters is with an abuser when he gets drunk and you're right their self-esteem is low. The abuse only makes it worse.
A couple of things, this first sentence doesn't read as smooth as the rest.
A woman officer carried Michael and walked beside the stretcher (Suggestion: A woman officer carrying Michael walked beside the stretcher)
Paul stroked at (delete at add a) worn baseball sitting on in a display on his desk
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Hi Barbara, this is an excellent chapter. One of my daughters is with an abuser when he gets drunk and you're right their self-esteem is low. The abuse only makes it worse.
A couple of things, this first sentence doesn't read as smooth as the rest.
A woman officer carried Michael and walked beside the stretcher (Suggestion: A woman officer carrying Michael walked beside the stretcher)
Paul stroked at (delete at add a) worn baseball sitting on in a display on his desk
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. My prayers are with your daughter.
Comment from patmedium
BEAUTIFULly done, Barbara. I was involved with this every step of the way, bless you. You really are using your lifetime's work experience here ... it's all grist to your mill. Keep it up, sweetheart. xxx
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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BEAUTIFULly done, Barbara. I was involved with this every step of the way, bless you. You really are using your lifetime's work experience here ... it's all grist to your mill. Keep it up, sweetheart. xxx
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
Whew! At least she's still alive and the baby still has a mother. I enjoyed this excellent chapter and hope you're doing well.
Tellis
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Whew! At least she's still alive and the baby still has a mother. I enjoyed this excellent chapter and hope you're doing well.
Tellis
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I've started following your story with some interest, and will be keen to see where it ends up - judging by your intro, there will be a few twists and turns to come.
Just one small typo to report; 'Paul stroked at worn baseball '
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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I've started following your story with some interest, and will be keen to see where it ends up - judging by your intro, there will be a few twists and turns to come.
Just one small typo to report; 'Paul stroked at worn baseball '
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and eagle eye.
