God Granted Him His Wish
His Last Walk88 total reviews
Comment from despiser
Cedar
I suppose you would have to know the criteria upon which such decisions are made by God. To me, they seem to be somewhat random in nature, but who am I to question. This tale is neatly compiled, with a clear and engaging storyline and reads well. Good work.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Cedar
I suppose you would have to know the criteria upon which such decisions are made by God. To me, they seem to be somewhat random in nature, but who am I to question. This tale is neatly compiled, with a clear and engaging storyline and reads well. Good work.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thanks my friend for your review. Have a great day. Bill
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a really beautiful poem. My father is in a hospital, soon to be a nursing home, and he was a farmer for most of his life. Your poem really does a fantastic job of posing one of the most disturbing aspects of our society, why people end up in windowless boxes of rooms staring at walls and shut out from nature. I think we could do much, much better than that. Like you, I hope to end my life differently. Thanks for sharing your personal story presented in such a magnificent manner on your father's behalf. Best of luck in the contest. Bev
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This is a really beautiful poem. My father is in a hospital, soon to be a nursing home, and he was a farmer for most of his life. Your poem really does a fantastic job of posing one of the most disturbing aspects of our society, why people end up in windowless boxes of rooms staring at walls and shut out from nature. I think we could do much, much better than that. Like you, I hope to end my life differently. Thanks for sharing your personal story presented in such a magnificent manner on your father's behalf. Best of luck in the contest. Bev
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you Bev for your inspiring review. Your words are so true. Have a great day. Bill
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My pleasure, Bill. Take care.
Comment from c_lucas
It is a shame how the aged are treated in our society. This is a very well written story/poet. There is a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
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It is a shame how the aged are treated in our society. This is a very well written story/poet. There is a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thanks my friend for your kind words. Take care. Bill
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You're welcome, Bill. Charlie
Comment from MaryLinda
A truly sad, but heartwarming "Story in a Poem". You tell the story so well, with terrific imagery and excellent meter. Your obvious talent for rhythm and rhyme make the words of the poem flow so well. MaryLinda
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A truly sad, but heartwarming "Story in a Poem". You tell the story so well, with terrific imagery and excellent meter. Your obvious talent for rhythm and rhyme make the words of the poem flow so well. MaryLinda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you Mary Linda for your excellent review and inspiring words. Have a great day. Bill
Comment from lola29
Your entry is sad, but I'm happy the old man was granted his wish to die at home in his field of plenty; a place he created from his blood, sweat and tears.
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Your entry is sad, but I'm happy the old man was granted his wish to die at home in his field of plenty; a place he created from his blood, sweat and tears.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thanks Lola and you're right, he spent many long hours taking care of his land. Thanks again. Bill
Comment from Adama
Aww this is a sad poem which flows well. My father never got his wish to return home to his garden either. I wish you well. Good luck in the contest.
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Aww this is a sad poem which flows well. My father never got his wish to return home to his garden either. I wish you well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much and I'm sorry about your father. I bet his garden in Heaven is really something to see. Thanks/Bill
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Aww, never thought about it like that...thank you.
Comment from Joan E.
What a lovely tribute to your dad and perfect picture to accompany it. When the day comes, I certainly hope you get your wish--my brother did not want to die in a hospital and was granted his desire--on chemo, he got a few more months and was able to travel to his son's home on the land in Mexico. (In stanza four, "used" lost its "d.") I thoroughly admired your ability to tell this touching story in rhyming quatrains. Best wishes in the contestwith this powerful entry. -Joan
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What a lovely tribute to your dad and perfect picture to accompany it. When the day comes, I certainly hope you get your wish--my brother did not want to die in a hospital and was granted his desire--on chemo, he got a few more months and was able to travel to his son's home on the land in Mexico. (In stanza four, "used" lost its "d.") I thoroughly admired your ability to tell this touching story in rhyming quatrains. Best wishes in the contestwith this powerful entry. -Joan
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thanks Joan for your wonderful review and suggestion. I appreciate your very kind words. Have a great day. Bill
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Many thanks for your gracious response. -Joan
Comment from miss joyce
Feeling as though I took this walk with the old farmer was purely due to your effective words imagery. I could have been there as your heart wrenching tale unfolded. Simply a powerful scene here and am pleased to have read and reviewed.
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Feeling as though I took this walk with the old farmer was purely due to your effective words imagery. I could have been there as your heart wrenching tale unfolded. Simply a powerful scene here and am pleased to have read and reviewed.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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I thank you so much for your wonderful review my friend. I am truly glad that you enjoyed it. Have a great day. Bill
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You, my friend are very welcome!
Blessings...
Comment from Frankeddy
What a nice rhyming poem that describes what happens in a lot of cases.
Brought back memories of my uncle Jim. He was dedicated to his land and often
expressed it. Great tribute to your father. Your well chosen picture sets the
scene perfectly.
Very good thoughtful poem. I enjoyed it. Frankeddy
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What a nice rhyming poem that describes what happens in a lot of cases.
Brought back memories of my uncle Jim. He was dedicated to his land and often
expressed it. Great tribute to your father. Your well chosen picture sets the
scene perfectly.
Very good thoughtful poem. I enjoyed it. Frankeddy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you my friend for your great review. The land just gets in your blood and you become a part of it and it becomes a part of you. Thanks again. Bill
Comment from The Stranger
this is a wonderful poem come story of a dying farmer gaining his one final request, that he be allowed to die on his beloved farm land
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this is a wonderful poem come story of a dying farmer gaining his one final request, that he be allowed to die on his beloved farm land
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you my friend for your kind words, I appreciate it. Take care of yourself. Bill
