Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Part three Chapter two"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from amada
A short but very fast moving chapter with lots of happenings and wonderings of what is next. I enjoyed the fast pace of it.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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A short but very fast moving chapter with lots of happenings and wonderings of what is next. I enjoyed the fast pace of it.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from K. L. Bauman
Short but very good, as always. I'm drawn into this story I think because it is so real in this world. I believe there are many women out there who would relate, and hopefully, will be helped by your story.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Short but very good, as always. I'm drawn into this story I think because it is so real in this world. I believe there are many women out there who would relate, and hopefully, will be helped by your story.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
I am glad Troy followed his instincts and went to Ann'a house. Too bad Bobby had to be there. Troy was right to call 911, and Anna should not blame him for interfering. Afterall, she has a son to think of too. This is a short story, but it came across nicely as I now see a ray of hope for Anna. It emphasises the concern and determination of people who want to help others in their crisis. Troy is such a person I would want in my corner. I am pleased to hear your treatments are going well, and continue to pray for you. Michelle
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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I am glad Troy followed his instincts and went to Ann'a house. Too bad Bobby had to be there. Troy was right to call 911, and Anna should not blame him for interfering. Afterall, she has a son to think of too. This is a short story, but it came across nicely as I now see a ray of hope for Anna. It emphasises the concern and determination of people who want to help others in their crisis. Troy is such a person I would want in my corner. I am pleased to hear your treatments are going well, and continue to pray for you. Michelle
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your prayers.
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All the best.
Comment from quashdog
For a short post it had lots of emotion and suspense. Very good piece of writing. Yes, this is a serious subject and all too real for many women. A dear friend of mine was shot dead in'98 by her boyfreind so this story stikes a nerve.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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For a short post it had lots of emotion and suspense. Very good piece of writing. Yes, this is a serious subject and all too real for many women. A dear friend of mine was shot dead in'98 by her boyfreind so this story stikes a nerve.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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I am sorry it strikes a nerve. Unfortunately, it happens way too often. I deal with it often. I teach first grade in a ghetto school. Many children come to school after a night of abuse in there home, where their mother's were beat up by boyfriends, husbands, pimps, or johns. It's rarely their fathers, because they don't know who thier father is. I have sat with the mother's who were beaten up and dried their tears, yet they always go back. Thank you for your kind review.
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It is so frustrating to see these women going back to such abusive men. My friend was not like that, he was the first to treat her like that and she was not going to put up with it so she decided to leave him. He responded by shooting her dead. The worst part is that I was a mile away when it happened. I was going to see him about some work related matters but decided that I was too hot and tired and needed a cold shower so I went home instead. According to police timeline of events, she died sometime between the time I took off for home and before I got there.
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My heart goes out to you.
Comment from taravan
very well written i wish there were more people like troy in this world. This is a great place to end the chapter. It leaves our imagination wondering what happened to Michael?
Im glad to hear its not as bad as chemo hope everything works out.
i look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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very well written i wish there were more people like troy in this world. This is a great place to end the chapter. It leaves our imagination wondering what happened to Michael?
Im glad to hear its not as bad as chemo hope everything works out.
i look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
As you say in your Notes at the end, this is a short chapter in your book but from the outset, it grips the attention of your readers. Now, we can only patiently wait for the next chapter. There is nothing to suggest changing.
Thank you for keeping us informed about your health condition and now the radiation treatment.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Hullo Barbara ....
As you say in your Notes at the end, this is a short chapter in your book but from the outset, it grips the attention of your readers. Now, we can only patiently wait for the next chapter. There is nothing to suggest changing.
Thank you for keeping us informed about your health condition and now the radiation treatment.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Fireshadow
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Barbara, glad to hear radiation isn't as bad as chemo. Keep the faith, my friend.
Although this segment of your story is short, nonetheless, it's very intense, leaving the reader in suspenseful anticipation. Very well written - found no spag errors.
Thanks for sharing it, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Barbara, glad to hear radiation isn't as bad as chemo. Keep the faith, my friend.
Although this segment of your story is short, nonetheless, it's very intense, leaving the reader in suspenseful anticipation. Very well written - found no spag errors.
Thanks for sharing it, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from jclark
Wow! You did a fantastic job with so few words. I felt physically ill when I read this as your words painted Anna's abuse and her abuser so vividly. Incredible chapter and now I am anxiously awaiting the outcome for this poor woman and her child.
Judy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Wow! You did a fantastic job with so few words. I felt physically ill when I read this as your words painted Anna's abuse and her abuser so vividly. Incredible chapter and now I am anxiously awaiting the outcome for this poor woman and her child.
Judy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and the stars.
Comment from dmjones
Even though it was short it was suspenseful. Well written also. Troy's probably doing the right thing which adds to his nice guy character.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Even though it was short it was suspenseful. Well written also. Troy's probably doing the right thing which adds to his nice guy character.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I'm so mad that bastard Bobby is beating Anna. I glad Troy showed up. I love how you left me hanging. Your short chapter is excellent, but only gave us a taste. We want the full buffet. Your dialogue is spot on for an abusive drunken wife beater. I'd have Bobby run over or shot. I happy to read your author notes where you explain the reason for the short chapter. I'm glad you've started radiation and you'll keep a smile. Kick cancers ass for me. Love ya.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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Barbara,
I'm so mad that bastard Bobby is beating Anna. I glad Troy showed up. I love how you left me hanging. Your short chapter is excellent, but only gave us a taste. We want the full buffet. Your dialogue is spot on for an abusive drunken wife beater. I'd have Bobby run over or shot. I happy to read your author notes where you explain the reason for the short chapter. I'm glad you've started radiation and you'll keep a smile. Kick cancers ass for me. Love ya.
Melissa.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2011
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You work miracles with computers. I wish I was a good at them as your are. Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words. When it comes time for Bobby to die I will consider being run over and shot.
