The Glass Cat Eye
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Meeting of the Hearts"Talking to the dead has its consequences
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Comment from The Stranger
this story continues to be compelling and the characters are very well mapped out in their relevance, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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this story continues to be compelling and the characters are very well mapped out in their relevance, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this
Comment Written 17-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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Thank you Stranger. I really appreciate you stopping by and giving such a great review. Blessings to you my friend. Have a great Sunday.
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--Good story here; fun stuff.
This is my second chapter in this book and so far it's been great.
--Story of voodoo, love, investigation, all good stuff.
--no glaring, thus distracting, grammar issues; the tale was well told and flowed nicely.
--Good suspense created; we'll want to get down to this Madame Reece issue. What's she up to and what's she planning for Esther?
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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--Good story here; fun stuff.
This is my second chapter in this book and so far it's been great.
--Story of voodoo, love, investigation, all good stuff.
--no glaring, thus distracting, grammar issues; the tale was well told and flowed nicely.
--Good suspense created; we'll want to get down to this Madame Reece issue. What's she up to and what's she planning for Esther?
Comment Written 17-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reading. I really do appreciate your time and reviewing. Writing a full story like this is not as easy as I thought. My hat goes off for those of you here who are really good at this. And I hope some of you rub off on me.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I think you chose the perfect picture to illustrate your writing. This is a very enjoyable story. You have real life characters with great dialogue.
Excellent chapter!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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I think you chose the perfect picture to illustrate your writing. This is a very enjoyable story. You have real life characters with great dialogue.
Excellent chapter!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
The suspense heightens as the action continues. Esther, of course, is pegged to be an eventual victim and Steven will have to rescue her. Or do you have something even better in mind? Well written. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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The suspense heightens as the action continues. Esther, of course, is pegged to be an eventual victim and Steven will have to rescue her. Or do you have something even better in mind? Well written. :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much Nancy for stopping and reading. I hope you continue to enjoy the future chapters.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Man shows fear of his ignorance and of things he doesn't understand.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Man shows fear of his ignorance and of things he doesn't understand.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
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Thank you lucas for stopping by and reviewing. Hope you're having a great weekend.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from RebelRose
"Steve, give me call." I think you left out [a] in this sentence.
This is an interesting chapter. Believable dialogue and good story line. Good flow to the story.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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"Steve, give me call." I think you left out [a] in this sentence.
This is an interesting chapter. Believable dialogue and good story line. Good flow to the story.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Thank you Rose. I really do appreciate you stopping by. I will check and make the correction.
Comment from ulster3
Hello amahra...
This continues to hold MUCH interest and moves at a fast pace. I just love to read this kind of story. It is definitely edge of seat stuff. I can picture a movie like this.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Hello amahra...
This continues to hold MUCH interest and moves at a fast pace. I just love to read this kind of story. It is definitely edge of seat stuff. I can picture a movie like this.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 16-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Thank you Rebecca for reviewing. I'm so glad you liked it. Hope you're having a great weekend.
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I did enjoy it. it is POURING rain here, and therefore a good day to be reading. I hope your own week-end is a good one too. :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great chapter for your book, i am enjoying reading it, the character trying to keep a personal relationship while working on solving a case
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great chapter for your book, i am enjoying reading it, the character trying to keep a personal relationship while working on solving a case
Comment Written 16-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reviewing my story. Blessings to you my friend.
Comment from lola29
You are definitely writing a thriller, which can easily become a best-seller since almost everyone is interested in the unknown. I enjoyed this chapter very much and as you requested, I've noted a few things for your consideration and approval:
those (feelings) had changed.
she had chosen for the night (,) then dabbed on
pulling up where? Where are you?
Why the mystery? Is it a guy?
No, it's not a guy.
He dreaded her saying that (new paragraph)
Steven didn't answer, but hung up (new paragraph)
Steven headed to Madame Reece's house.
Doc said, sounding concerned.
Are you at Madame Reece's house?
delete Doc reasoned
headache (one word)
well (,) there's nothing you can do
they both shared; however, Steven kept calling
Steve, I'm sorry about tonight
Okay, see at six.
He looked at Doc and smiled
Steven was stress-free
They analyzed each other's solutions for bringing down UPC.
They parted around midnight.
Make him go away - new paragraph
new paragraph Steven hit at the raven, but missed.
4:00 a.m. in the morning with nearly
Steven woke at 8 and prepared for his work day, wishing it had already ended.
Steven was well-liked by his co-workers, and they noticed that today he was acting especially pleasant and charming, so they decided to tease him about is new love, Esther. Steven just smiled.
Steven waited eagerly at Kofi's, Esther's favorite restaurant. If he was in a booth, how could she float to towards the table? I thought her hair was the color of chestnut?
Steven rose and greeted her with a hug.
Ater chitchatting for a while, they decided to order.
but she felt like ice
Steven, you know I'm very fond you, but I think of you as only a dear friend. delete he swallowed hard.
delete Esther struggled
It's ... um ... okay, he said
As Esther held onto Steven's arm, he stared at the ocean's waves, wishing they would swallow him up.
As Esther continued to hold onto his arm, he realized his dream was coming to an end because he loved someone who did not love him.
Steven stared at his computer where he had been all day, trying to research the work Doc had given him, but he couldn't keep his mind off Esther.
The report was exactly as Mrs. Dawson said:
dismissed claims that these (sightings)
A blog reported
Son, you don't know what you're up against.
what would you suggest (I) do
speak English; will you
delete oh - names of
new paragraph - Doc was ecstatic
(,) Doc warned sternly
I got it! I got it!
After he hung up with Doc, he checked the flights to Cleveland.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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You are definitely writing a thriller, which can easily become a best-seller since almost everyone is interested in the unknown. I enjoyed this chapter very much and as you requested, I've noted a few things for your consideration and approval:
those (feelings) had changed.
she had chosen for the night (,) then dabbed on
pulling up where? Where are you?
Why the mystery? Is it a guy?
No, it's not a guy.
He dreaded her saying that (new paragraph)
Steven didn't answer, but hung up (new paragraph)
Steven headed to Madame Reece's house.
Doc said, sounding concerned.
Are you at Madame Reece's house?
delete Doc reasoned
headache (one word)
well (,) there's nothing you can do
they both shared; however, Steven kept calling
Steve, I'm sorry about tonight
Okay, see at six.
He looked at Doc and smiled
Steven was stress-free
They analyzed each other's solutions for bringing down UPC.
They parted around midnight.
Make him go away - new paragraph
new paragraph Steven hit at the raven, but missed.
4:00 a.m. in the morning with nearly
Steven woke at 8 and prepared for his work day, wishing it had already ended.
Steven was well-liked by his co-workers, and they noticed that today he was acting especially pleasant and charming, so they decided to tease him about is new love, Esther. Steven just smiled.
Steven waited eagerly at Kofi's, Esther's favorite restaurant. If he was in a booth, how could she float to towards the table? I thought her hair was the color of chestnut?
Steven rose and greeted her with a hug.
Ater chitchatting for a while, they decided to order.
but she felt like ice
Steven, you know I'm very fond you, but I think of you as only a dear friend. delete he swallowed hard.
delete Esther struggled
It's ... um ... okay, he said
As Esther held onto Steven's arm, he stared at the ocean's waves, wishing they would swallow him up.
As Esther continued to hold onto his arm, he realized his dream was coming to an end because he loved someone who did not love him.
Steven stared at his computer where he had been all day, trying to research the work Doc had given him, but he couldn't keep his mind off Esther.
The report was exactly as Mrs. Dawson said:
dismissed claims that these (sightings)
A blog reported
Son, you don't know what you're up against.
what would you suggest (I) do
speak English; will you
delete oh - names of
new paragraph - Doc was ecstatic
(,) Doc warned sternly
I got it! I got it!
After he hung up with Doc, he checked the flights to Cleveland.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for your beautiful hawk eyes. lol I took 90% of your suggestions and made changes. I'm still stubbardly looking at the other 10% with great considerations lol. I really appreciate you taking the time to critique my work. Blessings to you my friend. Hope you and your family have a great weekend.
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I spelled stubbornly wrong. lol
Comment from Gungalo
Wow, she told him. Though I think by the end of this story things will change and a great love will come from their union. I love your story girl.
Now we know he is not going to listen to Doc, don't we? LOL, he is hell bent on this thing and just has to occupy his time and curiosity about it all.
Keep up the great writing you!! I'm loving it!!!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Wow, she told him. Though I think by the end of this story things will change and a great love will come from their union. I love your story girl.
Now we know he is not going to listen to Doc, don't we? LOL, he is hell bent on this thing and just has to occupy his time and curiosity about it all.
Keep up the great writing you!! I'm loving it!!!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I long for your imput.
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You do just fine, my sweet little authoress. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHH.
