Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Part two Chapter two"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Scornwell
I thought this was well written, it turned my stomach. Your descriptions and characters come across well and the dialog sounds realistic and seems consistent with the characters. I want to keep reading just to be there when Bobby gets what he deserves, or I hope he does.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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I thought this was well written, it turned my stomach. Your descriptions and characters come across well and the dialog sounds realistic and seems consistent with the characters. I want to keep reading just to be there when Bobby gets what he deserves, or I hope he does.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Good work. Intense descriptions and dialogue. Kept waiting for Troy to show up. Hope he does soon. Keep Writing and good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Good work. Intense descriptions and dialogue. Kept waiting for Troy to show up. Hope he does soon. Keep Writing and good luck!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JW
After reading something like this, one cannot help but want to grab the nearest gun and blow Bobby away. Unfortunately, there are way to many real life monsters like him in real life.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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After reading something like this, one cannot help but want to grab the nearest gun and blow Bobby away. Unfortunately, there are way to many real life monsters like him in real life.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from moyramouse
This was strong meat. The violence in Bobby came across most vividly as he punched and kicked Anna, then to abuse her sexually as well - there is no depths to which he will not sink. I am afraid he will hurt Michael - he clearly doesn't care at all for them and Anna needs to run before something dreadful happens.
Freeze some tinned pineapple chunks for after your radiation. My son found them so comforting to suck and they gave him some energy. Love, xxmouse
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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This was strong meat. The violence in Bobby came across most vividly as he punched and kicked Anna, then to abuse her sexually as well - there is no depths to which he will not sink. I am afraid he will hurt Michael - he clearly doesn't care at all for them and Anna needs to run before something dreadful happens.
Freeze some tinned pineapple chunks for after your radiation. My son found them so comforting to suck and they gave him some energy. Love, xxmouse
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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I will try the frozen pineapples. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
This story kept me again captivated throughout and bobby should be castrated!! Oh my gosh!!! What is she still doing there. I trust this will turn into a love story without Bobby!! Looking forward to the next part.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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This story kept me again captivated throughout and bobby should be castrated!! Oh my gosh!!! What is she still doing there. I trust this will turn into a love story without Bobby!! Looking forward to the next part.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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You are write. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I guess having seen to many women after b*st*rds like this have 'taught them some respect' I'm all for Sam Colt's patent cure all... The best thing I ever saw happen to one was while filling in my Ambulance Report, the drunkard who'd beaten his wife to a pulp arrived at the ER and started to try and drag her out. My companion, a very large and very well built guy who was normally as gentle as anything, grabbed the guy by the throat, carried him out of the Waiting Area one handed and then broke his nose, closed both his eyes, broke one arm and according to the doctor, cracked six of his ribs while teaching him some manners.
Interestingly when the police arrived, they took a statement from my friend, then got a blood sample and filed it as 'falling off a wall while drunk and disorderly....' The y also told my friend he shouldn't risk injury helping people like this ... The lady did recover and the police put her in a home for battered women, then the judge threw several books at the husband, but it isn't always that good an outcome.
Well written, your graphic descriptions put me in a rage.
Patrick
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Hi Barbara,
I guess having seen to many women after b*st*rds like this have 'taught them some respect' I'm all for Sam Colt's patent cure all... The best thing I ever saw happen to one was while filling in my Ambulance Report, the drunkard who'd beaten his wife to a pulp arrived at the ER and started to try and drag her out. My companion, a very large and very well built guy who was normally as gentle as anything, grabbed the guy by the throat, carried him out of the Waiting Area one handed and then broke his nose, closed both his eyes, broke one arm and according to the doctor, cracked six of his ribs while teaching him some manners.
Interestingly when the police arrived, they took a statement from my friend, then got a blood sample and filed it as 'falling off a wall while drunk and disorderly....' The y also told my friend he shouldn't risk injury helping people like this ... The lady did recover and the police put her in a home for battered women, then the judge threw several books at the husband, but it isn't always that good an outcome.
Well written, your graphic descriptions put me in a rage.
Patrick
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for sharing your story. I have known many women in this situation. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
this is a hard hitting chapter and I'm surprised Anna hasn't killed that prick by now...Your writing has a powerful impact and the storyline is strong. Well done...will look through the other chapters...
I hope you feel better soon ... take care xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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this is a hard hitting chapter and I'm surprised Anna hasn't killed that prick by now...Your writing has a powerful impact and the storyline is strong. Well done...will look through the other chapters...
I hope you feel better soon ... take care xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
what a disgusting violent
man - people like him need
putting down.
grabbed her (by)hair
then grabbed her hair (again) and - just suggestions.
Take care my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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what a disgusting violent
man - people like him need
putting down.
grabbed her (by)hair
then grabbed her hair (again) and - just suggestions.
Take care my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and I will take care of those areas.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Well if the dog typed any of this, he did a damn fine job. This is not pleasant to read, but it is believable and shocking. It is hard to say what is the worst piece of behaviour in this recount.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Well if the dog typed any of this, he did a damn fine job. This is not pleasant to read, but it is believable and shocking. It is hard to say what is the worst piece of behaviour in this recount.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. A dog as large as he is can do whatever he wants.
Comment from R. K. Alan
This was a tough read for me. I hate abuse and violence when it is raw emotion. But I know its important in your storytelling. I am glad you are getting stronger... keep on fighting. Ray aka R. K. Alan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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This was a tough read for me. I hate abuse and violence when it is raw emotion. But I know its important in your storytelling. I am glad you are getting stronger... keep on fighting. Ray aka R. K. Alan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
