Delicate Designs Of Spring
beauty of Spring in an Acrostic20 total reviews
Comment from Gary D. Hardy
This is one well written Acrostic piece. Enjoyed the flow as it rolled down the screen with the light airy mood, very uplifting. Enjoyed reading.
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This is one well written Acrostic piece. Enjoyed the flow as it rolled down the screen with the light airy mood, very uplifting. Enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from Ronni
You've certainly captured all the resplendent and
awesome colors and scents of spring here Helvi! A
gorgeous reflection and capture of all the blooms
and sproutings of every stunning corner and hue.
Beautifully refreshing read for s a Sundary.
Thanks for sharing.
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You've certainly captured all the resplendent and
awesome colors and scents of spring here Helvi! A
gorgeous reflection and capture of all the blooms
and sproutings of every stunning corner and hue.
Beautifully refreshing read for s a Sundary.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from adewpearl
First things first - You have left out one line in your final stanza - Your poem is Delicate Designs of Spring - but you have Sprig.
Other than that, Helvi, your acrostic is delightful. Love your verb choices - enchant, rejoice, parade...
Great descriptive detail of so many lovely flowers that are so pleasing to visualize. And excellent rhyming too :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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First things first - You have left out one line in your final stanza - Your poem is Delicate Designs of Spring - but you have Sprig.
Other than that, Helvi, your acrostic is delightful. Love your verb choices - enchant, rejoice, parade...
Great descriptive detail of so many lovely flowers that are so pleasing to visualize. And excellent rhyming too :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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GOOD GRIEF! How in the heck did I turn Sring into "Sprig"! Your'e the only one who noticed that Brooke and I can't tell you how embarassed I am!!! Below is the new first with the missing line I left out. Thank you SO much for spotting it!
Splashes of lilac and lavender pink
Parade over ground without stop
Ridding the ground from the barest of bare
New found excitement now flourish unbound
In waves of new colorful POP
Green emerald blush with dewdrops
I'm off to bury my head in the sand LOL
Hugs and Smiles, Helvi
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I swear I think most reviewers only half read - I was also the only one today to another poet that he had 6 syllables in the middle line of a 5/7/5 poem. Don't keep your head buried too long, my talented friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi helvi. this is an absolutely beautiful, perfect piece of acrostic poetry in which you have used some exquisite imagery to describe the advent of Spring. This has to be a contender for a top place in this contest
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Hi helvi. this is an absolutely beautiful, perfect piece of acrostic poetry in which you have used some exquisite imagery to describe the advent of Spring. This has to be a contender for a top place in this contest
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from Frankeddy
Yes I did enjoy your beautiful rhyming poem, nicely done. Found it so descriptive of the way we feel about Spring and your knowledge of flowers.
Good Acrostic poem. Perfect accompanying picture.
Good luck. Thank you. Frankeddy
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Yes I did enjoy your beautiful rhyming poem, nicely done. Found it so descriptive of the way we feel about Spring and your knowledge of flowers.
Good Acrostic poem. Perfect accompanying picture.
Good luck. Thank you. Frankeddy
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Hi Frank, Since you gave me a four star rating I went back to see what I did that you didn't like. I actually rewrote some of the poem. I am sending you the new version and hope you think it is more deserving of a 5 star rating. Hope you'll read it and let me know what you think. If you believe it deserves a new rating I'd love to recieve one...if not...Thank you for making me come up with a better version.
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Here is the new poem.... Delicate beauty from beneath the earth
Comment from BothePo8
Very nice effort! It must have taken quite a while to do this. The poem is quite creative and has nice focus and clarity. The words you have chosen are lovely! The rhyme and rhythm are great in the first stanza but I notice that they change in the second. I think this lack of consistency in rhythm and rhyme hurts the presentation of this lovely poem...I was tempted to give the poem a 4 because of this inconsistency but it is so nice I just had to give it a 5. However in the future, please think consistency....Best wishes, Bo
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Very nice effort! It must have taken quite a while to do this. The poem is quite creative and has nice focus and clarity. The words you have chosen are lovely! The rhyme and rhythm are great in the first stanza but I notice that they change in the second. I think this lack of consistency in rhythm and rhyme hurts the presentation of this lovely poem...I was tempted to give the poem a 4 because of this inconsistency but it is so nice I just had to give it a 5. However in the future, please think consistency....Best wishes, Bo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Helvi, the colour is certainly overpowering my mind. This is such a descriptive and delightful acrostic. You have fleshed your spring out well. It makes a person want to dance and sing.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
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Hi Helvi, the colour is certainly overpowering my mind. This is such a descriptive and delightful acrostic. You have fleshed your spring out well. It makes a person want to dance and sing.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Oh sweet Helvi you need to write more. Have missed you!
This is a sure winner! Contest OVER! LOL
My favorite subject is the seasonal celebrations of nature and you always
do it up perfectly!
Love love love love it! Hugz~ Jj
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Oh sweet Helvi you need to write more. Have missed you!
This is a sure winner! Contest OVER! LOL
My favorite subject is the seasonal celebrations of nature and you always
do it up perfectly!
Love love love love it! Hugz~ Jj
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
Comment from Espresso momma
This is a beautiful picture of spring. You tell this story so well line for line with fragrance, color and designs of the flowers. Thanks for this read.
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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This is a beautiful picture of spring. You tell this story so well line for line with fragrance, color and designs of the flowers. Thanks for this read.
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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I love writing poetry that lightens the heart, if I did that for you I am VERY happy! Thank you sor the wonderful review! :o) Helvi
Comment from The Stranger
well, you certainly dont do things by half, do you, this is one of the finest examples of acrostic poetry I have seen on here since joining
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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well, you certainly dont do things by half, do you, this is one of the finest examples of acrostic poetry I have seen on here since joining
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Bless Your heart!! After a snow storm on April Fool's Day this totally makes my day!!! Thank you SO much for the lovely compliments!!! I love to rhyme even in Acrostic's though it's not always easy. I feel incredibly honored br your six star rating. WOW! Hugs and Smiles, Helvi
