Railroad
poem/song lyrics99 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Victortouche
You're right, out in the country away from the city and the hustle and bustle the railway reserve always seems to draw one into the great outdoor sound of wind in grass, insects, the scent of the hot earth ...
Good flow and imagery.
Patrick
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Hi Victortouche
You're right, out in the country away from the city and the hustle and bustle the railway reserve always seems to draw one into the great outdoor sound of wind in grass, insects, the scent of the hot earth ...
Good flow and imagery.
Patrick
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Actually your review has pretty good flow and imagery as well. Thank you.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ok i just got this going clickety-clack like a railroad track, and you went and pulled the rhyme out from under me!
Repetition and simple language makes this almost like a kids' chanting game for skipping to.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Ok i just got this going clickety-clack like a railroad track, and you went and pulled the rhyme out from under me!
Repetition and simple language makes this almost like a kids' chanting game for skipping to.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing me.
Comment from themanicdude
Wow the drive is a hard hitting message, and the passion is incredible. I can only award 6 stars at this time but wish I could give you more. Thankyou for sharing such an awesome write.
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Wow the drive is a hard hitting message, and the passion is incredible. I can only award 6 stars at this time but wish I could give you more. Thankyou for sharing such an awesome write.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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How very nice of you. I thank you sincerely.
Comment from LKM2009
That was really fun to read. I kept thinking this could be made into a song. I loved the steady rhythm of and how I couldn't wait to read the next line.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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That was really fun to read. I kept thinking this could be made into a song. I loved the steady rhythm of and how I couldn't wait to read the next line.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Well now, your review brightened my day. Thanks.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is well executed. You expressed your feelings about the railroad very well. I enjoyed the smooth flow and interractive mode of the poem. kudos
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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This is well executed. You expressed your feelings about the railroad very well. I enjoyed the smooth flow and interractive mode of the poem. kudos
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Ms. Ihebom.
Comment from ulster3
Hi Victortouche...Yep...here again.
I loved this read. I know it is peaceful in tenor, but it does make me think of Grapes of Wrath, and my forebears who built the railroads. Those Irish Immigrants!
The bulk of the workmen working their way from the EAST towards the West were Irishmen. The bulk of the workmen building the railroad from the WEST towards the EAST were the Chinese.
Interesting...huh?
However, in country places where rails are overgrown with grass I have felt something of what you write so well. Excellent!
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Hi Victortouche...Yep...here again.
I loved this read. I know it is peaceful in tenor, but it does make me think of Grapes of Wrath, and my forebears who built the railroads. Those Irish Immigrants!
The bulk of the workmen working their way from the EAST towards the West were Irishmen. The bulk of the workmen building the railroad from the WEST towards the EAST were the Chinese.
Interesting...huh?
However, in country places where rails are overgrown with grass I have felt something of what you write so well. Excellent!
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Rebecca. Any comparison with "Grapes" is just pulling this ole boy up by his bootstraps and out of the gutter! lol
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LOL...
Comment from Joan E.
You most likely don't know that my son is a train buff and sits on two rail boards--I will send him your song, whispering on the wind, post haste! It is a terrific "snapshot" and thank you for the personal context in your notes. I reveled in your personification of the "railroad" and your symbolic "trees." Bravo! -Joan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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You most likely don't know that my son is a train buff and sits on two rail boards--I will send him your song, whispering on the wind, post haste! It is a terrific "snapshot" and thank you for the personal context in your notes. I reveled in your personification of the "railroad" and your symbolic "trees." Bravo! -Joan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Joan. No, I didn't know your son is so positioned. How wonderful it is to not only hear praise of one's work, but tidbits of personal history of the reviewer. It adds such warmth to the community.
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J'aime la langue francaise. Je l'ai e'tudie', mais s'est retrouve' avec une femme allemande. Donc, je parle un peu l'allemand et beaucoup d'anglais. Encore...peut-etre qu'il est temps.
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PS Hey Joan, I made a minor change. Be sure to send him the updated version. lol
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Thanks for the update--just in time--I'll be emailing my son tonight. -Joan
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C'est ravissant que vous parlez plus qu'une langue--trois en effet. -Joan
Comment from Ginfaxi
Excellent work. You carry the reader precisely as you seem to intend. The poem certainly does carry me, reminding me of journeys past and those yet to be. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Excellent work. You carry the reader precisely as you seem to intend. The poem certainly does carry me, reminding me of journeys past and those yet to be. Nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Mr. Ginfaxi.
Comment from jmdg1954
I've never walked the tracks of a railroad, but reading your poem I could honestly say that I was able to feel the tracks under me feet, the scent of the steel and lumber, the gravel shuffling as I walk upon it. It whispered stories of transportation, towns growth, men women. I simply had many thoughts going through my head. Thank you for this great visual...
John
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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I've never walked the tracks of a railroad, but reading your poem I could honestly say that I was able to feel the tracks under me feet, the scent of the steel and lumber, the gravel shuffling as I walk upon it. It whispered stories of transportation, towns growth, men women. I simply had many thoughts going through my head. Thank you for this great visual...
John
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Yes, the gravel does spray around as you walk whether accidently or so often as kicked by you.
Comment from amahra
Breathtaking Art image of a railroad track. It looked so real, it looked almost 3D. Loved the poem and how it talked directly to the railroad instead of telling the story from the writers' point of view.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Breathtaking Art image of a railroad track. It looked so real, it looked almost 3D. Loved the poem and how it talked directly to the railroad instead of telling the story from the writers' point of view.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much.
