Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cherchez La Femme"A collection of my poems
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Comment from chita
Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your poem-and rhyme well-you are descriptive and deliver a powerful message about how women can be the result to a man's downfall-but also there is always a woman behind a man in his success so it works both ways--I love where you write about Samson for he really got deceived --I like where you write(Delilah with her with scissors changed his luck) he should have never told her--I wish I had a six--you would get it--well done.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your poem-and rhyme well-you are descriptive and deliver a powerful message about how women can be the result to a man's downfall-but also there is always a woman behind a man in his success so it works both ways--I love where you write about Samson for he really got deceived --I like where you write(Delilah with her with scissors changed his luck) he should have never told her--I wish I had a six--you would get it--well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I obviously posted this poem at the wrong time of the week - you are now the fourth person to tell me they are out of six stars. :( Maybe next time - I am thinking of sequel, a series actually...
Comment from KC
Brilliant! Loved it and know where you are coming from! Clearly one of those poems that you actually enjoyed writing as well. It happens. Loved the ending as well. Technically, faultless - and forget the historical inaccuracies - Adam and Eve? Great read. Sorry out of six stars. Kevin
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Brilliant! Loved it and know where you are coming from! Clearly one of those poems that you actually enjoyed writing as well. It happens. Loved the ending as well. Technically, faultless - and forget the historical inaccuracies - Adam and Eve? Great read. Sorry out of six stars. Kevin
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I obviously posted this poem at the wrong time of the week - you are now the fourth person to tell me they are out of six stars. :( Maybe next time - I am thinking of sequel, a series actually...
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Will look forward to the sequel!
Comment from Philip Shin
The reason to live is for the wowman. Everything is also by the logical thinking for the woman. Then what is the next? Yes, we married to woman who we love. There is no more to fight to gain or work hard for the money for the future. The meeting with woman changed everything for the wholeworld. Now we are doing the labour for our daughter to prove our love. The daughter is for my show to live next for girl.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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The reason to live is for the wowman. Everything is also by the logical thinking for the woman. Then what is the next? Yes, we married to woman who we love. There is no more to fight to gain or work hard for the money for the future. The meeting with woman changed everything for the wholeworld. Now we are doing the labour for our daughter to prove our love. The daughter is for my show to live next for girl.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your review
Comment from Parashakti
Hi. I am writing you because I really enjoyed reading your poem. Remembrer some chapters of the history in a poem is wonderful even if the information is not too good for women.
Warm regards.
Shakti
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Hi. I am writing you because I really enjoyed reading your poem. Remembrer some chapters of the history in a poem is wonderful even if the information is not too good for women.
Warm regards.
Shakti
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Gracias, Shakti. I am sorry I cannot read Spanish so I will never get to enjoy your poems.
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I am so sorry because I can´t translate my poems, but I like reading and coment English poetry.
Hugs
Shakti
Comment from Akarva
This poem though against the feminine gender does give us some insights to the women behind the Men's saga of history. A woman is powerful indeed to save or destroy life.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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This poem though against the feminine gender does give us some insights to the women behind the Men's saga of history. A woman is powerful indeed to save or destroy life.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for your review - indeed I have nothing but respect and admiration for the fairer sex!
Comment from MaryLinda
I think this is a cleverly written and very witty poem. You have great imagery and obvious talent for descriptive prose. The rhythm and rhyme is wonderful and make the words of the poem flow so well. I really enjoyed reading this. MaryLinda
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I think this is a cleverly written and very witty poem. You have great imagery and obvious talent for descriptive prose. The rhythm and rhyme is wonderful and make the words of the poem flow so well. I really enjoyed reading this. MaryLinda
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the positive review - watch out for more in this vein!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is clever, amusing and very well done. Sometimes, of course, you can "look for the woman" when you notice something good about a man, such as if he is partiularly well-dressed or has written an excellent essay or made an advance in his career. (Spelling alert in notes: "Licence" should be LICENSE; maybe Le Femme misplaced the dictionary.) With smiles, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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This is clever, amusing and very well done. Sometimes, of course, you can "look for the woman" when you notice something good about a man, such as if he is partiularly well-dressed or has written an excellent essay or made an advance in his career. (Spelling alert in notes: "Licence" should be LICENSE; maybe Le Femme misplaced the dictionary.) With smiles, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I know, I know, where would we be without you? My wife tells me that all the time. Now I am going to be a typical man and argue with you.... in my part of the world 'License' is a verb and 'Licence' is a noun (like advise/advice and practise/practice) May be a UK/Aust English thing.
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Well, I stand corrected; you are exactly right. Maybe that'll teach me not to be a smart aleck! JM
Comment from acvguard11
its lengthy..b.ut i illove it anyway..great jbo...dont let others discourage you ..youa re doing great ..keep writing and good luck...remember just do waht you love dont let others stop you
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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its lengthy..b.ut i illove it anyway..great jbo...dont let others discourage you ..youa re doing great ..keep writing and good luck...remember just do waht you love dont let others stop you
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you - back at you!
Comment from Matoshka
I enjoyed this rant, and I am a woman. You were precise and fairly accurate. I hope your wife didn't mind too much. LOL I suppose we could write and answer in defense, but then it would be like a tennis match, ball for ball. LOL Does this mean women have more power over men? Blessings I enjoyed this, really! Blessings.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I enjoyed this rant, and I am a woman. You were precise and fairly accurate. I hope your wife didn't mind too much. LOL I suppose we could write and answer in defense, but then it would be like a tennis match, ball for ball. LOL Does this mean women have more power over men? Blessings I enjoyed this, really! Blessings.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I suppose I could take you on in a tennis match, but I might just write on the other side next time anyway! Thanks for the kind review.
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You are so welcome my friend. I enjoyed it very much. Blessings.
Comment from Writeaway...
I liked the relgious imagery here, the piece about Adam and Eve made me laugh. A hunours enjoyable piece kiwist, bravo. I cannot suggest anything for improvement, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I liked the relgious imagery here, the piece about Adam and Eve made me laugh. A hunours enjoyable piece kiwist, bravo. I cannot suggest anything for improvement, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you - I will keep writing - I feel good enough about this one to plan on extending it into a series!
