Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cherchez La Femme"A collection of my poems
95 total reviews
Comment from cheery blossom
Good story, all of the way, I SOMETIMES FIND THE TF THE POEM IS SHORT, IT COMES EASIER THAN DOES A LONG ONE,
AND THAT THE LONGER--ORE COMPLICATED THE TALE IS THE HARDER IT IS TO KEEP IT TOGETHER. i also enjoyed the light side of the story==I love to smile. THANK YOU. CHERRY
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Good story, all of the way, I SOMETIMES FIND THE TF THE POEM IS SHORT, IT COMES EASIER THAN DOES A LONG ONE,
AND THAT THE LONGER--ORE COMPLICATED THE TALE IS THE HARDER IT IS TO KEEP IT TOGETHER. i also enjoyed the light side of the story==I love to smile. THANK YOU. CHERRY
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thank you
Comment from Peter@Poole
Not bad, and so well sustained. You made me laugh a lot, and I don't believe your feigned mysogyny in the slightest. I think you just play hard to get, but you're really a sucker for them. Peter
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Not bad, and so well sustained. You made me laugh a lot, and I don't believe your feigned mysogyny in the slightest. I think you just play hard to get, but you're really a sucker for them. Peter
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks - purpose was to get a laugh so I'll count that as a success.
Comment from amada
Great work in here on the beauty and danger of the femme fatale. This is a very accurate and historic work that reminded me of these unforgetable women. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Great work in here on the beauty and danger of the femme fatale. This is a very accurate and historic work that reminded me of these unforgetable women. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review. I enjoyed writing this and I'm considering a bit of a series of 'Hysterical Historicals'.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This is so original and so well written I am still shaking my head! A wonderful read that I so enjoyed reading, that I will probably go back, and read it's fun again. You SOOOO
deserve a six for this!
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This is so original and so well written I am still shaking my head! A wonderful read that I so enjoyed reading, that I will probably go back, and read it's fun again. You SOOOO
deserve a six for this!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review, Linda, and for the six. I enjoyed writing this and I'm considering a bit of a series of 'Hysterical Historicals'.
Comment from sweetsilversong
This was such a well written poem, one that flowed effortlessly through the lines.
You conveyed your feeling into words wonderfully well.
Best wishes.
SSS
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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This was such a well written poem, one that flowed effortlessly through the lines.
You conveyed your feeling into words wonderfully well.
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review. I enjoyed writing this and I'm considering a bit of a series of 'Hysterical Historicals'.
Comment from Young G.H.
Good rhyme, decent meter, excellent recount of history in this humorous poem. Liked the ending, a nice twist to brings things up to date. Good content to this work !
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Good rhyme, decent meter, excellent recount of history in this humorous poem. Liked the ending, a nice twist to brings things up to date. Good content to this work !
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review. I enjoyed writing this and I'm considering a bit of a series of 'Hysterical Historicals'.
Comment from Fleedleflump
lol, you're a brave one for sure, but you'ce also got your funny bone in the right place. This reads like healthy teasing to me, and that's very welcome in the current man-bashing culture that's gleefully dominating our media.
Mike
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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lol, you're a brave one for sure, but you'ce also got your funny bone in the right place. This reads like healthy teasing to me, and that's very welcome in the current man-bashing culture that's gleefully dominating our media.
Mike
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review. I enjoyed writing this and I'm considering a bit of a series of 'Hysterical Historicals'.
Comment from Mastery
Hello, Kiwi. I liked your examples in this nicely-written poem however, it was a tad long for the standard poem. Also, Thought I would mention that this line:
"Though stronger than a Kenworth truck,
Delilah with scissors changed his luck" just doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem as a "kenworth Truck" modernizes an otherwise ancient times surrounding. What do you think?
Good job though...Bob
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Hello, Kiwi. I liked your examples in this nicely-written poem however, it was a tad long for the standard poem. Also, Thought I would mention that this line:
"Though stronger than a Kenworth truck,
Delilah with scissors changed his luck" just doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem as a "kenworth Truck" modernizes an otherwise ancient times surrounding. What do you think?
Good job though...Bob
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks. Yes I paused over the Kenworth truck, but decided to leave it in. I do take your point. Steve
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You know best..
Comment from Dom G Robles
A poem filled with historical trimmings. The "sins" committed by a woman. Citing so many instances, starting from Eve, the writer eloquently portrayed several instances in poetic form events from the Roman Empire... I like the last stanza: "Those who will not learn from History Are doomed to repeat ,that's not a mystery, so I must flee to save my life, Oh deadly peril, here comes the wife!" Beautiful. Dom
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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A poem filled with historical trimmings. The "sins" committed by a woman. Citing so many instances, starting from Eve, the writer eloquently portrayed several instances in poetic form events from the Roman Empire... I like the last stanza: "Those who will not learn from History Are doomed to repeat ,that's not a mystery, so I must flee to save my life, Oh deadly peril, here comes the wife!" Beautiful. Dom
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thank you. How did you fare on your History lesson?
Comment from the old guy
No apologies are needed as far as this guy is concerned. And I don't really see it as a misogynistic work, but rather as an honest work. If one studies history, one can see the truth in most of what you've written. Sure you've taken a few liberties, but we poets are allowed that.I think I read somewhere,perhaps in the bible, of the rights of men.(Maybe not there)But it took me three tries at love to end up with the sweet lady who has been my wife for half a century. The first two broke my young heart, the last mended it.Sure there are a lot of Eves and Cleopatras and
Delilahs in this world today, but unless a man is too horny for his own good, he should be able to come out ahead.
This a very good work you've posted, and any man with something between his legs should appreciate what you've
said. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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No apologies are needed as far as this guy is concerned. And I don't really see it as a misogynistic work, but rather as an honest work. If one studies history, one can see the truth in most of what you've written. Sure you've taken a few liberties, but we poets are allowed that.I think I read somewhere,perhaps in the bible, of the rights of men.(Maybe not there)But it took me three tries at love to end up with the sweet lady who has been my wife for half a century. The first two broke my young heart, the last mended it.Sure there are a lot of Eves and Cleopatras and
Delilahs in this world today, but unless a man is too horny for his own good, he should be able to come out ahead.
This a very good work you've posted, and any man with something between his legs should appreciate what you've
said. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the kind words and the 6 stars. Keep an eye out for more 'hysterical historicals'!
