Stealing Thunder
An underdog tail ...32 total reviews
Comment from sugardog
Racing is fun!! Whether on foot or on horseback. I used to endurance race my horse in eastern Oregon. So fun-racing over the mountains and through rivers for 25-100 miles. I could relate to the feeling of victory after winning. Fun little story, Susan!! Hope you are well. Dana
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Racing is fun!! Whether on foot or on horseback. I used to endurance race my horse in eastern Oregon. So fun-racing over the mountains and through rivers for 25-100 miles. I could relate to the feeling of victory after winning. Fun little story, Susan!! Hope you are well. Dana
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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WOW Dana! I have always wanted to ride in an endurance race...but wanted to be a jockey when I was a teen, and was too big...they wanted me to be a stable hand. OH well...I am happy you liked this and could relate even! I am so impressed!! Hope you get to ride more this year too! You and little Sugar should trail ride every day! I mean, he can tag along! I love having a dog go...You should write about your rides!? I would love it, so would others Dana! ?? I am packing to move...I do wish I could get out that way...but it's too expensive. There are reasons things are cheaper in Indiana I guess! Sadly. Pet Sugardog for me? Hug! Susan
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You're welcome!! Did you sell your house? I don't ride much anymore, my horse is almost 30 and I am so busy with the farm and kids that it just doesn't seem to happen. In the summer, sometimes... I love it though!! I wanted to be a jockey when I was a teen too-even wrote a speech about it my sophomore year. Take care, Dana
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Hi Susan you amaze me by the way you churn your STORIES OUT . A good writ and an entertaining read. Thanks for sharing with me a good write all round. Mary
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hi Susan you amaze me by the way you churn your STORIES OUT . A good writ and an entertaining read. Thanks for sharing with me a good write all round. Mary
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Hi Mary! I have so many in my head and on paper, some are just not good...but it's fun, and when you enjoy them it makes it even better! I just love the pix of you and your daughter on your profile! Smiles to you both, from my heart! Thank you for this great review! HUG! Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am glad the mare won. I am glad you won your race on the stubby gelding. You do a gread job writing descriptions. That's a real talent.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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I am glad the mare won. I am glad you won your race on the stubby gelding. You do a gread job writing descriptions. That's a real talent.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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HI Barb! I am so so sorry for this late reply! I am packing, our house sold. No where to go yet...and ten animals. Want some more? LOL! Three horses, three dogs, four cats...oh Lord. I hope you are doing well too! Stay strong Barbara...a hug and love to you!! Susan
Comment from Fireshadow
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Susan, terrific narrative which fills the readers with anticipation and excitement rooting for Lady, the underdog mare. Great finish ! Very well penned. Just a couple of suggestions :
every one of them were [was - since you're talking about every "one"] at a dead run
In you subtitle description : An underdog tail [tale]
Otherwise, terrific job, my friend !
Ama
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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Susan, terrific narrative which fills the readers with anticipation and excitement rooting for Lady, the underdog mare. Great finish ! Very well penned. Just a couple of suggestions :
every one of them were [was - since you're talking about every "one"] at a dead run
In you subtitle description : An underdog tail [tale]
Otherwise, terrific job, my friend !
Ama
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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Thank you Ama!! I am so sorry this is such a late reply! It's always so good to hear from you, and I really appreciate it! HUG! Susan
Comment from Trybuck
I like it when the underdog wins. It doesn't happen often enough to suit me but is great when it does happen. Unless of course, the underdog is playing one of my favorite teams... :)
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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I like it when the underdog wins. It doesn't happen often enough to suit me but is great when it does happen. Unless of course, the underdog is playing one of my favorite teams... :)
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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HI Buck! Thank you so much! ") Please forgive me this late reply...I am trying to pack to move and so tired and busy! I do not forget you! Susan
Comment from Espresso momma
This was a good read. I wondered if you knew your races or not until I got to the end. It made for a prize read then. Thanks for the fun.:)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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This was a good read. I wondered if you knew your races or not until I got to the end. It made for a prize read then. Thanks for the fun.:)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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HI There!! Thank you so much! It's a real pleasure to know you enjoyed this! I am sorry I am so late in replying, we are trying to get moved, and everything is a mess! Xoxo, susan
Comment from Carrie Smith
Great flash. Love the way you went the whole gamete of emotion of the rider, the activities surrounding the race and the horse's determination, You had be right there feeling all of that! Well written, very well written, Susan. xo Susan
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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Great flash. Love the way you went the whole gamete of emotion of the rider, the activities surrounding the race and the horse's determination, You had be right there feeling all of that! Well written, very well written, Susan. xo Susan
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2011
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SUSAN! I am sorry I was not here earlier! I had to sit outside and freeze, there was trouble with someone skulking around and running hounds up around our barn spooking the horses! I came in around 1 am? I think it was. I will call you asap. Please get well, and thank you for a wonderful review too!! Love, susan
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Hey Sweet Suse, Never mind, I understand - you know that.You are so busy now - wish I was there to help you - I'd sit in the cold and freeze with you - at least we could keep each other company. I get so lonesome and guess you do too. Once you get settled, DAMN IT, I,m coming to see you if you want to have me. I'll figure it out - for real! My sister,Anne, is coming Wed, so if you do call make it tomorrow night or Tuesday night. If I happen to be on line, I'll get off at 11:30.. I'm whining now, but on top of this fuc&*#! flu, I have thrush mouth from one of the med - crap!!!! Love you and looking forward to talking!!!__xoxo!
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Comment from Laurie Clayton
A wonderful tale of 'David v Goliath' of the horse world.
Well written with no spags that I could see.
The racing world does manage to throw up some wonderful rank outsiders from time to time. Red Rum, Sea Buscuit to name just two.
Thank you for an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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A wonderful tale of 'David v Goliath' of the horse world.
Well written with no spags that I could see.
The racing world does manage to throw up some wonderful rank outsiders from time to time. Red Rum, Sea Buscuit to name just two.
Thank you for an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2011
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Hi Laurie! Yes, how right you are. I love the long shots! I would never be good at betting! ") You are so welcome, but thank YOU for reading for me Laurie! ") I really appreciate it! Susan
Comment from misscookie
Love the artwork' perfect for your write
I love the flow of your poem
And found your words very exciting from the first line to the last line. I use to love going to the races.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Love the artwork' perfect for your write
I love the flow of your poem
And found your words very exciting from the first line to the last line. I use to love going to the races.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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HI Cookie! I have never been to a race! I raced my old horse once, and he won by a length against a fancy horse that a young man thought was so great! HA! I almost fell off tho, my horse surprised me with his desire to run!! I am thrilled that you liked this! I love horses so...I am trying to pack to move and will try to read your stuff as soon as I can Cookie!! I have not forgotten you. I just had to write something! ") HUG! Susan
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Don't worry about me at dan story I'll be here when ever you get it together. I'm very happy for you. Don't over do it.
Comment from Moonlith
I have always had a lot of praise for anyone who was a jockey. How they stay on the horse is a mystery to me. Thanks to the author for re-introducing me to the art of horse racing. Jolene is a perfect name for your character. Though this story is short, it is long on good writing techniques. Your sentences flow smoothly and are strong with unnecessary words omitted. Your words are ripe with action and build up suspense that prompts the reader to read on. There is a lesson to learn here in regards to women and their ability to stand up against intimidation from the supposedly stronger sex. And the little mare proves size doesn't matter if you have the determination and heart to win. To be able to speak the language of your character and have knowledge of the sport of racing is a feather in your cap. Job well done. I enjoyed the exhilaration of the race to the end. One comment, I would remove the comma after "out" in the last sentence. It's probably a typo. I look forward to reading more of your insightful stories.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I have always had a lot of praise for anyone who was a jockey. How they stay on the horse is a mystery to me. Thanks to the author for re-introducing me to the art of horse racing. Jolene is a perfect name for your character. Though this story is short, it is long on good writing techniques. Your sentences flow smoothly and are strong with unnecessary words omitted. Your words are ripe with action and build up suspense that prompts the reader to read on. There is a lesson to learn here in regards to women and their ability to stand up against intimidation from the supposedly stronger sex. And the little mare proves size doesn't matter if you have the determination and heart to win. To be able to speak the language of your character and have knowledge of the sport of racing is a feather in your cap. Job well done. I enjoyed the exhilaration of the race to the end. One comment, I would remove the comma after "out" in the last sentence. It's probably a typo. I look forward to reading more of your insightful stories.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Hi Moonlith! Thanks for reviewing, I will look at the comma and see? I do appreciate the time you took for me and wonder if I fix the error if you would consider upgrading my score? I am thrilled that you liked this and look forward to your posts soon...susan
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The comma distract very little from your story. I though I had given you five stars, so I would be more than happy to go back and change it if I can. I haven't been on FanStory for about 2 years.
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Oh, okay!! I am happy you are back! And thanks for the rating too! WELCOME back!! I promise to read your work asap!! I also like your screen name! Nice! Susan
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Susan, how do I go back and change your rating? Donna
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Oh, just go to the rating and reclick it? Not a big deal Moonlith!! I appreciate that you took a minute for me! HUG! Susan
