Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Part Three of Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Belinda
Poor Anna. Hey, Barbara, you've made me hate a character in a fiction! That's how well you describe Bobby and his ways. I do hope writing could help you adjust with the waiting game. I wish you all the best ...
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Poor Anna. Hey, Barbara, you've made me hate a character in a fiction! That's how well you describe Bobby and his ways. I do hope writing could help you adjust with the waiting game. I wish you all the best ...
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Writing does help, a lot. My goal was to make my readers hate Bobby. I guess I met it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from R. K. Alan
Nice story progression and Troy seems like the saint she needs at the moment. Her husband is a jerk, but then you wrote it that way. I am merely reacting to your strong characters.
I hope things go well with you and you receive good news on Thursday. Prays are with you. Ray aka R. K. Alan
nit...
How can I get her [to] trust me?
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Nice story progression and Troy seems like the saint she needs at the moment. Her husband is a jerk, but then you wrote it that way. I am merely reacting to your strong characters.
I hope things go well with you and you receive good news on Thursday. Prays are with you. Ray aka R. K. Alan
nit...
How can I get her [to] trust me?
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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I will fix that sentence. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
It is so hard to wait for information like that. I think of you often and wish you well. This chapter has been so well written. Maybe it helps to focus on writing, so you don't worry as much. Take care. DEbbie
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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It is so hard to wait for information like that. I think of you often and wish you well. This chapter has been so well written. Maybe it helps to focus on writing, so you don't worry as much. Take care. DEbbie
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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I do better when I am busy. My mind wonders a lot, so being busy is a good thing. Thank you for your kind review.
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I have depression and if I don't keep bury, it gets much worse, so I understand!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
First of all let me say I am sorry about the sore on your spine and hope the doctor figures it out soon. Hopefully the radiation won't both you and it only takes a few minutes after the first one. This is another excellent chapter in this story. My heart aches for Anna and her abusive husband makes my blood boil. I am still not sure who Troy is and wonder if he is an officer of the law. Just my impression in what I know so far. Good writing and be well my friend. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Hi Barbara,
First of all let me say I am sorry about the sore on your spine and hope the doctor figures it out soon. Hopefully the radiation won't both you and it only takes a few minutes after the first one. This is another excellent chapter in this story. My heart aches for Anna and her abusive husband makes my blood boil. I am still not sure who Troy is and wonder if he is an officer of the law. Just my impression in what I know so far. Good writing and be well my friend. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Barbara:
Waiting for answers is so very difficult in your medical situation. I hope your doctor will have answers for you soon.
You write this novel with the clarity of someone who has been there. I've had friends who have been in this situation and it is sickening to watch.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Barbara:
Waiting for answers is so very difficult in your medical situation. I hope your doctor will have answers for you soon.
You write this novel with the clarity of someone who has been there. I've had friends who have been in this situation and it is sickening to watch.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Barbara, Best of luck to you my dear with your radiation. I am so glad you are still writing. This is an excellent chapter. When she pulled out his card, I was saying 'yeah'. Then I remembered, this is just a story. LOL Great job. My prayers are with you, Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Dear Barbara, Best of luck to you my dear with your radiation. I am so glad you are still writing. This is an excellent chapter. When she pulled out his card, I was saying 'yeah'. Then I remembered, this is just a story. LOL Great job. My prayers are with you, Shirley
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Yes, this is just a story, but unfortunately it happens, often. I appreciate your kind review and you support.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
chapter three is very well written. I hope Anna calls Troy. He witnessed her husband abusing her and jerking her around. I hate Bobby. What a creep telling she's fat. I bet he's overweight himself. You are doing a superb job writing this- something diffrent from your talented pen. I saw not major typos- you writing is very professional to me. Keep on cranking out excellent writing. I pray for you to kick cancers ass. I noticed there was a walk for breast cancer comming up. Love ya.
Melissa.
I threw on a pump I had.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Barbara,
chapter three is very well written. I hope Anna calls Troy. He witnessed her husband abusing her and jerking her around. I hate Bobby. What a creep telling she's fat. I bet he's overweight himself. You are doing a superb job writing this- something diffrent from your talented pen. I saw not major typos- you writing is very professional to me. Keep on cranking out excellent writing. I pray for you to kick cancers ass. I noticed there was a walk for breast cancer comming up. Love ya.
Melissa.
I threw on a pump I had.
Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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I always appreciate hearing from you. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from teacherdub
This part adds sorrow to the storyline. Now the abuser is placing his son at risk. Tension is climbing in this part as the reader finally meets the abuser "face to face" so to speak. The glimmer of hope presented at the end is subtle but real. Flow is perfect, no errors found. td
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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This part adds sorrow to the storyline. Now the abuser is placing his son at risk. Tension is climbing in this part as the reader finally meets the abuser "face to face" so to speak. The glimmer of hope presented at the end is subtle but real. Flow is perfect, no errors found. td
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb,
Your story yes, is getting very good
The last part of you story to me shows the loving care for a child and a mother who is going to do what she thinks is best
I hope Troy helps her out.
Good luck to you about your chemo treatments, will be thinking of you.
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Hi Barb,
Your story yes, is getting very good
The last part of you story to me shows the loving care for a child and a mother who is going to do what she thinks is best
I hope Troy helps her out.
Good luck to you about your chemo treatments, will be thinking of you.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and your well wishes.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, I like the buildup in this chapter. I know Troy is something, a lawyer maybe or an advocate of some kind. I'll guess have to wait to find out.
One thing:
Why can't he be satisfied my insurance covers most of (the)cost?
Hope you find out soon about the chemo. I can't imagine what you are going through but you certainly have my prayers. Donna
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Hi Barbara, I like the buildup in this chapter. I know Troy is something, a lawyer maybe or an advocate of some kind. I'll guess have to wait to find out.
One thing:
Why can't he be satisfied my insurance covers most of (the)cost?
Hope you find out soon about the chemo. I can't imagine what you are going through but you certainly have my prayers. Donna
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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I have corrected that error. Thank you for your eagle eye and continued support. I appreciate the prayers. I always do better knowing what's going to happen.
