Coaxing Sorrow
Impact of Alzheimers on relationship with mother.27 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Sorrow that one can't swallow back - that is most compelling
a parent's newborn frailty - that is an effective description
This is such an emotionally powerful look at your relationship with your mother. Brooke
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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Sorrow that one can't swallow back - that is most compelling
a parent's newborn frailty - that is an effective description
This is such an emotionally powerful look at your relationship with your mother. Brooke
Comment Written 06-May-2011
reply by the author on 07-May-2011
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THANK YOU FOR THE REVIEW. IT WAS A VERY COMPLEX RELATIONSHIP AT ONE TIME.
Comment from Janie King
Very well written. You have very good command of word usage and that allows your readers to quickly visualize what you are sharing with them. Note: You don't look old enough to be a great-grandma. The picture is very nice. I'm the total caregiver for my 88 years old mother that has dementia. But, I've been very blessed. She's a very special lady that has always loved God and let His love radiate to us children. Good job. God bless.
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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Very well written. You have very good command of word usage and that allows your readers to quickly visualize what you are sharing with them. Note: You don't look old enough to be a great-grandma. The picture is very nice. I'm the total caregiver for my 88 years old mother that has dementia. But, I've been very blessed. She's a very special lady that has always loved God and let His love radiate to us children. Good job. God bless.
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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THANKS FOR THE DETAILED REVIEW AND THE COMPLIMENT. MY MOM IS 91 AND HAS BEEN IN A NURSING HOME FOR THE LAST EIGHT YEARS. SHE IS ALMOST COMOTOSE.BUT MY SISTER AND I ARE VERY FORTUNATE BECAUSE IT IS ONLY TEN MINUTES AWAY ALLOWING US TO KEEP CONSTANT CHECK.
Comment from mandyshsh
This was very, very well written. I see no big mistakes but there are a few confusing parts here and there. Overall I really enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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This was very, very well written. I see no big mistakes but there are a few confusing parts here and there. Overall I really enjoyed it!
Comment Written 05-May-2011
reply by the author on 05-May-2011
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THANK YOU
Comment from Jean Lutz
This is the second poem I have read tonight of Alzheimers. This is both poignant and terrifying to me. Autism and Alzheimers are baffling disorders. May the Lord bless both of you along this unexpected journey.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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This is the second poem I have read tonight of Alzheimers. This is both poignant and terrifying to me. Autism and Alzheimers are baffling disorders. May the Lord bless both of you along this unexpected journey.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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thank you for the rating and comment. The longer we live the more people will be affected by this disease.
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My oldest grandson has autism. I share your pain.
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Progress continues to be made in these areas. Hopefully, it will gain momentum.
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Dallas, this is a beautiful poem. The imagery is great. From speaking of the vivid colors to the blank canvas, I now what you are feeling. My Mother died in 2007. She had Alzhiemer for the last couple of years of her life. This is a lovely expression of your feelings, Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Dear Dallas, this is a beautiful poem. The imagery is great. From speaking of the vivid colors to the blank canvas, I now what you are feeling. My Mother died in 2007. She had Alzhiemer for the last couple of years of her life. This is a lovely expression of your feelings, Shirley
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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THANK YOU FOR THE RATING AND COMMENTS. THERE ARE SO MANY WHO CAN RELATE. i GUESS THIS IS A CONSEQUENCE OF LONGEVITY.
Comment from Sigrid Campbell
Your poem is aptly titled as it expresses clearly your sorrow,
need for understanding and acceptance. Unfortunately, it is possibly the case that you may have to accept your mother as
she was and has become. She is beyond reasoning to change who she now is. The last two lines of stanza five beg the question "what do you mean by jagged edge" and whose change of heart". I can relate to your feelings as they are well expressed in your verses. The structure, flow and rhyming
are good.
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Your poem is aptly titled as it expresses clearly your sorrow,
need for understanding and acceptance. Unfortunately, it is possibly the case that you may have to accept your mother as
she was and has become. She is beyond reasoning to change who she now is. The last two lines of stanza five beg the question "what do you mean by jagged edge" and whose change of heart". I can relate to your feelings as they are well expressed in your verses. The structure, flow and rhyming
are good.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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The jagged edge of sorrow. My change of heart. I have accepted it all, it was a process that took everything God put in front of me. Thank you for the review.
Comment from fluffnstuff
wow, what a heartfelt poem you wrote, and i understand as my mom is 96 and i have left her crying (me) as to her actions vs. how we remember them to be. you described it perfectly. nice write
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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wow, what a heartfelt poem you wrote, and i understand as my mom is 96 and i have left her crying (me) as to her actions vs. how we remember them to be. you described it perfectly. nice write
Comment Written 25-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the review.
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welcome
Comment from Espresso momma
I think my son could have signed his name to your poem. He went through this during my husbands dementia until he died.He isn't over it yet. He took it harder than the rest of us. My heart goes out to you and I know God will help you deal with her loss and yours. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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I think my son could have signed his name to your poem. He went through this during my husbands dementia until he died.He isn't over it yet. He took it harder than the rest of us. My heart goes out to you and I know God will help you deal with her loss and yours. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the review. I believe you also commented on my short story Trudging The Road To Nothingness. Same subject. thanks again.
Comment from Writingfundimension
What a terrifically brave poem you have written here. I found it very moving. The raw emotion, the images you chose, the honesty - all of it stark and beautiful. I truly wish I had six stars to give this masterful poem. Warm regards...Bev
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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What a terrifically brave poem you have written here. I found it very moving. The raw emotion, the images you chose, the honesty - all of it stark and beautiful. I truly wish I had six stars to give this masterful poem. Warm regards...Bev
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much. It was quite personal.
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You're welcome!
Comment from donnadiann
Your poem is so ey are so poignant in tone as one of this nature is. I feel the emotions written in the words as they are so clearly written. I hope this was a happier resolve:)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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Your poem is so ey are so poignant in tone as one of this nature is. I feel the emotions written in the words as they are so clearly written. I hope this was a happier resolve:)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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The actof writing it was resolve that brought me some peace.
thank you for the rating and comments.
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You are very welcome:) And sometimes in writing we can see things more clearly and begin to see a ray of happiness about almost anything, because then it's possible to see ourselves too. I mean that in a good way.
