The Long Way Home
Where the hills really do have eyes33 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
I know exactly what it feels like to be driving into the boonies at night. Your imagination can go crazy if you are alone and the way home does feel much longer in the night. You build a feeling of apprehension and fear nicely but those lights of home and dog their to welcome you makes every thing all right.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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I know exactly what it feels like to be driving into the boonies at night. Your imagination can go crazy if you are alone and the way home does feel much longer in the night. You build a feeling of apprehension and fear nicely but those lights of home and dog their to welcome you makes every thing all right.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Beth! Isn't it creepy?? Especially when it's stormy. I feel sort of safe inside the car, but real late...and we have flooding, so it's scary in the dark. And yes, Buddy was so happy! I was relieved!! Thank you very much Beth...it's always so nice to hear from you! xoxo, susan
Comment from c_lucas
One's igmagination can run out of control in unfamilar places. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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One's igmagination can run out of control in unfamilar places. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Thank you Charlie! ") I'm so glad you enjoyed this a little! I really had the creeps that night! ") Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Oh yes. And the hair rises on the back of your neck and on your arms and you know someone's watching just out of reach, out of sight, waiting to grab you and do you awful, nameless harm and you pull up to your house and try to decide how to get from the safety of the drivers' seat within locked car doors to the hoped-for safety inside your house....Dang! I just scared myself! And yes, dogs make everything better! Well done. :D Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Oh yes. And the hair rises on the back of your neck and on your arms and you know someone's watching just out of reach, out of sight, waiting to grab you and do you awful, nameless harm and you pull up to your house and try to decide how to get from the safety of the drivers' seat within locked car doors to the hoped-for safety inside your house....Dang! I just scared myself! And yes, dogs make everything better! Well done. :D Nancy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Nancy! Thank you! It's funny how you gave yourself the creeps! SO sorry! But, it's okay, it's just a story! Hugs for this kind review!! I do appreciate! Susan
Comment from Judian James
There's a stretch of road like this in the dark of night that is a bit scary where I live too. You did well with this write. I was relieved when you pulled in your driveway
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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There's a stretch of road like this in the dark of night that is a bit scary where I live too. You did well with this write. I was relieved when you pulled in your driveway
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Jude! Thank you! I really did feel scared some...but more by people that could lurk, than any animal! That's for sure! Thank you again! I appreciate! Susan
Comment from missy98writer
Sue,
what a creepy story you've superbly written with dark narrative, excellent descriptive writing. Your art work is scary perfection. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you've established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Now, I have a fear that the woods have eyes watching you. It's creepy. One night years ago I got stuck in the gate house when I worked as a ranger-gate attendent at Arcadia Lake during a storm and I had to run for their bathroom in the camping area that accomidated guest during bad weather. Your story is worthy of five stars of excellence. Keep on writing marvelous fiction, my friend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Sue,
what a creepy story you've superbly written with dark narrative, excellent descriptive writing. Your art work is scary perfection. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you've established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Now, I have a fear that the woods have eyes watching you. It's creepy. One night years ago I got stuck in the gate house when I worked as a ranger-gate attendent at Arcadia Lake during a storm and I had to run for their bathroom in the camping area that accomidated guest during bad weather. Your story is worthy of five stars of excellence. Keep on writing marvelous fiction, my friend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Melissa!! Thanks, and what a tale you could tell!! You should write a story about it! I have done that same thing going to and from our barn during storms, worrying about the silly horses. SOMEDAY! I will get it! Please be careful! What a neat job tho, in a park? Sounds neat anyway! I will get caught up with your work soon Melissa, I have not forgotten you!! Luv, susan
Comment from godlucifer
good short story with a lot of parallels,and short descriptive writing. sometime the supernatural can be the supernatural and other times the supernatural can be visionary. your story possesses these type of criteria and you made the short writing really remarkable. thanks for the read!
yours in vain,
godlucifer!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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good short story with a lot of parallels,and short descriptive writing. sometime the supernatural can be the supernatural and other times the supernatural can be visionary. your story possesses these type of criteria and you made the short writing really remarkable. thanks for the read!
yours in vain,
godlucifer!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi there! I really appreciate this most thought provoking review! I like that you got the parallels that even I didn't see myself! Until pointed out by another! How shameful for me! ") I am thrilled that you liked this! Thanks again! Susan
Comment from Judy Swanson
Hi Suse -
What a chillingly clear tale of the fear of the darkness in dark places. You did an awesome job of describing the emotional reactions to the trees, the weather report, the thunder, the winds - great personification with the trees reaching out toward you and the hills watching with glee at your angst. I know the feeling well.
Loved this line, among many others...
" the occasional pot-hole claiming another mile from the life of my car..."
How true that is.
Very well done story, and very well written with good visual word choices.
Hugs.
Judy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Suse -
What a chillingly clear tale of the fear of the darkness in dark places. You did an awesome job of describing the emotional reactions to the trees, the weather report, the thunder, the winds - great personification with the trees reaching out toward you and the hills watching with glee at your angst. I know the feeling well.
Loved this line, among many others...
" the occasional pot-hole claiming another mile from the life of my car..."
How true that is.
Very well done story, and very well written with good visual word choices.
Hugs.
Judy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Hi Judy! Thank you! What a joy when you like my stories! I am always so happy to know. These are so short, but fun to do and I really appreciate you Miss Judy! HUGS back! Susan
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And you are so very welcome, my friend. Judy
Comment from humpwhistle
This is a very good write, Susan. You put me the car, and showed me all the lurking monsters. Your descriptions are wonderfully vivid.
I felt the treat, and the isolation. I could't wait for you to get home, either.
Nice job, Suse.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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This is a very good write, Susan. You put me the car, and showed me all the lurking monsters. Your descriptions are wonderfully vivid.
I felt the treat, and the isolation. I could't wait for you to get home, either.
Nice job, Suse.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi Lee! I had the heebie jeebies coming "home" from seeing my brother last week...it was in the wee hours and we have had some flooding...thankfully, no real dinosuars! ") Thank you for reading this for me...it's nice to hear from you! I hope you and your Mother are doing well. It would help if winter would just leave us all alone! ") Keep warm my friend! susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again you did a wondeful job with descriptions.
"Surely that won't happen.", I say aloud to no one in particular as my guts roil and churn. (Put the comma after happen and remove the period.)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Once again you did a wondeful job with descriptions.
"Surely that won't happen.", I say aloud to no one in particular as my guts roil and churn. (Put the comma after happen and remove the period.)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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HI Barb! Thank you, I will make the correction now! I really appreciate your help and it's wonderful to hear from you! I hope you are feeling well Barb!! HUG! Susan
Comment from anne1204
Excellent descriptions of driving alone and out in the country. Great imagery of the road, trees and darkness. One suggestion. The first sentence in the second paragraph, leave of the "by", just end with pass. I loved it. Anne
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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Excellent descriptions of driving alone and out in the country. Great imagery of the road, trees and darkness. One suggestion. The first sentence in the second paragraph, leave of the "by", just end with pass. I loved it. Anne
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2011
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HI Anne! Thank you so much! I will check that too! I appreciate your help and time for me too!! Happy writing Anne! Luv, susan
