Species: Homo Sapiens
Please bear with the science stuff; it's worth it!28 total reviews
Comment from Frances Jean
A couple of spags, 'he goes onto explain' = on to
'muscle cells imply more neurons' = employ
Extremely well researched and well written. An interesting read. You have obviously spent quite some time on this and deserve to win the competition. All the best Frances
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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A couple of spags, 'he goes onto explain' = on to
'muscle cells imply more neurons' = employ
Extremely well researched and well written. An interesting read. You have obviously spent quite some time on this and deserve to win the competition. All the best Frances
Comment Written 19-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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Wow, thank you so much for your very kind review, Frances. Thanks too for the spag tips and the best wishes - much appreciated :)))
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You're most welcome. Cheers Frances
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
I did enjoy this rather 'in-depth' story of why women are as they are. LOL- didn't realize I'd get a medical and scientific education, but enjoyed the results of your extensive research as well. You have well explained the differences between men and women, but would have liked to have seen the results on a real-life, logical level Thanks for sharing, and best of luck in the contest. Betty
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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I did enjoy this rather 'in-depth' story of why women are as they are. LOL- didn't realize I'd get a medical and scientific education, but enjoyed the results of your extensive research as well. You have well explained the differences between men and women, but would have liked to have seen the results on a real-life, logical level Thanks for sharing, and best of luck in the contest. Betty
Comment Written 17-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Hi Betty,
Yes, unfortunately I don't think my research approach has been accepted very well! lol It was simply meant to be a scientific explanation of why women are the way they are, with some humour and personal interventions thrown in. I guess my different approach did not work! lol I think people do not like all the scientific jargon - yet the contest category is ESSAY so I assumed this would be ok - guess not!! lolol Ooooooops!
Still, it's only by trying things that we find out what works and what does not! lol
I'm afraid it reflects where my brain is at, at the mo - itching to get back to Uni in September and do some research in Psychology - I guess it's coming out all over the place!! lol
THANK YOU so much for your very kind review :)))
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It IS a great report, but I think it shows the genetic, scientific differences between all men and women and doesn't really tell the emotional and mental differences, or why they occur- on more enviromental, mental, and personality levels. You've probaly worked harder on that essay than anyone has. I found it very interesting! Betty
Comment from missy98writer
Writer,
your essay non-fiction is very well written and wonderfully researched. You story titled Species: Homo Sapiens is an excellent entry in the contest Why Women Are the Way They Are. Your descriptive scheme is great with very good narrative. As a woman we are complex, but we give birth to nations making us the superior sex. Men couldn't handle the pain of child birth. I enjoyed your conclusing. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Missy.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2011
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Writer,
your essay non-fiction is very well written and wonderfully researched. You story titled Species: Homo Sapiens is an excellent entry in the contest Why Women Are the Way They Are. Your descriptive scheme is great with very good narrative. As a woman we are complex, but we give birth to nations making us the superior sex. Men couldn't handle the pain of child birth. I enjoyed your conclusing. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Missy.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for your detailed and thoughtful review, Missy. It is much appreciated! I loved your comment about "giving birth to nations" - how true! Ha ha!
Thanks again :)
Comment from Nicky B
A very well thought out essay. This particular passage below warmed the cockles of my male heart.
However, if a woman embraces her femininity she is more likely to be proud of her natural beauty, her empathy and therefore her wholeness as a woman. She realizes that she does not have anything to prove, and that her femininity does not, in any way, conflict with her desires as a human being, but enhances her natural ability to be amazing! (Just like a man who embraces all aspects of himself enhances his ability to be amazing.)
Couldn't have said it better myself. Nick.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2011
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A very well thought out essay. This particular passage below warmed the cockles of my male heart.
However, if a woman embraces her femininity she is more likely to be proud of her natural beauty, her empathy and therefore her wholeness as a woman. She realizes that she does not have anything to prove, and that her femininity does not, in any way, conflict with her desires as a human being, but enhances her natural ability to be amazing! (Just like a man who embraces all aspects of himself enhances his ability to be amazing.)
Couldn't have said it better myself. Nick.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2011
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Yes... I shan't tell you how many years (decades! lol) it took me to learn that! Still, better late than never! lol
Thank you so much for your thoughtful review, Nick. I am happy this part reached you. Thanks again :)))
Comment from animatqua
A very nicely presented dissertation. I still think men and women are not of the same species. They certainly do not speak the same language!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2011
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A very nicely presented dissertation. I still think men and women are not of the same species. They certainly do not speak the same language!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2011
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Ha! ha! No they don't! lol
Thanks very much for reviewing :)
Comment from RebelRose
I love the weay you started this off ... that first paragraph is not an attention getter, it's oh, so true. This is really quite good and a good contender for this contest.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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I love the weay you started this off ... that first paragraph is not an attention getter, it's oh, so true. This is really quite good and a good contender for this contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind and review and witty comments - a couple of people have commented on that! :)
Comment from hvysmker
A fine scientific discourse. I saw no errors.
Also, I can't easily spot errors in British spelling. It's too bad that in the wars we Americans had with the British we didn't insist you guys adopt our grammar conventions, he-he. Or that the British didn't do the same with us when they were in charge. Either would have made correct grammar much easier. Naturally, I prefer blaming you.
A bad point, in my humble opinion, is the use of so much scientific terms. It interrupts the flow of my reading. On the other hand, you can hardly be expected to define them here.
As a pragmatic, I don't agree with you when you say:
"In ancient times, each sex had a very defined role that helped ensure the survival of the species. Cave men hunted. Cave women gathered food near the home and cared for the children."
Not to detract from your tale, but I think that attitude is too generic. That many cave women hunted. That unless pregnant or recently birthed, most able-bodied tribal members went after food, leaving the care of children and feeding of the fire to the old and otherwise infirm. Everyone had to earn their keep or be left behind.
Charlie
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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A fine scientific discourse. I saw no errors.
Also, I can't easily spot errors in British spelling. It's too bad that in the wars we Americans had with the British we didn't insist you guys adopt our grammar conventions, he-he. Or that the British didn't do the same with us when they were in charge. Either would have made correct grammar much easier. Naturally, I prefer blaming you.
A bad point, in my humble opinion, is the use of so much scientific terms. It interrupts the flow of my reading. On the other hand, you can hardly be expected to define them here.
As a pragmatic, I don't agree with you when you say:
"In ancient times, each sex had a very defined role that helped ensure the survival of the species. Cave men hunted. Cave women gathered food near the home and cared for the children."
Not to detract from your tale, but I think that attitude is too generic. That many cave women hunted. That unless pregnant or recently birthed, most able-bodied tribal members went after food, leaving the care of children and feeding of the fire to the old and otherwise infirm. Everyone had to earn their keep or be left behind.
Charlie
Comment Written 09-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Hi Charlie,
Yes! I agree with your point about the "cavemen hunting" bit - this was a quote from the "Society of Neuroscience", and after it I wrote "Or, it could of course, go back even further than that!" I don't agree with it myself - I am just putting across the latest scientific thinking in all these things, and letting people make their own minds up - and believe me, they are!! lol
You sussed I'm British then? mmmmm... Perhaps you Americans just like to make typing easy for yourselves, by misssing out CRUCIAL letters: colo(u)r, humo(u)r, sulf(ph)ur - I mean you don't see us saying filosopher or sqeeze - do you?! lolol He he!
As for use of the scientific terms - I think a few others agreed with you - but I come from a Masters and PhD background, it's as instinctive to me as hunting is to you! lolol
On that note, I'll say thanks for a detailed and helpful review - you made some great points which I shall utilise in the future.
(I'm off now before you find your biggest club and clout me one!!! lol) Cheeers :)))
Comment from c_lucas
This is very informative, using rational logic. The essay is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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This is very informative, using rational logic. The essay is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Ha! ha! I thought women were supposed to be less logical? lol
Just goes to show how much the individual factor comes in then!
Thanks for your great review, Charlie - much apprciated! :)
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Read Mark Twain's "Letters From Earth."
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Thanks, I'll check it out :)
Comment from amahra
Wow a great write disgussing the similarities and differences of men and women. I enjoyed the humor and the education of the writing. You obviously did a lot of research into this writing. Great job.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Wow a great write disgussing the similarities and differences of men and women. I enjoyed the humor and the education of the writing. You obviously did a lot of research into this writing. Great job.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for your very encouraging review, amahra! It is very much appreciated :)
Comment from JW
This is a well written article and you present a lot of detailed information here. As I read it I was starting to wonder if this was a FS article or sometime written for a University doctorate. Great job in presenting this.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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This is a well written article and you present a lot of detailed information here. As I read it I was starting to wonder if this was a FS article or sometime written for a University doctorate. Great job in presenting this.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Ha! ha! What a great compliment! But no, THIS was not part of a PhD Thesis, although I did do over 3 years of a PhD looking at the way people manage depression. I left when I found out I was pregnant, because I was (am) a recovering depressive myself, and felt it unwise to spread myself too thin - so I chose to be the best Mum I could be. It is funny you mention this though, as doing the rearch for 2 writes recently has inspired to do an Open University course in either BSc Psycology or some kind of Masters in research. So you are not far off!
Thanks for the great review - I wanted to come from the angle of presenting "the science stuff" for this contest :)))
