The Princess
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Comment from Realist101
Hi Bev! I had chills from being cold, then read this and am creeped out very nicely, thank you! ") I watch programs about these kinds of things, and have seen ghosts a few times. Or what I thought were...I often wonder what happens when we die. I guess I'll find out soon enough! You are a good writer! Keep at it! This was a fun story!! Luv, susan
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011
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Hi Bev! I had chills from being cold, then read this and am creeped out very nicely, thank you! ") I watch programs about these kinds of things, and have seen ghosts a few times. Or what I thought were...I often wonder what happens when we die. I guess I'll find out soon enough! You are a good writer! Keep at it! This was a fun story!! Luv, susan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011
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Hi Susan. Thanks, my friend, for your wonderful review. So glad you liked the story - especially nice to hear from a writer of your caliber! Warm regards.
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You are welcome, I don't feel much I do is so good...but you are a kind and fun fanfriend Bev...hug, susan
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You are being way too hard on yourself. I'm not the only one on the site that is inspired by your offerings Susan. I believe in you! Hugs...Bev
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Thank you Bev...I just depend on the amount of reviews I get too mych! It's sad when someone lives their life on a computer! Thank you again...you are a really nice person...xoxo. susan
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My pleasure my dear.
Comment from sweetsilversong
Bev, this was wonderfully well written and the storyline excellent.
Suspense was fantastic, love the time shift which worked incredibly well.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
SSS
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011
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Bev, this was wonderfully well written and the storyline excellent.
Suspense was fantastic, love the time shift which worked incredibly well.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 02-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011
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Hello my friend. So happy you liked my story. Don't know about the contest, but I've already been rewarded by wonderful comments like yours. I so appreciate your support and good wishes. Warm regards.
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
I enjoyed reading your story, my friend, however, I think it is supposed to be written in first person only. At any rate, it was a nice read. Good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011
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I enjoyed reading your story, my friend, however, I think it is supposed to be written in first person only. At any rate, it was a nice read. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your excellent review El Gato.
Comment from misscookie
Wow this is a very interests story.
There was never a dull; moment,
it is filled with suspense.
You had my attention from the first line to the last.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Wow this is a very interests story.
There was never a dull; moment,
it is filled with suspense.
You had my attention from the first line to the last.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi misscookie. You are so sweet to take time out to read my story and send along your delightful review. I'm so glad you liked my little ghost story. Warm regards!
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from vickib
Hi Bev, wow this was so interesting and kind of spooky too. What a great job writing this. It was full of great description and mystery. I like skipping from 1903 to 2010 and how you did it, no easy task. I hope this doesn't happen to me. My luck I'd get stuck looking for someone. I like when she remembers her romantic evening while brushing her hair. I really bad at spag (hence a spag class for me) but I didn't see any. Only one sentence where you may have missed a word-Is that you people hear crying. Super work in this supernatural fiction. XO Vicki
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi Bev, wow this was so interesting and kind of spooky too. What a great job writing this. It was full of great description and mystery. I like skipping from 1903 to 2010 and how you did it, no easy task. I hope this doesn't happen to me. My luck I'd get stuck looking for someone. I like when she remembers her romantic evening while brushing her hair. I really bad at spag (hence a spag class for me) but I didn't see any. Only one sentence where you may have missed a word-Is that you people hear crying. Super work in this supernatural fiction. XO Vicki
Comment Written 01-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi Vicki. How sweet of you to read my story and send along your awesome review. I really appreciate you pointing out that murky line. I think I've come up with something better. Luckily, I still have time before the contest. You're the bee's knees!!!
Hugs.
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Did you know you can edit anytime during the whole voting process? I know because it came up once for me and I asked Tom. COOL? Not that you need to do any more than that. See you Thursday friend. XO bee's knee's-haiku? senryu? Tanka? HEHE
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I didn't know that! Wow, that's good information Vicki. Thanks alot. Tanka I think. Hugs, Bev
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:)
Comment from mumsyone
Good writing! Great story! Good dialogue!
Good descriptions:
The lure of her jeweled hair ornaments and brushes pulls her back to the dressing table. On either side are portraits of her husband, Jacob, and her young son, Miles. Hidden within a locked compartment of her dressing table is a kerchief belonging to her lover, Captain Jonathon Montague.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Good writing! Great story! Good dialogue!
Good descriptions:
The lure of her jeweled hair ornaments and brushes pulls her back to the dressing table. On either side are portraits of her husband, Jacob, and her young son, Miles. Hidden within a locked compartment of her dressing table is a kerchief belonging to her lover, Captain Jonathon Montague.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi there. I so appreciate your wonderful review! Glad you liked my ghost contest entry. It was fun to write. Warm regards.
Comment from Gungalo
Ooooh love stories like this especially when they are bsed on actual encounters which I presume this story is. Great short write that makes the reader say, "Wow!!!"
Check this line: Is that you people hear crying? ... I think you meant "Is that people you hear crying?" ......
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Ooooh love stories like this especially when they are bsed on actual encounters which I presume this story is. Great short write that makes the reader say, "Wow!!!"
Check this line: Is that you people hear crying? ... I think you meant "Is that people you hear crying?" ......
Comment Written 01-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi lovely lady. Thanks for pointing out the murky line. Another reviewer did also; and, luckily, I have time to get it changed. You are so sweet to take time to read the story and send along your wonderful review. I'm so glad you liked it my friend! Warm regards.
Comment from PoetryMistress
Oooh had the hairs standing up on the back of my neck. I liked the way it is laid out and starts in the past. I thought it was going to be a 'period' piece. Then it jumped to the present. Well written and nice technique, it really worked for me.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Oooh had the hairs standing up on the back of my neck. I liked the way it is laid out and starts in the past. I thought it was going to be a 'period' piece. Then it jumped to the present. Well written and nice technique, it really worked for me.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi PM. I am so glad you liked my ghost story! You are most kind to take the time to read it and send along your wonderful and encouraging review. Warm regards.
Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
I enjoyed this write immensely. You wrote with such fervor and passion for a subject not easily accepted or acknowledged. Great job.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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I enjoyed this write immensely. You wrote with such fervor and passion for a subject not easily accepted or acknowledged. Great job.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2011
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Hi Andrea. How sweet of you to, once again, take time out to read my writing and send along your wonderful review. I so appreciate your encouragement. Warm regards.
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yes, darling. I send your flowers of Vanilla scented jasmine.
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Oh yum!!!
