Dreaming Of Disco
a poem about the disco years14 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Love the alliterative D words in stanza 2
Great descriptive detail so reminiscent of the disco atmosphere
Your quatrains have good flow and strong abcb rhyming
Love the romantic ending :-) Congrats on your win for this fun poem :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Love the alliterative D words in stanza 2
Great descriptive detail so reminiscent of the disco atmosphere
Your quatrains have good flow and strong abcb rhyming
Love the romantic ending :-) Congrats on your win for this fun poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2011
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Thanks, Brooke, for taking the time to read and review my poem, DREAMING OF DISCO. Glad you liked it. Can you tell I miss the beat?
hugs - sherry
Comment from happy to be here
Great use of old Disco Themed songs in your poem. I didn't even realise until most of the way through. I am ashamed to be so out of touch with my roots as I was also a disco girl in the 70's. This is a great write and tribute to a, while maybe not truly great era, an era that informed my growing up, and yours. thanks for a fun read!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Great use of old Disco Themed songs in your poem. I didn't even realise until most of the way through. I am ashamed to be so out of touch with my roots as I was also a disco girl in the 70's. This is a great write and tribute to a, while maybe not truly great era, an era that informed my growing up, and yours. thanks for a fun read!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read & review my poem, Dreaming of Disco. I really enjoyed my little stroll down memory lane and am glad you did to.
have a great week - sherry
Comment from dportwood
author,
I like a poem in which the author puts thought and planning. Your poem does this and shows the spirit of disco. Well done. Good luck.
Duane
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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author,
I like a poem in which the author puts thought and planning. Your poem does this and shows the spirit of disco. Well done. Good luck.
Duane
Comment Written 25-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read and critique my poem, Dreaming Of Disco. It was a fun write, a bit more challenging that I thought it would be ... It was, however, also a nice trip down memory lane.
have a great week - sherry
Comment from DeboraDyess
Might say 'oh, don't you want to go down.' Don't know, but it seems smoother at midnight after all day on the road. (Take any suggestion at your own risk, sis!)
The next to last stanza (starts I love the nightlife) is literally half of most of the other first stanzas. It feels tooooo short. Try 'I remember I loved the night life' or 'Yes, you and I love the night life' or something to pump syllable count up
Like it, like it!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Might say 'oh, don't you want to go down.' Don't know, but it seems smoother at midnight after all day on the road. (Take any suggestion at your own risk, sis!)
The next to last stanza (starts I love the nightlife) is literally half of most of the other first stanzas. It feels tooooo short. Try 'I remember I loved the night life' or 'Yes, you and I love the night life' or something to pump syllable count up
Like it, like it!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2011
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Thanks, Deb, for taking the time to read & review my poem, Dreaming of Disco.
have a great week!
Comment from krdeering
Good rhythm/beat and rhymes, especially fitting for the disco theme. Very enjoyable to read and reminisce with! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Good rhythm/beat and rhymes, especially fitting for the disco theme. Very enjoyable to read and reminisce with! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read and critique my poem, Dreaming of Disco. I appreciate your comments and am glad you enjoyed it.
Have a great week!
Comment from Mara del Mar
A poem very rhythmic and fluid, which abounds in descriptive images (in the disco dancing, sweat, music) Precious memories of the ways to amuse youth. Good entry, congratulations and good luck!!!!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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A poem very rhythmic and fluid, which abounds in descriptive images (in the disco dancing, sweat, music) Precious memories of the ways to amuse youth. Good entry, congratulations and good luck!!!!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and critique my poem, Dreaming Of Disco.
Have a great week!
Comment from animatqua
I was a kid in the fifties and early sixties, so I pretty much missed the disco scene. This was a good tribute to it, at least from what I know of disco.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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I was a kid in the fifties and early sixties, so I pretty much missed the disco scene. This was a good tribute to it, at least from what I know of disco.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Dreaming Of Disco.
Have a great week!
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is an excellent little poem and a strong contest entry. I like your subtle use of seventies songs ie I love the night life, and Hold me close. The seventies was my era- a very nostalgic read x
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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This is an excellent little poem and a strong contest entry. I like your subtle use of seventies songs ie I love the night life, and Hold me close. The seventies was my era- a very nostalgic read x
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Dreaming Of Disco.
Have a great week!
Comment from Justin Chopin
Very well written with a great rhythm. The references to Abba's Dancing Queen and I love the Night Life also worked really well in the poem as transitions to your narrative of your wild disco nights. Very lyrical a great Disco song . Fantastic job with the poetry.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Very well written with a great rhythm. The references to Abba's Dancing Queen and I love the Night Life also worked really well in the poem as transitions to your narrative of your wild disco nights. Very lyrical a great Disco song . Fantastic job with the poetry.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and critique my poem, Dreaming Of Disco. There were actually several more references to songs, but some were pretty obscure.
Have a great week!
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you're welcome.
Comment from The Stranger
Im staying alive with the D.I.S.C.O, I want "More more more" I want to dance with "The Queen Of Clubs" but I do have time for Tina Charles if she still "Loves to love", I can always listen to Donna Summer "On The Radio..."
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Im staying alive with the D.I.S.C.O, I want "More more more" I want to dance with "The Queen Of Clubs" but I do have time for Tina Charles if she still "Loves to love", I can always listen to Donna Summer "On The Radio..."
Comment Written 24-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Dreaming Of Disco.
Have a great week!
