The Lord's Prayer
Trying to understand the words27 total reviews
Comment from Dom G Robles
I think the essay or story, is nice and beautiful
The writer discusses well how and what those words in the Catholic's Prayer mean: "Our Father who art in heaven... Thy will be done on earth..." She feels nostalgia for the death of her friend, Maria, but quite wary of her friend's belief and of her religion. Done in a very subtle way but obviously without malice, she questions --asks the meaning of what those sacred words really mean in essence. I like the last part addressing her friend in heaven: "Are you up there Maria? Perhaps, I can forgive you for dying. I'll never forget you." Beautiful, too.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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I think the essay or story, is nice and beautiful
The writer discusses well how and what those words in the Catholic's Prayer mean: "Our Father who art in heaven... Thy will be done on earth..." She feels nostalgia for the death of her friend, Maria, but quite wary of her friend's belief and of her religion. Done in a very subtle way but obviously without malice, she questions --asks the meaning of what those sacred words really mean in essence. I like the last part addressing her friend in heaven: "Are you up there Maria? Perhaps, I can forgive you for dying. I'll never forget you." Beautiful, too.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you.
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Welcome.
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Welcome. Dom
Comment from sasil
Looks like He sent Maria to you for a reason. I'm trying not to cry here as I read and reflect on my own wrongs, and those done to me and those I love. I too find it difficult to forgive, never mind 'forget' certain people. I try, and I try to teach my children the same...but this momma's not raising no fools!
Your heartfelt writing tackles some harsh realities and issues many will relate too, giving this piece a myriad of reviews, I'm sure. No spags, but wonder what all the little squares are about?
Thanks for sharing this--I enjoyed the way you broke down the rote lines and gave each personal attention and meaning. Powerful.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Looks like He sent Maria to you for a reason. I'm trying not to cry here as I read and reflect on my own wrongs, and those done to me and those I love. I too find it difficult to forgive, never mind 'forget' certain people. I try, and I try to teach my children the same...but this momma's not raising no fools!
Your heartfelt writing tackles some harsh realities and issues many will relate too, giving this piece a myriad of reviews, I'm sure. No spags, but wonder what all the little squares are about?
Thanks for sharing this--I enjoyed the way you broke down the rote lines and gave each personal attention and meaning. Powerful.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I have discovered that when usingadvanced editor on the site, it messes with the spacing. I actually just went back and reduced the spaces AGAIN! If you use it make sure you check how it looks in print. I
ve done some small revisions a coupe of times and every time I do it reverts back.
As for my story, I was inspired to write this after receiving a religious e-mail from another devout friend this AM. I tried to tell her that a lot of spam comes through on these religious e-mails as no God fearing Catholic can possibly not forward them (I do have a pretty strong firewall) but as I sat and looked at the Lord's Prayer I realized that we do so may things by rote.
Agreed, we have friends for a season, a eason and a lifetime. Mirella (her real name) was a gift to the universe, touching everyone with her joyfullness.
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Keep in mind, that He sent you to her too!
;D
Comment from whitteron
You always blow me away. This is so good I hope you submit it somewhere at sometime. Having grown up with a confession I memorized because I couldn't think of anything I had done wrong, and all the hocus pocus of the wizard of oz, this puts God where I think he/she/it belongs. Maria sound amazing, and there is nothing more painful than losing a best friend, man or woman.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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You always blow me away. This is so good I hope you submit it somewhere at sometime. Having grown up with a confession I memorized because I couldn't think of anything I had done wrong, and all the hocus pocus of the wizard of oz, this puts God where I think he/she/it belongs. Maria sound amazing, and there is nothing more painful than losing a best friend, man or woman.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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You are very generous with your stars! Yes aria was a one of a kind. I'm still loing for God.
Comment from juliaSjames
It's interesting and enlightening when a familiar prayer is analyzed. The Lord's Prayer is the example that Jesus gave in response to the request to teach his disciples how to pray. And yet we tend to mumble it without paying too much attention to its meaning.
I liked the way you wrapped this account around the center of your love for your friend.
A very honest and appealing write.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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It's interesting and enlightening when a familiar prayer is analyzed. The Lord's Prayer is the example that Jesus gave in response to the request to teach his disciples how to pray. And yet we tend to mumble it without paying too much attention to its meaning.
I liked the way you wrapped this account around the center of your love for your friend.
A very honest and appealing write.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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thank you
Comment from adewpearl
Maria, who died a year ago - add comma
If they learned this prayer, God - add comma for direct address
Are you up there, Maria - add comma for direct address
This is a moving story, honest in its emotions, evocative in its observations. Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Maria, who died a year ago - add comma
If they learned this prayer, God - add comma for direct address
Are you up there, Maria - add comma for direct address
This is a moving story, honest in its emotions, evocative in its observations. Brooke
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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thanks
Comment from Soledadpaz
This is a beautiful rendition of the Lord's Prayer in honor of your good friend, Maria. I agree that there is serenity in an empty church. It's when it fills up with people that you wonder what the words to the prayer really mean to those who hear it and mouth it.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This is a beautiful rendition of the Lord's Prayer in honor of your good friend, Maria. I agree that there is serenity in an empty church. It's when it fills up with people that you wonder what the words to the prayer really mean to those who hear it and mouth it.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you
Comment from Irene D. Garces
This is the most excellent piece of non-fiction I've encountered in Fanstory. Yes, the Lord's prayer is the most perfect prayer of all.
I am a Catholic and sometime ago I have this wish of receiving Christ's body and blood daily (the Holy Communion). It is a wish that I tried to fulfill each day no matter what. For me, my life is complete after I received the Holy Communion. i no longer care what happens next. On the next day, I am again inspired to receive HIM once again.
But, I knew that it's God's will that prevails...Not according to my desires and wishes but only to what He wills for me...Just like today...You see, I was late in catching up the 6:00 am mass at Tagum City which is 40 kms. from home, where I have to catch the early bus ride in going there. .. I was late and I was so down and lonely and tearful...Although, i still have a hope in the 5:30 pm mass this day. But, I'm still sad because it will be a long time of waiting.
When I read your non-fiction, I smiled because I've learned that there are others in this world who shared same thoughts and feelings with me...
Thanks for cheering me up today...
God Bless.
irene
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This is the most excellent piece of non-fiction I've encountered in Fanstory. Yes, the Lord's prayer is the most perfect prayer of all.
I am a Catholic and sometime ago I have this wish of receiving Christ's body and blood daily (the Holy Communion). It is a wish that I tried to fulfill each day no matter what. For me, my life is complete after I received the Holy Communion. i no longer care what happens next. On the next day, I am again inspired to receive HIM once again.
But, I knew that it's God's will that prevails...Not according to my desires and wishes but only to what He wills for me...Just like today...You see, I was late in catching up the 6:00 am mass at Tagum City which is 40 kms. from home, where I have to catch the early bus ride in going there. .. I was late and I was so down and lonely and tearful...Although, i still have a hope in the 5:30 pm mass this day. But, I'm still sad because it will be a long time of waiting.
When I read your non-fiction, I smiled because I've learned that there are others in this world who shared same thoughts and feelings with me...
Thanks for cheering me up today...
God Bless.
irene
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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I am sure that if you are on this site then you are a writer. I thinl Jesus would really prefer that you give in addition to receive. Don't let receiving th host the onl way that you receive him into your heart. Write and don't preach. Let your keyboard mirror the tears and the peace in living His will. Wite by example through stories that peel back layers.
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My Friend,
I really wish i could post any writings on this site. But, it is impossible because I have not upgraded my membership...I have not paid even the minimum requirement needed. You see, in a poor country like the Philippines the 100 dollars per year is already too much. It cost as much as our family's whole month's food consumption. That's why i am content of just reading and reviewing poems and stories. Anyway, I can also share something to my Fanstory friends thru messages.
Thanks for the concern, Friend.
God Bless.
irene
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Irene, you have been haunting me. I think about you climbing on that bus each day to be near the symbols of Christ and to feed your soul with devotion.
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Irene, you have been haunting me. I think about you climbing on that bus each day to be near the symbols of Christ and to feed your soul with devotion.
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Dear Friend,
you need not worry about me, 'coz I really loved what I am doing and I am so happy about the chance of receiving the Lord. Please pray for me too.
w/ prayers,
irene
Comment from Veekz
This is a really heartfelt piece and I am so incredibly sorry to hear of the loss of your friend. From what you have written here she sounds like a shining light in the middle of a rainy (Good Friday of course lol) day :)
I like how you have questioned each line and it's meaning and how it relates to yourself and your own circumstances; and indeed, they relate to many of us as well.
You bring to mind some good points like about the profanity etc. For some reason I always remember to say 'my goodness' rather then 'my God' as I feel guilty even though I'm not a practicing Christian, yet I have no problem screaming f*** and other profanities at the top of my lungs when I'm angry, in laughter when I'm happy or just just normal day to day talk. Strange huh? I've never really though about it til reading this piece :)
Thanks for the fab read and the number of things you've left me to ponder on.
Kia Kaha my friend, I'm sure Maria is reading your piece with a smile on her face :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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This is a really heartfelt piece and I am so incredibly sorry to hear of the loss of your friend. From what you have written here she sounds like a shining light in the middle of a rainy (Good Friday of course lol) day :)
I like how you have questioned each line and it's meaning and how it relates to yourself and your own circumstances; and indeed, they relate to many of us as well.
You bring to mind some good points like about the profanity etc. For some reason I always remember to say 'my goodness' rather then 'my God' as I feel guilty even though I'm not a practicing Christian, yet I have no problem screaming f*** and other profanities at the top of my lungs when I'm angry, in laughter when I'm happy or just just normal day to day talk. Strange huh? I've never really though about it til reading this piece :)
Thanks for the fab read and the number of things you've left me to ponder on.
Kia Kaha my friend, I'm sure Maria is reading your piece with a smile on her face :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you. I find swearing rather therapeutic.
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Lol so do I :)
Want to know a funny fact? Too bad if not..... I'm telling you anyway lol :P
Swearing increases tolerance to pain! Got to love that as a fab excuse :):)
http://scienceblogs.com/neurophilosophy/2009/07/swearing_increases_pain_tolerance.php
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You have no idea how this made me laugh! I suffer from sever psoriases and all this time I thought I'd nuilt up my pain thresh hold by having to deal with it. Good news that all that swearing helped me along. That's pricelss!
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Good to hear - apparently laughter helps with pain too!! :):)
Comment from Cletus Hardiman
Well, I will have to admit this one is a bit hard for me to rate! But, you have done a good job in presenting it, and I believe that you have taken the most part of the Lord's prayer to heart! But, we do have to forgive others! And, I will admit that is a hard one! So, I'll rate this one on content alone and give you 5! Thanks for sharing! Cletus Hardiman
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Well, I will have to admit this one is a bit hard for me to rate! But, you have done a good job in presenting it, and I believe that you have taken the most part of the Lord's prayer to heart! But, we do have to forgive others! And, I will admit that is a hard one! So, I'll rate this one on content alone and give you 5! Thanks for sharing! Cletus Hardiman
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.....Clete
Comment from Revamay
Wow! You packed a lot into this essay that is profound. You've given life and its meaning a lot of thought. I commend you for having a foster child. My take on life is that the Lord created us to come closer to Him and for us to be happy. Sorry you suffered so much. One thing I would change is "bake goods," I think should be "baked goods."
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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Wow! You packed a lot into this essay that is profound. You've given life and its meaning a lot of thought. I commend you for having a foster child. My take on life is that the Lord created us to come closer to Him and for us to be happy. Sorry you suffered so much. One thing I would change is "bake goods," I think should be "baked goods."
Comment Written 22-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2011
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you are right. will edit now. Thanks
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You're welcome.
