What You Mean To Me.
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Comment from Stephie G
Very inspiring poem, definitely makes you think. At first it was unclear "why" you were asleep, then you brought that out. Well done in my opinion. (This is my first rating so I hope I am doing it correctly)
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Very inspiring poem, definitely makes you think. At first it was unclear "why" you were asleep, then you brought that out. Well done in my opinion. (This is my first rating so I hope I am doing it correctly)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, Stephie, thank you for lovely and generous review, and a big welcome to the world of FanStory. I am sure you will enjoy the commeraderie and support. You're doing just fine! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from S.Yocom
Marijke, this is a beautifully written love poem which brought a tear to my eye. Your meter and rhymes are perfect, and the sentiment is very strong. What a wionderful poem!
Sally
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Marijke, this is a beautifully written love poem which brought a tear to my eye. Your meter and rhymes are perfect, and the sentiment is very strong. What a wionderful poem!
Sally
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, Sally, thank you for so much for this generous six star review, my friend. I am humbled! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from stanishmichelle
This is so thought provoking and meaningful. It is important to appreciate what we have before it's too late. We'll never get another chance to show our loved ones how much we care for them. It's a wonderful poem.
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This is so thought provoking and meaningful. It is important to appreciate what we have before it's too late. We'll never get another chance to show our loved ones how much we care for them. It's a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, Michelle (I hope I got that right - I am guessing from your ID), thank you for lovely and generous review, my friend. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Thanks and best to you too. Michelle
Comment from louparis
How reflective this seems to me. It evokes and provokes. For someone over 80, it is a reminder of the need to say the things that can't be said when the darkness falls. Best is to leave it in writing for future generations.
Lou Paris
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How reflective this seems to me. It evokes and provokes. For someone over 80, it is a reminder of the need to say the things that can't be said when the darkness falls. Best is to leave it in writing for future generations.
Lou Paris
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, Lou, thank you for lovely and generous review, my friend. You are so right, we should not leave it until it is too late. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from RebelRose
Oh, this is beautiful. It surely makes one think. You not only expressed your emotions so well, you rhymed it beautifully, unforced, with a smooth flow. I love everything about this one. Very well done.
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Oh, this is beautiful. It surely makes one think. You not only expressed your emotions so well, you rhymed it beautifully, unforced, with a smooth flow. I love everything about this one. Very well done.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi, RebelRose. Wow! Thank you so much for your lovely review and generous six star rating, my friend. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from ameen786
You are so very correct, we never appreciate how good a life we live and how good a company we have in our family and friends until too late. Very lovely composition.
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You are so very correct, we never appreciate how good a life we live and how good a company we have in our family and friends until too late. Very lovely composition.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you, ameen, for those observations and your generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from LorieS
This is such a beautiful poem, well written, makes one pause and think about what is truly important in life .. Love .. well done and good luck :)
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This is such a beautiful poem, well written, makes one pause and think about what is truly important in life .. Love .. well done and good luck :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you, Lorie, for your warm and kind observations and generous rating. Warmest regards Marijke :o)
Comment from marcellawachtel
A really interesting concept- things I would say If I woke up after a coma-that you handle so beautifully and with great sensitivity, and when I think about it, it isn't so far-fetched at all; its the essence of a love poem. good luck in the contest.
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A really interesting concept- things I would say If I woke up after a coma-that you handle so beautifully and with great sensitivity, and when I think about it, it isn't so far-fetched at all; its the essence of a love poem. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you, Marcella, for your warm and kind observations and generous rating. Warmest regards Marijke :o)
Comment from shariannegaylee
This is really good, a twist on the old prayer: "Now I lay me down to sleep, I pray the Lord my soul to keep. If I should die before I wake, I pray the Lord my soul to take." Only one small suggestion: make "tear", "tears"--it's okay to do a plural in rhyme and makes it more real. No one watching a loved one die would cry just one tear. But otherwise, it's beautiful, and I especially loved the ending stanza.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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This is really good, a twist on the old prayer: "Now I lay me down to sleep, I pray the Lord my soul to keep. If I should die before I wake, I pray the Lord my soul to take." Only one small suggestion: make "tear", "tears"--it's okay to do a plural in rhyme and makes it more real. No one watching a loved one die would cry just one tear. But otherwise, it's beautiful, and I especially loved the ending stanza.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Hi Sharianne, thank you for your wonderful review and your observation, I appreciate your feedback. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
A very thought-provoking poem. I thought you did a great job of putting the words together for someone you love. Good luck in the contest. Giddy
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A very thought-provoking poem. I thought you did a great job of putting the words together for someone you love. Good luck in the contest. Giddy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2011
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Thank you, Giddy, for reading and your kind review, and your good luck wishes. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
