Comment from dannielleduran

Excellent

Adorably cute and sweet. Your poem is well written and well structured. It flows well and it is an enjoyable read. This is a wonderful poem. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011

thanks, dannielleduran -- love, jan

Comment from percival86jack

Excellent

A great little poem written from the mind of a two year. You need to still have a little of that joy still left in your soul to be able to write this. Kudos... love and happy kiddie thoughts, Jackles xxxxxxxxxx

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011

Jack: I never plan to grow up -- life is to serious as an adult -- LOL -- love, jan

Comment from The Stranger

Excellent

Its the happy times that usually inspire you to write a small poem in recognition of the occaision, you have penned a fitting tribute to your granddaughter, Lexi

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011

thanks, Stranger -- love, jan

Comment from Twomoon

Excellent

Jan, a lovely piece for the contest! I enjoyed reading this one, and it was so playful and well written! I could see this story before my eyes! Miss you, and hope you are well, good luck, this one is a winner! much love twomoon

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011

thanks, Twomoon -- I have missed you, too! Glad you came by for a visit. Return with love, jan

Comment from bowls

Excellent

Such a charming account of your granddaughter's birthday. You tell the story well and include all the charm of a young lady of two. Nicely rhymed and with a good, strong beat. I like the reference to the terrible twos which, I'm sure, you'll never experience.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011

Don't be too sure, bowls -- she has bouts of that, too -- love, jan

Comment from skye

Excellent

Delightful poem about this special girl and her birthday.
Cute rhymes and lines, with a sweet story of joy.
Well crafted, good choice of art, wonderful story.
Well done.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011

thanks, sky -- love, jan

Comment from Majicman

Excellent

This is a delightful poem to brighten up all hearts that have or know children. It will touch the heart-stings of of all poets reading it they will vote for you in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011

thanks, Majicman -- love, jan

Comment from R. K. Alan

Excellent

What a delightful experience and memory not captured for her to see later in life. Thanks for sharing this precious moment with us. Ray aka Krylon

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011

thanks, Ray -- love, jan

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

You formula for writing a poem work well in meter, rhyme and rhythm. I hope this will not be the terrible twos. I see you both have good communication skills and it might be best to share all your poetics thought your lives as a family tradition, if you are not doing this already. My Uncle wrote and book for me, but asked for it back to see if it would get published.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011

I'm going to give her a copy in scrapbook form with her own pictures in it and I will have a copy on my computer so I will not have to ask for it back -- thanks for sharing your story -- love, jan

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Sound like a wonderful day Jan! I know how much joy Lexi is bringing you and love that you are capturing all in a Dear Lexi book (what a treasure for her for later on...). As you know, we love our granddaughter Katie as well, so I can so relate to the love that pours out in these poems. A question: should the comma after Yay be inside the end quotation mark? Also, what about centering this particular piece? Best of luck in the contest with a wonderful story within a poem. Hugs, Sue

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2011

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2011

heck if I know, Sue -- it's one of those things I usually get wrong -- centering -- sure, why not? love, jan