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Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Blessed Losses and Hated Curses-1"A halarious adventure with misery, but always joy!
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Comment from Kevin Armes
This is obviously quite personal writing and perhaps not necessarily intended to be commercial. It would benefit from some editing as there are a few spelling mistakes (burry for one) and a few incorrect tense changes. Addressing these would help the piece's readability. I have to confess to not reading the whole piece as it was a little too long and made me feel like an eavesdropper on a private family matter, but maybe that's just me.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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This is obviously quite personal writing and perhaps not necessarily intended to be commercial. It would benefit from some editing as there are a few spelling mistakes (burry for one) and a few incorrect tense changes. Addressing these would help the piece's readability. I have to confess to not reading the whole piece as it was a little too long and made me feel like an eavesdropper on a private family matter, but maybe that's just me.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2011
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I am very sorry that you feel that way as this book is intended to be put out there, not only commercially available, but its use donated to a hospice center and also the head injury foundation. I put this out there because I am basically tired of seeing the same ole' thing. Especially when something happens to a family, they destroy all of their relationships. I am in the process of making changes and hope to get it fixed by tomorrow. I have certain recognition problems that make editing a real chore. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
It is late and I am sleepy but when I started to read this story I couldn't stop until the very end. Before I forget you have a typo in the following line.
to be a yound adult that was
I think you mean 'young' adult.
I enjoyed reading about your father and your relationship with him. You have excellent writing skills which is obvious to me as I read your lines. This is a good account of the relations ship you had with your dad. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Hi Mike,
It is late and I am sleepy but when I started to read this story I couldn't stop until the very end. Before I forget you have a typo in the following line.
to be a yound adult that was
I think you mean 'young' adult.
I enjoyed reading about your father and your relationship with him. You have excellent writing skills which is obvious to me as I read your lines. This is a good account of the relations ship you had with your dad. Well done, chey
Comment Written 28-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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I should have went through it again myself, but I got too sleepy and needed the after night part of the shift nap. I know there are more typos, but I am happy you pointed yours out to me. It will be fixed when I come home from the morning part of the shift. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, had a quick chance to check some of your story, wow, it is well written and intense, hard to believe this happened! lol Well, you certainly played the character feel very well, I felt the impact and the personalities! Well, take care, I miss tea with you, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Mike, had a quick chance to check some of your story, wow, it is well written and intense, hard to believe this happened! lol Well, you certainly played the character feel very well, I felt the impact and the personalities! Well, take care, I miss tea with you, much love twomoon
Comment Written 28-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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To be honest, I tried to present my father as honestly as possible and the, "Character," easily fell in place. He was a very intense person. I wasn't planning on using any photographs, but as I thought about, the one that I showed kept coming to mind.
But the intensity will once again jump in two chapters as his bestowed curse, comes to life... Oh, boy!
Two, thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from sizemore0409
Hi Mike. This is the review for both Chapters 65 & 66. Lots of trials and tribulations, but you tell the story well. The narrative flows smoothly, in a good, easy-to-follow orderly progression. You do a good job at capturing the imagery and other visuals, and communicating the thoughts and emotions and personal traits of yourself and the other principals of the story. Andy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Hi Mike. This is the review for both Chapters 65 & 66. Lots of trials and tribulations, but you tell the story well. The narrative flows smoothly, in a good, easy-to-follow orderly progression. You do a good job at capturing the imagery and other visuals, and communicating the thoughts and emotions and personal traits of yourself and the other principals of the story. Andy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Love the way you capitalized on this and really appreciate the compliments and this review. I thank you for both! Mike
