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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from lola29
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Thank goodness, Sara, is finally putting her suspicions about Joe to rest. He's a fabulous human being that I suspect most women would love to meet. I really enjoyed reading this chapter.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    I would love to meet him. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
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I swear the woman is crazy - after all he has said and done and risked and sacrificed, she knows so little about his character that she thinks he is capable of beating the girl he so easily could have died for. Joe, if you can hear me calling your name, listen to this advice. Get the hell out of Dodge and leave this crazy woman who is a terrible judge of character and lacks basic faith in you behind!!! LOL

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    I am so glad you speak your mind. I wouldn't love you if you didn't.
reply by adewpearl on 23-Jan-2011
    I love you too :-)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Hey, If I write something like. Joe was happy and Sara was sad, Since I switched subjects after and I would need a comma before and, right?
reply by adewpearl on 23-Jan-2011
    Are you asking if it should be Joe was happy, and Sara was sad? - I think the modern trend is in not using a comma with and in a compound sentence lie that when the individual clauses are so short. On the other hand, I would use the comma if the sentence was - Joe was happy with his promotion and raise in salary, and Sara was sad that meant he had to move farther away.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you. I was editing my next weeks post and I had two sentences that the subject changed after the and. I thought I had read to use a comma. Thank you for the clarification.
Comment from wiskas677@yandex.ru
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Very nice and clean. I wish I could say the same for my work. Keep it up. I know it's hard, but if nothing else, writing helps take your mind off of things and into a better place. That is if you don't write scary things, like me! I could find no errors, and honestly. Your dialogue is very real. Thanks.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. I stick with romance. I rarely read horror, unless it's for a close friend.
Comment from Paradox Tremors
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Wow! Not only a great chapter, but I like the explanation for losing his temper. Just one thing---"You weren't making fun of the county (country?) hick, were you?" Other than that, a well-crafted chapter my friend.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for catching that, my previous reviewers had not.
Comment from Scornwell
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This was as well written as the previous chapters. Your characters continue to come across well and the dialog flows well and seems natural for the characters.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from joannesnow
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Well written chapter. Your characters have truly developed. I feel I have gotten to know Joe and Sara quite well. Your use of dialogue and narration makes this a very easy to follow and enjoyable drama.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from marym224
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An excellent chapter, Barbara. I love the way you string the reader along, expecting Sara to come up with something catastrophic that Joe can't handle. Well done. And I'm so happy the chicken livers are working for you. It's got to be all 'up' from now, for you. Hugs. mxx

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your encouragement and kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
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This is very well written and I like the idea that the rough road is behind Joe and Sara. There is a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
reply by c_lucas on 23-Jan-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara. My prayers are with you. Charlie
Comment from Writeaway...
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24 pages to go Barbara, good on you for sticking to what you do best. I always find it a pleasure to red your work as I never grow tired of it, I was kept in thralled from beginning to end and can suggest nothing for improvment, excellent job, keep writing!! :)

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your encouragement and kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
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Barbara, I am definitely looking forward to the end of the story but at the same time, I'm not. It's been a great story and I hate to see it end. Maybe you'll have to write a sequel to continue their saga. Good job and as always, thanks for sharin with us.

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 Comment Written 23-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. I do have more in the series with a different Task Force man as the hero and cameo apperances of the former TF men written. Thank you for your kind reviw