Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Chapter 14; part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
[ "I can't explain the rage that came over me when I saw you slug him. When he ordered his brother to handcuff you for assaulting an officer, I couldn't restrain myself."]
- I must have missed that chapter, i thought I'd read all of them but I don't remember that happening.
Sarah comes across as a little bit hypocritical here. It's okay for her to slug roy in front of Cassie but not for him? I find myself worried for Joe and wondering what he's getting into. Nice little twist in the tale, I like it, be interesting to see where it leads. Also you ended on a good hook. 'No more obstacles' hmmm I'm not sure I believe her x
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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[ "I can't explain the rage that came over me when I saw you slug him. When he ordered his brother to handcuff you for assaulting an officer, I couldn't restrain myself."]
- I must have missed that chapter, i thought I'd read all of them but I don't remember that happening.
Sarah comes across as a little bit hypocritical here. It's okay for her to slug roy in front of Cassie but not for him? I find myself worried for Joe and wondering what he's getting into. Nice little twist in the tale, I like it, be interesting to see where it leads. Also you ended on a good hook. 'No more obstacles' hmmm I'm not sure I believe her x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I happened right after Cassie came up missing. Cassie was not there when Sara slugged Roy. Roy came to the house and said Cassie wasn't kidnapped but shacking up with her boyfriend like her mother used to do. Which Sara did not do, she was date raped.
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I knew she was date raped, and I read the chapter where they went to the high school reunion and she told him, but I must have missed the one after Cassie went missing. I'll have to check back and catch up x
Comment from acvguard11
ill have to go back and read your other posts but this is really good and i really enjoyed it...great job and keep writing dont let others stop you if you love to write...good luck!!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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ill have to go back and read your other posts but this is really good and i really enjoyed it...great job and keep writing dont let others stop you if you love to write...good luck!!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
Yay, finally she says she is ready. What a log haul it was for him, eh? You've written this very well girl and I love the way you took your time letting them come together. Though I always knew they would. LOL. Great stroy you tell and you do it so very well!!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Yay, finally she says she is ready. What a log haul it was for him, eh? You've written this very well girl and I love the way you took your time letting them come together. Though I always knew they would. LOL. Great stroy you tell and you do it so very well!!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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My pleasure, Barbara!!!
Comment from Connie P
Joe's really worked hard for this relationship. Hopefully, everything is worked out in Sara's heart and she will give herself a chance to be happy. Great chapter. Good news on the chicken livers too! I never realized they were so rich in iron.
Note: "Joe ...?" her*(Her) voice trailed (I believe that's the only edit needed.)
Connie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Joe's really worked hard for this relationship. Hopefully, everything is worked out in Sara's heart and she will give herself a chance to be happy. Great chapter. Good news on the chicken livers too! I never realized they were so rich in iron.
Note: "Joe ...?" her*(Her) voice trailed (I believe that's the only edit needed.)
Connie
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your eagle eye and continued support. I will take care of that.
Comment from mmmichelle34
That was nice I love your work and you have always been helpful to me in need. But if you look it shows your background and a little at top then has big space before you continue to read at first I thought that was it but then find the rest of you writing at bottom. Just so you know could be how the sight is right now :) nice work.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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That was nice I love your work and you have always been helpful to me in need. But if you look it shows your background and a little at top then has big space before you continue to read at first I thought that was it but then find the rest of you writing at bottom. Just so you know could be how the sight is right now :) nice work.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Evil Eddie must have done something. Nobody else has mentioned it. I will check it out. Thank you.
Comment from bowls
Sorry this isn't a good day for you. Positive energy is speeding your way from Canada. Hope you can feel it once the snow has been dusted off. Another nice conversation between the two of them. Finally, it seems Sara has been won over. The only thing I found was near the beginning:"That's one things I love about you." I guess you left out OF THE. All my best for the coming week.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Sorry this isn't a good day for you. Positive energy is speeding your way from Canada. Hope you can feel it once the snow has been dusted off. Another nice conversation between the two of them. Finally, it seems Sara has been won over. The only thing I found was near the beginning:"That's one things I love about you." I guess you left out OF THE. All my best for the coming week.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for catching that error. I will get one it.
Comment from RebelRose
I loved this chapter as much as I have all the ones before it. It's coming down to thew wire, now, to the happy ending I am hoping for. Speaking of happy endings, I am glad your iron count is better. Sorry about the bad day but hopefully, your happy ending will be here soon with good results all around.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I loved this chapter as much as I have all the ones before it. It's coming down to thew wire, now, to the happy ending I am hoping for. Speaking of happy endings, I am glad your iron count is better. Sorry about the bad day but hopefully, your happy ending will be here soon with good results all around.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Charlie Crewes
I believe this is one of, if not the first one of your writings that I've had the pleasure to read. Despite picking it up in the middle, I found it interesting and understood much of the scenario. Your dialogue was very informative and believable. Looking forward to more of your work.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I believe this is one of, if not the first one of your writings that I've had the pleasure to read. Despite picking it up in the middle, I found it interesting and understood much of the scenario. Your dialogue was very informative and believable. Looking forward to more of your work.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I hope you stick around.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a wonderful job tackling this conversation, i really enjoyed the back and forth dialogue, the concern a mother had for her child. i am glad your iron is up. i love chicken livers and would eat them everyday if i could stand to cook them.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a wonderful job tackling this conversation, i really enjoyed the back and forth dialogue, the concern a mother had for her child. i am glad your iron is up. i love chicken livers and would eat them everyday if i could stand to cook them.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I like them, but I can only eat so many chicken livers.
Comment from rama devi
Hello and I'm glad to hear your iron count is ascending! Sorry you had a not so great day. Sending healing thoughts your way. this is a good chapter--sorry I've not kept up (have been busy and having priorities taking me away from reviewing but as I'm down with flu and i can take some time.May be absent another month or so--but praying for your recovery always)
My mind's a little fuzzy so I may have missed nits but I did note one tiny one-
It worked(,) too.
Overall--god flow and sentence construction. true-to life dialog as usual. Nice artwork! :)
Warmly-rd
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Hello and I'm glad to hear your iron count is ascending! Sorry you had a not so great day. Sending healing thoughts your way. this is a good chapter--sorry I've not kept up (have been busy and having priorities taking me away from reviewing but as I'm down with flu and i can take some time.May be absent another month or so--but praying for your recovery always)
My mind's a little fuzzy so I may have missed nits but I did note one tiny one-
It worked(,) too.
Overall--god flow and sentence construction. true-to life dialog as usual. Nice artwork! :)
Warmly-rd
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate your kind review.
