Beware
Avoiding temptation17 total reviews
Comment from sierra scribbler
I love this, especially the photo, such imagery of painful emotion. My hat is off to the writers that enter FanStory contests. I don't like to write what others want me to write- I guess I am too selfish. I like to write whatever I want.
Good luck! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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I love this, especially the photo, such imagery of painful emotion. My hat is off to the writers that enter FanStory contests. I don't like to write what others want me to write- I guess I am too selfish. I like to write whatever I want.
Good luck! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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You are welcome Sierra, and thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Comment from KathyH
Nice job. Good use of the form. Your picture selection was excellent. The last line does a great job of delivering your message. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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Nice job. Good use of the form. Your picture selection was excellent. The last line does a great job of delivering your message. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 20-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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Thanks Kathy, you are very kind, appreciate your time and encouraging review.
Comment from Warrior Priestess
A nice play on the typical "No trespassing" or "Trespassers not allowed" kind of signs. But hmm, I suspect on the road to hell the signs may be more subtle! Also a very cute twist on all of us who at times 'trespass'. Thought provoking read. Thanks.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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A nice play on the typical "No trespassing" or "Trespassers not allowed" kind of signs. But hmm, I suspect on the road to hell the signs may be more subtle! Also a very cute twist on all of us who at times 'trespass'. Thought provoking read. Thanks.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you kindly for your review, much obliged.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Author; the devil holds up ALL kinds of signs - he tells us that liquor is legal and causes no harm, along with cigarettes and driving fast. He tells us that doing drugs is okay - we aren't hurting anyone but ourselves - and gambling - who does that hurt? Yes, he is so evil and has so many fun and shiny things to attract us with. Well done. Good luck in the contest. ~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Dear Author; the devil holds up ALL kinds of signs - he tells us that liquor is legal and causes no harm, along with cigarettes and driving fast. He tells us that doing drugs is okay - we aren't hurting anyone but ourselves - and gambling - who does that hurt? Yes, he is so evil and has so many fun and shiny things to attract us with. Well done. Good luck in the contest. ~patty~
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thanks Patty, appreciate your insight and kind review.
Comment from warbler
This is a very good senryu and the message is good. I enjoyed the imagery that you created. It meets all of the contest rules. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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This is a very good senryu and the message is good. I enjoyed the imagery that you created. It meets all of the contest rules. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you and appreciate your kind review.
Comment from l.raven
This is a small poem with a big meaning to it.And you kidding.The devil invites all to his den of fire.It's up to us not to take the invitation.well worded
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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This is a small poem with a big meaning to it.And you kidding.The devil invites all to his den of fire.It's up to us not to take the invitation.well worded
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much; appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Fiona Hymn
Creative and original, the meaning in this Senryu is many. Intriguing in the way the imagination can raom, this is a fun way to ponder certain derelictions in humanity. Nice use of words to maintain the syllable count and the integrity of the style. A pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Creative and original, the meaning in this Senryu is many. Intriguing in the way the imagination can raom, this is a fun way to ponder certain derelictions in humanity. Nice use of words to maintain the syllable count and the integrity of the style. A pleasure to read.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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What a great and encouraging review, thank yu Fiona, appreciate your kind review and insight.
Comment from Judian James
Another very smart piece of writing. Oh, how the devil loves those who go astray knowingly ... your final line is so very smart. I'm so pleased you found my piece to review, it's how I found your work in kind. Bravo.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Another very smart piece of writing. Oh, how the devil loves those who go astray knowingly ... your final line is so very smart. I'm so pleased you found my piece to review, it's how I found your work in kind. Bravo.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thanks Judian, appreciate the encouragement and your kind review, look forward to reading more of your writings.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This meets all the requirements of the contest as to form and syllable count, and the satori is darkly clever. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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This meets all the requirements of the contest as to form and syllable count, and the satori is darkly clever. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you kindly; I appreciate your time and encouraging review, much obliged.
Comment from Alan K Pease
A darkly humorous cynical poem pointing out the human foibles in the victim on the park bench who had a invitation to visit Hell by a generous Devil who welcomes all Trespassers. Good work. Your competitors will have something to contend with.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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A darkly humorous cynical poem pointing out the human foibles in the victim on the park bench who had a invitation to visit Hell by a generous Devil who welcomes all Trespassers. Good work. Your competitors will have something to contend with.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much; I am very happy that you liked the lines, much obliged.
