Late Night Musing
My grandmother, if alive, would be 111 tomorrow.62 total reviews
Comment from Matoshka
I enjoyed this so much. I could feel the love you had for your Grandmother. I could see her sharing her wisdom of live and arrowheads. LOL I'm so happy you could be with her in the last days, so she was not alone. I loved the integrity and respect for all of you when you gave everything to your Dad. I could almost feel the sneer of your ex and you telling her, I have the memories,. You can't buy those. I loved this very much, and for what it stands for. Blessings. Thank you for sharing your musing, it was a joy.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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I enjoyed this so much. I could feel the love you had for your Grandmother. I could see her sharing her wisdom of live and arrowheads. LOL I'm so happy you could be with her in the last days, so she was not alone. I loved the integrity and respect for all of you when you gave everything to your Dad. I could almost feel the sneer of your ex and you telling her, I have the memories,. You can't buy those. I loved this very much, and for what it stands for. Blessings. Thank you for sharing your musing, it was a joy.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you very much for reading and for such kind feedback! Regards, Bill
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Your so welcome Bill. What a precious memory you've shared. God Bless you.
Comment from BethShelby
Your grandmother sounds like quite a lady. I'm from the south to and my background sounds simular to yours. I was alway medlin' in my grandmas thing too. It is too back your ex wasn't more understanding. There are some things you just have to do and what you did was necessary in order for you to live with yourself. You did it out of love for someone who meant a great deal to you. Your story is well written and held my attention from beginning to end. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Your grandmother sounds like quite a lady. I'm from the south to and my background sounds simular to yours. I was alway medlin' in my grandmas thing too. It is too back your ex wasn't more understanding. There are some things you just have to do and what you did was necessary in order for you to live with yourself. You did it out of love for someone who meant a great deal to you. Your story is well written and held my attention from beginning to end. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Hi Beth - I really appreciate you reading and for your kind feedback. I never thought twice about what I did and would gladly do over again. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from highlander104
Bill, you are a magnificent story teller. This one is full of charm, wit and emotion. I enjoyed every word of it. Got a chuckle out of this line:
"Oh, she thought I was you."
Jean K.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Bill, you are a magnificent story teller. This one is full of charm, wit and emotion. I enjoyed every word of it. Got a chuckle out of this line:
"Oh, she thought I was you."
Jean K.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks for reading Jean! We get so few sixes to give out, I am always most appreciative and consider as a compliment. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment from RKagan
It is quite clear that your first wife did not understand the you were doing this out of love and not responsiblity. Your grandmother sounds like a great lady who you shared beautiful memories with. Blessings to you.
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It is quite clear that your first wife did not understand the you were doing this out of love and not responsiblity. Your grandmother sounds like a great lady who you shared beautiful memories with. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks Roberta - she was all of that and more. Thanks for reading and your kind feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Usually life is more interesting than fiction and this is no exception. The relationship you had must surely make you understand what a deep capacity you have to love someone through all the seasons of their life.
You told this story with such reverance and even though your wife does not sound as if she had any compassion even the way that you portrayed was at best with a sigh. How classy.
Yhe moments of humor are charming, particularily when you told your dad that grandma thought it was him.
Lovely tribute both to grandma and your relationship with a feisty lady.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Usually life is more interesting than fiction and this is no exception. The relationship you had must surely make you understand what a deep capacity you have to love someone through all the seasons of their life.
You told this story with such reverance and even though your wife does not sound as if she had any compassion even the way that you portrayed was at best with a sigh. How classy.
Yhe moments of humor are charming, particularily when you told your dad that grandma thought it was him.
Lovely tribute both to grandma and your relationship with a feisty lady.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks for reading and for your very kind feedback. I try and stretch myself with fiction some times, but non-fiction always draws me back. Warm regards, Bill
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Bill, I used to think that my writing was usually essays and "snapshots" pf human behaviour and that I could never write fiction, but I have been proving nyself wrong using all the cumulative memories and stories in my life and giving them to my characters. You are a very good writer, I'd play with fiction for a while if I were you.
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Bill, I used to think that my writing was usually essays and "snapshots" pf human behaviour and that I could never write fiction, but I have been proving nyself wrong using all the cumulative memories and stories in my life and giving them to my characters. You are a very good writer, I'd play with fiction for a while if I were you.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a wonderful story about the memories of good times you had with your grandmother, i'm glad you had that and saw the value in that.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a wonderful story about the memories of good times you had with your grandmother, i'm glad you had that and saw the value in that.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks for reading Pam and for your kind feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from R. K. Alan
A lifetime of delightful memories that can never be repossessed or taken from you. A few may diminish in brightness but they remain locked away with you forever. You must have enjoyed a wonderful full childhood with your grandparents. Treasure it always. Ray aka Krylon
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A lifetime of delightful memories that can never be repossessed or taken from you. A few may diminish in brightness but they remain locked away with you forever. You must have enjoyed a wonderful full childhood with your grandparents. Treasure it always. Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks for reading Ray. I do have some wonderful memories. It's fun for me to share them. Regards, Bill
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Would love to hear some more. Ray
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Bill, a lifetime of memories is priceless, it makes what you are now. I have the same opinion as you. My father gave me the joy of reading and that's awesome. Pity your ex did not feel the same. This is interesting.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Hi, Bill, a lifetime of memories is priceless, it makes what you are now. I have the same opinion as you. My father gave me the joy of reading and that's awesome. Pity your ex did not feel the same. This is interesting.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks Belinda - I appreciate your feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from Helen Tan
"Why don't you guys take a coffee break?" They did and she left the World in peace.
There's love, bravery and dignity in your reply.
"meddlin". I can hear her now, "Billy, are you meddlin in my things?"
I think there's an apostrophe after - meddlin'. It replaces the missing "g" I'm glad you put this signature line in as I can so hear and envision your grandmother now.
the gun loudly went off
Maybe it's a matter of speech pattern but I usually say -the gun went off loudly.
punching a hole through the mirror at what would have been my belly button.
My apologies but this image made me laugh. In your place I would have stuffed my finger into my belly button just to ensure my intestines didn't spew out.
Putting the gun back in the drawer,
Is this the opening line of a new paragraph/ If so, a line spacing s required.
I think he chose his exit.
Well, I've had my dad move in with me after his stroke for three weeks now. I started with all good intentions and cooked special meals for him. It took a toil on me as he complained and accused me of starving him - he didn't like "healthy, healthy" food. So now I cook whatever I feel like which is still relatively healthy and if not, my consolation is he will die a happy man. Sounds bad huh? He now has a great appetite.
when I and whoever I brought would pig out on her Southern comfort food.
when I and whoever I brought, pigged out on her Southern comfort food.
She done lost the use of her plumbing and I cain't hardly get her up.
This is a wonderful piece of dialogue that you've shared with us.
"A lifetime of memories."
The greatest treasure of all and thank you for sharing this gem from your treasure chest. The story touched me.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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"Why don't you guys take a coffee break?" They did and she left the World in peace.
There's love, bravery and dignity in your reply.
"meddlin". I can hear her now, "Billy, are you meddlin in my things?"
I think there's an apostrophe after - meddlin'. It replaces the missing "g" I'm glad you put this signature line in as I can so hear and envision your grandmother now.
the gun loudly went off
Maybe it's a matter of speech pattern but I usually say -the gun went off loudly.
punching a hole through the mirror at what would have been my belly button.
My apologies but this image made me laugh. In your place I would have stuffed my finger into my belly button just to ensure my intestines didn't spew out.
Putting the gun back in the drawer,
Is this the opening line of a new paragraph/ If so, a line spacing s required.
I think he chose his exit.
Well, I've had my dad move in with me after his stroke for three weeks now. I started with all good intentions and cooked special meals for him. It took a toil on me as he complained and accused me of starving him - he didn't like "healthy, healthy" food. So now I cook whatever I feel like which is still relatively healthy and if not, my consolation is he will die a happy man. Sounds bad huh? He now has a great appetite.
when I and whoever I brought would pig out on her Southern comfort food.
when I and whoever I brought, pigged out on her Southern comfort food.
She done lost the use of her plumbing and I cain't hardly get her up.
This is a wonderful piece of dialogue that you've shared with us.
"A lifetime of memories."
The greatest treasure of all and thank you for sharing this gem from your treasure chest. The story touched me.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks for reading Helen - you are terrific to take the time for helping me write better. The one space problem is Evil Eddie though. I've tried to fix several times. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from Mustang Patty
You were right to be with your grandmother when she passed. It sounds like she was a big part of who you are, and if your ex couldn't understand, then she really didn't understand you. You told the story in a well constructed and organized manner. Reading the story felt natural, and I stayed glued to the page till the end. Well done. ~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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You were right to be with your grandmother when she passed. It sounds like she was a big part of who you are, and if your ex couldn't understand, then she really didn't understand you. You told the story in a well constructed and organized manner. Reading the story felt natural, and I stayed glued to the page till the end. Well done. ~patty~
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks for reading Patty - you are totally right about my grandmother. Thanks for reading and I'm glad that you enjoyed. Regards, Bill
