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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from missy98writer
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Barbara,
Sara needs to chill out! Joe is hopelessly head-over-heels in love with her. Yum chocolate strawberries are delicious and sensual when your man feeds them to you if you have one. I live vicariously through reading and listening to music. Chapter thirty-three is superbly written. Keep on cranking out the hits. I'm sending your a hug across cyber space to give you strength. My prayers go out to you. I look forward to reading you last couple of chapters, my friend.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
reply by missy98writer on 16-Jan-2011
    You are welcomed.
Comment from Missey
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Barbara, I think you are very brave. You just keep plugging away despite things that are going on. Congratulations on your continued work on your novel. I really like this chp, though it was a bit hard to distinguish who was talking at some points in your dialogue.
ex:

"But my life must be boring to you."

"We've discussed that too. Remember the night ...."
Other than that, keep up the good work. Looking forward to seeing Sara and Joe together!

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. I will recheck those areas.
Comment from RebelRose
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I truly hope the iron pills work for you. Keep us posted on that.
The chapter, as usual, is a good one. Man, I'd like to dig into the picnic basket. Yummy.
I'm not worried about how this will turn out. Joe will win out.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    I hope you are correct. I am particial to Joe myself. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
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You drive a porche - Porsche
What another obstacle? What's another obstacle?
Dear Lord - this woman is such a fretter - he assures her he isn't too violent and then she moves on to living apart and he assures her about that and she moves on to his making more money than she does. I am still finding her really really annoying, as in getting on my nerves. He needs to stuff a huge strawberry right down her throat! LOL
Sorry your iron level is misbehaving, Barbara. I hope you avoid a blood transfusion too. I will keep praying and thinking good good thoughts :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your prayers. I am hoping that readers can see how years of the town put down can play havoc with self confidence. That's why I spent so much time in the beginning going into such detail. I hope it worked. I will get on those errors.
reply by adewpearl on 16-Jan-2011
    I just think at some point soon she needs to stop the whining. I really do just want to bitch slap her at this point. LOL
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    I will relook her character. I guess it's not working.
Comment from lola29
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I'm so glad that Joe has a lot patience with Sara because she tries so hard to push him away by talking such nonsense. The man obviously is in love with her, so I wish she would for once just relax and enjoy their time together. This was another great chapter.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    We will have to wait and see what happens from here, but I have a good feeling.
reply by lola29 on 16-Jan-2011
    Barbara, I'm really enjoying this book, and I like Sara very much, but I have a feeling that she doesn't believe in herself the way she should. I can easily understand why Joe loves her.
Comment from c_lucas
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A kept woman only has her body as a bargaining chip. Sara and Joe's relationship goes far above this. Your chapter is very well written. Good job.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    I know. Sara is worried about how others will view their relationship. She has been the town slut for years. She needs to get over it. Thank you for the kind review and support.
reply by c_lucas on 16-Jan-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great chapter for your book, i enjoyed reading it and hope you do well with your next week of chemotherapy,

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 Comment Written 16-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and well wishes.